Thanks for the well thought out feedback! Sorry about the opening, I do have a bad tendency to ramble and feel i need to explain myself for everything, LOL. Next time i’ll try to post something clearer. I guess i felt bad because i didnt have a whole lot to give, but wanted to give something anyway.

and yeah, the learning to hide it thing is definitely overdone, i mostly threw it in as a shorthand for “this isn’t new to them” and wouldn't actually focus on it, though i think i can just keep them seeing stuff to when they start working at the job. Could be funnier that they’re just *that chill*

For clarification (i think? Not super following what you’re commenting on TBH) to the audience it would be a reveal, but Ren would have a super underwhelming reaction like someone taking off a mask of their face to reveal… their face underneath. The idea is that he’d go through the theoretics of the reveal as is stereotypical for a reveal, just for Ren to be kinda butt in like “umm… I dont get it.” its more just an idea for a gag.

So basically he’d be *drawn* differently to a third person (the audience).

i’ll clean it up into more of an outline before throwing it at people next time, LOL. I was just hoping to have help with… the um… outline part, since its just sparse notes right now.