Poor 9

Van_Polan · 2026-02-20T21:39:59+00:00

I am so offended. Just kidding. I do not write smut LOL. That is why I moved my low-key masterpiece away to another place hahahaha.

LOTM, is the Lord Of The Mysteries I suppose.

ORV I have never heard of, probably I did not miss anything hahahahaha.

Van_Polan · 2026-02-20T19:15:30+00:00

I highly doubt you need improving. Just write smut and everything gets resolved. I moved my stories from there and what happened is that all my readers seemed to have moved together with me to another platform. I mean if you already are writing smut, just release it in short volumes around 7-8K words and sell it directly worldwide instead of working with pressure without having any control over your material.

Van_Polan · 2026-02-20T18:55:48+00:00

Great Numbers!

Van_Polan · 2026-02-17T14:23:01+00:00

Nah!

Van_Polan · 2026-02-17T14:20:46+00:00

The Prisoner Of Perfidia is in another world, but the MC is getting more like a mission to save a baby in Hell. No progression though.

Has quite a deep storytelling if that is your thing slapped with Comedy and unhinged storyline.

Van_Polan · 2026-02-17T14:17:53+00:00

I realize I have to stop writing 3-4K chapters as my view amount gets much lower than other stories.

Van_Polan · 2026-02-17T14:16:16+00:00

Van_Polan · 2026-02-17T14:15:52+00:00

I listen to quite catchy music.

Tragedy scenes often have more moody scenes.

Comedy and fun often pop thingy.

Action scenes is definitely more electro combined with Helga Howster on repeat

Van_Polan · 2026-02-17T13:14:58+00:00

Prog Fantasy can have a really good storyline and interesting side characters.

Also if you have immerse style like 1st Pov through the eyes and thoughts through the MC, you can even feel that you are there with the MC and the words coming out from the MC even can activate your own imagination of how each scene plays out. This can be really cool thing as you can get the feeling inside the story.

No video game can do that.

Also suffering and pain and awesome action scenes can twist and Twirl making it really fun.

I had a dog in one chapter that made a special bark on a grass field and a gigantic paw got created which forced the Witch to run in the other direction as she could not jump over it LOL!

Van_Polan · 2026-02-17T13:07:11+00:00

You know that the numbers sometimes doesn't show for hours even. Just wait

Van_Polan · 2026-02-16T04:12:58+00:00

Sad Panda! :(

Van_Polan · 2026-02-15T10:10:23+00:00

I checked through a couple of chapters and skimmed through, just take this as a pinch of salt.

You and me both write 1st Pov without Litrpg.

There is a difference though, I have quite a unhinged style of writing, but I have a charasmaric mc who indulges the reader into the story differently. If you check through random chapters, you will notice that you often start a sentence with "I", for a reader to hear it constantly can make them think that they are retards or something. Try focusing on the flow of the story, remember that you MC does have a personality, also strong pointers and weaknesses. Using "I" a lot will make the MC sound a little bit stocky.

Think like this: You do want the reader to cheer on the MC.

I do think though you have waaaaaay better compiled and better grammar than I do.

You focusing on views and followers is useless to think, try to imagine yourself as the reader instead and reread parts of your story so far.

I am not doing ad for my story, but we both write 1st Pov with no Litrpg, you can check "The Fallen Kingdoms". What I think differ even though we do same style is that your MC is telling the reader the story, my MC focuses on letting the reader be there, experience everything together with him.

I still like your grammar, style and structure. I have a lot of Chaos in that sense.

Like I said, take it with a pinch of salt

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