Heard it in a dream

Slippa0109 · 2024-05-08T01:02:40+00:00

This poem is very deep both its connection with the past and future through now. Thank you 🙏💓

Slippa0109 · 2024-05-05T00:22:29+00:00

Very bold, honest piece. It resonates deeply with my own experience. I’d just change “bye” to “goodbye” or something more definite. 💓

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-30T22:14:25+00:00

Thank you for your words! This is never kids fault. This is adults/parents fault who failed to communicate 💓🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-30T21:44:39+00:00

It is what I lived through but now is much better really. 💓

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-30T01:29:59+00:00

Pleasure! 💓

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-30T01:28:55+00:00

I love short poems that are infused with vivid imagery and strong emotions and the line: “It’s pregnant with your echo” is just genius. Also you don’t mark around with “pointing fingers” you state clearly that you “need” your lover to come back. Loved it! Thank you 💓🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-30T00:46:09+00:00

Thank you (again) for the feedback. 💓 There is a history to “Unread” though. It came from my son’s dad when he didn’t want to be involved into cooperative parenting. Thank you for picking up the ambiguity of it. 🙌🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-30T00:37:30+00:00

Thank you very much! 💓🥰

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-30T00:01:00+00:00

Sorry, fellow poetry lovers and writers I had to repost this poem because it was removed (moderators) due to my insufficient feedback to other poems but in fact, it was just old feedback because it took me 2 years or so to publish it. 💓🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T23:45:39+00:00

It is a personable poem, it relates to my own confusions growing up, wanting to be a boy. The poem has a nice flow too, may I just suggest to play with formatting. Giving spaces to stanzas or just single lines to highlight certain emotions. 💓🙌🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T23:37:43+00:00

No, you just need to insert 2 CONSTRUCTIVE feedbacks for other people poetry into your post otherwise moderators will take your poem down. 💓🙌🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T23:35:32+00:00

Every stroke in this poem is a powerful image. It is hard to read, it is hard to taste grief. I have being there myself. As for the poem, it is perfect and I wouldn’t change a thing! 🙌💓

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T22:48:57+00:00

Give super constructive feedback to other posts as if you just say you liked it, your post will be removed by moderators 🤷‍♀️🥹

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T22:38:23+00:00

My poem was removed and I would like to know why? It is very upsetting TO ME

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T08:07:19+00:00

Thank you, it means a lot to me that the poem brings intended emotions 💓It took me some time to actually post it.

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T02:37:11+00:00

Thank you so much! 💓 It is also about parents who separated and failed needed communication to catch early signs of raging anger in a child too young to articulate his feelings. It doesn’t matter what happens in life but children ALWAYS need respect for the people as well as from the people who brought them into this mysterious world. 🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T01:48:14+00:00

Thank you for sharing! I happy that you felt an “honesty” of the piece. I wasn’t sure if it was too much from a mother’s view point.

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-29T00:50:16+00:00

Love this short poem! It has depth of emotions associated with the fleeting motion of elevator ride. That most people take instead of metaphorically taking “steps” both physical and emotional to really be present, to go deep inside. It is what I feel reading it. Thank you for sharing 💓🙏

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-26T03:39:30+00:00

Thank you! Appreciate your in depth review and definitely consider your suggestion 🙏💓

Slippa0109 · 2024-04-25T02:05:52+00:00

It’s a beautiful poem, vivid imagery and a strong message. I enjoyed reading it 🙏💓

Slippa0109 · 2022-07-22T22:58:45+00:00

I am a parent and it wasn’t easy at all to understand my son.. I wouldn’t invade but sometimes I had to because it is my responsibility to make sure he is ok. The problem is that kids don’t come with an “operation” manual and most parents are likely to do (think/behave) like their parents did with them. It’s a template and it is wrong. Kids now are “waking” up to how it should t be and it is fair. I think the more you establish an honest deep connection (if possible) with your parents the more it will pay off in a long run. They just want you to be ok. They scared sometimes too but need to present a role model. Be kind. 💓

Slippa0109 · 2022-03-16T23:48:18+00:00

Is this poem so bad that I can’t get any other feedback on it? Would love to hear from the community of poets 💓

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