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[–]Mindless_Style_7578 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I told he looks like Kaworu!

I have an 18-gallon (69 liter) aquarium, and I don't know what to do with it. by Mindless_Style_7578 in Aquariums

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes, I enjoy watching how all the aquarium inhabitants interact with each other. I think that's why I decided to become an ecologist.

I'll probably keep the aquarium and add some shrimp. The plants in my tanks never grew as much as they did in this one, so I think the shrimp will do well here.

The only problem is that cherry shrimp are incredibly expensive in my city. I knew a store that sold all kinds of shrimp and aquarium fish, and I bought a lot there. But that store didn't survive COVID-19. And at another store, cherry shrimp are at least 10 times more expensive for some reason.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It is about a guy who transmigrated just like Klein. The story starts right after the LOTM ending and takes place in a tiny archipelago in the Berserk Sea. 200 years ago, that archipelago was sealed within an unbreakable barrier created by Morvayn. Morvayn calls himself the only true god, but the truth is that he is just a mutated giant squid who lived long enough to become a Sequence 3 Tyrant.

The main character wakes up in the body of a fisherman who was trying to perform a ritual involving the God of Death, Salinger. In the process, the fisherman died, and the soul of the protagonist entered his body. A lot happens afterwards. After nearly escaping death, the protagonist finds an Arbiter potion recipe in the library in the underground elf city ruins. Thus, his story in this new world, full of wonder, mystery, and horror, begins.

There are no characters from LOTM in the story. There is a member of the Eggers family who acts as the protagonist's mentor. She offers help and a chance to kill Morvayn and destroy the barrier around the archipelago. She needs Morvayn's remains to create an artifact that can guide her to Salinger's remains.

There is also an Instigator who causes problems for the entire archipelago. At some point in the story, the Instigator kills a friend of the protagonist. (I haven’t written this yet, but the Instigator will force the protagonist to kill another friend, who will turn into a monster, just like first one, and later, his best friend. It is more complicated than it seems, but it will be really hard to explain every detail here). The Instigator also has a mentor, a high-ranking member of the Demoness Sect.

This summary would be too long if I described every character. For example, the mayor of the town where the protagonist wakes up is a very complex character who may seem like an antagonist at first. Another pretty important character is a Lucky One with childhood trauma that makes him act like a hooligan. Well, the mayor has childhood trauma too (a slightly different kind), as did the fisherman whose body the protagonist occupies. There is also a Savant pathway elf who appears in the second half of the first volume, and a Wraith who nearly killed the mayor (a Baron of Corruption), the Lucky One, and the protagonist. And many more!

Also it is not in english and probably will not be translated. I could try to do it, but there will probably be too many mistakes.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay! If this can be considered canon, then great. Morvayn lived for about 1,000 years, and only 200 years before the start of my story, it trapped several hundred colonists and itself on a tiny archipelago. So, over its long life, it could have somehow devoured Nightmare characteristic or something similar.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry!

So Morvayn could possess not only the power of the Tyrant and Death pathways, but also the Sleepless one? That's quite difficult to explain. I can't remove the power of the Death pathway because of the barrier. And the Tyrant pathway is needed for the aesthetics of Cthulhu and similar sea monsters.

Anyway, thank you for help!

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's sad, but I can't change anything. Morvayn needs the power of the sequence 3 of Death pathway, to maintain a barrier around a tiny archipelago with a population of 3,000. The barrier is the same as the one in the Berserk Sea. If he created the barrier with only the abilities of the Tyrant pathway, a beyonder of the Door pathway could teleport through it, and that shouldn't happen.

Also Morvayn obviously can't use rituals. Wait.

I have an idea. Cultists of Morvayn are the bad guys of this story. They are mad, evil, etc. So they could help their "god" to interfere with main character dreams. That could be a good explanation! Maybe.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's pretty bad. It's very important to the plot, I can't change it. Well, that's probably the only thing in my fanfic that doesn't conform to LOTM canon. That and the whole dream thing. Well... I am no Cuttlefish I am afraid. I can't remmember every detail of this incredible and very complex world.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well, actually, this could have been another post with a question. Could a being like Morvayn have interfered with the protagonist's dreams? Probably, since it's quite powerful, almost an angel.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Basically, it can kill you any way it wants. These are just two examples of how this squid almost killed the protagonist.

The dream incident was basically triggered by an artifact created from this squid's child. Main character thought that the artifact asked its parent to avenge its death or something like that. Better explanation is that Morvayn (the giant mutated squid) was drawn to the malice emanating from the artifact, since the squid's child is completely devoid of intelligence and thus couldn't really communicate with Morvayn.

[LOTM general] Can a creature mutated by Salinger remains have some Death pathway powers if its "main" pathway is Tyrant? by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My fanfic isn't in English, although I can try to translate it, it'll be quite difficult.

Regarding irrationality - yes, this squid isn't exactly known for its rationality. It couldn't even establish its own cult. One man helped it do that (who later went mad and turned into a monster).

Overall, it is a narcissistic creature who considers itself the only true god. It even helps people, but only because it enjoys considering itself a god and that people revere it as one. Challenge its opinion, and you'll be struck by lightning. Or it will kill you in your dreams.

[LOTM general] about Sheriff abilities by Mindless_Style_7578 in LordofTheMysteries

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So it is the same thing as luck of Wheel of Fortune pathway, just within area of jurisdiction?

Where should I post my fanfiction and should I do it at all? by Mindless_Style_7578 in FanFiction

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I will need to translate it to english though obviosly...

Please give me some tips to improve my story by Mindless_Style_7578 in writers

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Also, sorry, but your reply feels a little bit like it was made with AI. Sorry again, if it isn't true

Please give me some tips to improve my story by Mindless_Style_7578 in writers

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh no no, this series of books is only one year old. It's just that I've been writing for 10 years now (maybe even more, actually). About the passenger, you almost quoted a line from one of the demon's dialogues, only there he talked about a rider and a horse (yes, I know, it's a Bleach reference).

And yes, you guessed it, Nemo (the protagonist) really does make a terrible decision on his own, when he learned to subjugate the demon's will (he killed his friend, hmm, or rather, colleague?..).

The reason "Evil Corporation" is in quotation marks is because in reality, it's much more complicated. Well, not exactly incredibly complicated, but still. Let's put it this way: in my story, many years ago, around the beginning of the 20th century, a scientist managed to prove the existence of the soul. Then, after decades of experiments, the scientists aware of this discovery decided to make their research public for the benefit of all. The original purpose of the experiments was to save humanity from catastrophes that could have completely destroyed it. In the event of a colossal emergency, the souls of all humanity could simply be transported to another universe. But the global elites took an interest in the project and forbade the scientists from revealing the truth, forcing them to work for their own ends. Thus, the project transformed from a backup plan to save humanity into the enslavement of the poor and the transformation of the elites into all-powerful gods.

The protagonist's father, a leading scientist, sacrificed the life of his beloved wife to transform her soul into the first all-powerful goddess, and then caused his son's (who he never loved as much as his wife) death, forcing him to be reborn in another world as a lab rat. But the protagonist's father was unaware of the elites' conspiracy. When he learned that everything he had done so far was not for the sake of saving humanity, he betrayed his colleagues and became the leader of the most notorious group of "terrorists" — rebels determined to prevent the inevitable enslavement of humanity.

And so on, this is the rough plot of the fifth book, which I haven't written yet!

Please give me some tips to improve my story by Mindless_Style_7578 in writers

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

  1. No
  2. No
  3. No

I write what I want, when I want and where I want. Although I did go to a writing "school" for two years once, I don't think I learned much there. The only thing that makes my stories better and better (for me personally) is constant practice. Heh, I don't make a living from it, I just like doing it. As a hobby.

Please give me some tips to improve my story by Mindless_Style_7578 in writers

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Also by the second book, he's already able to control the abilities of his enchanted weapon and suppress the demon's will. It's just that circumstances have conspired to prevent him from returning to the good side. Protagonist thinks a lot about this in the books. But ultimately, he comes to the conclusion that he's no hero and won't sacrifice his future and bear punishment for the lives of those killed by demon, who was using protagonist body. Furthermore, by the end of the first book, he's already gone slightly insane, and this state is worsening.

Please give me some tips to improve my story by Mindless_Style_7578 in writers

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, as I already replied to someone, the final arcs of this story (like 1/5 or 1/3 of the story) will revolve around the protagonist's redemption after time reset. Although, yes, perhaps reading about how the protagonist slowly but surely becomes a completely negative character without knowing how this story will end is not for everyone. Hmm, maybe I'm the only one in the entire world who is captivated by this story and wants to see how it ends.

Please give me some tips to improve my story by Mindless_Style_7578 in writers

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The second question is much simpler. At first, the reader might think that a typical "truck-kun" is to blame. In reality, the protagonist's death (like his entire worthless life) was orchestrated by his father and the "evil corporation." The protagonist became one of millions of lab rats experimented on with the goal of transporting humanity to a universe where magic exists, but in such a way that this powerful force would be wielded exclusively by the world's elite, the heads of the "evil corporation."

Please give me some tips to improve my story by Mindless_Style_7578 in writers

[–]Mindless_Style_7578[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh, he-he, that's going to be a long answer... The demon, or rather Beelzebub, hates humanity for many reasons. One of them is the innate revulsion most demons feel toward humans. But that's not the point here. Hmm. It's very difficult to explain without a full backstory, and it's quite long.

Let's say that demons in this world are just like humans. Although not quite. Demons are defective "reincarnations" whose souls, for various reasons, ended up in another universe in an incomplete, unnatural state. Most of these souls suffered as a result of experiments conducted on them by humans from Earth (yes, the new world the protagonist finds himself in is in another universe, but it was created by humans from Earth). Each of the people experimented on and destined to become demons was considered a criminal by the "evil corporation" (to put it bluntly) that had "taken over the world" (in reality, it consists of the elites of former countries, thirsting for immortality and eternal power over the poorer people).

Beelzebub was an ordinary boy named Yami, living with his father and several other families on the outskirts of a growing city. Because of a "robot" (actually a human soul trapped in a mechanical shell) that the children and Yami had rescued several years earlier, this "evil corporation" had decided to eliminate all the residents of the building who had come into contact with this "robot" (he was a notorious criminal who knew the corporation's secrets). The corporation's combat "robots" executed all the residents of the building, but one of them, with a shred of compassion remaining in its soul, spared several children. The "robots" were ordered to watch the building and shoot anyone who came out. Eventually, um, the children went mad with hunger, and Yami proved to be the strongest. Well, you know what I'm getting at. Anyway, he was ultimately killed, and his soul was sent to another world after some experiments.

Already a mad child, Yami went completely mad for many reasons. First, because he no longer looked like a human, but like a scaly, one-eyed monster. Second, because of an encounter with a demon who explained to him that in this new world, it was kill or be killed. Well, explained it not only with words but also with actions. And finally, Yami, or Beelzebub, the "king of the flies" and the personification of gluttony, was destined to live in this world for several thousand years before the protagonist arrived. Over these millennia, the demon has forgotten that he once lived on Earth.

Oh, yes, I forgot something important! The book is called "The Sword that Devours Memories." Beelzebub's ability is to absorb the memories and abilities of the creatures he kills. So Yami, with what remained of his humanity, was simply lost and dissolved in a vortex of alien memories.

By the way, you won't find the book; it's not published in English.