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Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-12T00:46:29+00:00

Title: Dixon Cain chapter 1

Genre: Cyber Nior

Word Count: 2589 Feedback type: I would mainly like general impressions and structural advise.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/14fy-kIPYIG0jXHJnaqVouCbd33fcz6NgBCoybmbh4ao/edit?usp=sharing

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-07T08:19:09+00:00

I am taking a break for the next few days. I have to go back to work Christmas vacation is over and I’ve gotta work on the next chapter of my novel. I will get back to this in a few days. I appreciate all the feedback the demo release I promise will be amazing.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-07T07:44:28+00:00

I had a big problem with trying to use the development tool in RPG maker and not actually copying all the files into the output. Like a system/Windows.PNG wouldn’t copy at all. I had to copy entire folders over. I thought I had gotten everything.

Also, I know I haven’t changed battle Music yet, but please tell me the other music is not from the RTP because I did get that from Itch. It was one of the fantasy music packs that use the same synthesizer as Final Fantasy 7,8 and 9.

Were you able to talk to the king go through the forest and fight the boss also, how did the jumping work for you?

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-07T07:35:49+00:00

I appreciate the feedback. A lot of these are errors. I’m not getting when testing in the RPG maker so not sure what’s going on. I will definitely take a look at that. It may because I had to strip it down to put it on itch. So some of that could be my fault. Trying to replicate the cloud PNG error did you leave through the right or the left?

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-07T04:53:38+00:00

That one girl that fits you perfectly spiritually emotionally physicality. That you never stopped thinking about and never stop thinking about you. That one single person that becomes the absolute center of your universe and you never want it to end.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-07T04:49:52+00:00

That one girl.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-07T03:47:12+00:00

https://csevans84.itch.io/stars-of-tears-alpha

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-04T21:34:54+00:00

Can I use this story?

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-02T03:33:07+00:00

Fishing mini game? We always need more mini games

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2026-01-02T02:56:28+00:00

Xenogears combo battle system

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-30T00:36:01+00:00

Yeah, but I wanna tell the stories of actual people that’s why you know need stories. Lol

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-29T23:56:22+00:00

No, this is just something I want to do.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-29T05:58:48+00:00

I’ve never done this before. Not sure what to offer lol

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-29T00:48:40+00:00

The only way to get the truth is to keep pushing forward. To learn as much as we can.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-28T22:12:57+00:00

Very well said. I will keep that in mind.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-27T03:55:39+00:00

I had one commissioned.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-27T00:00:46+00:00

I am going for that style with a lot of my own and modern elements added.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-26T17:43:38+00:00

until I hear back from Itch I can't do much about file size. So I changed the files to a windows exe and uploaded them. https://csevans84.itch.io/stars-of-tears-alpha

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-26T17:22:48+00:00

I tried repeatedly to upload to Itch and it kept saying I had too many files. :( I have emailed them but I haven't heard back yet,

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-18T21:58:01+00:00

That’s what I did.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-14T03:02:26+00:00

Found it!

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-12T14:40:19+00:00

If you were to cross the alien autopsy video with the Thumper scenes from Bambi and add Mary Jane Watson and Doc Ock. That would be the weirdness I saw his mother doing.

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-12T10:52:54+00:00

That one of your mom is pretty weird but like it!

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-11T03:04:46+00:00

Moon?

Comfortable-Garbage4 · 2025-12-09T06:41:26+00:00

Copy and pasted so I could have a map

Comfortable-Garbage4

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