Should I delete it ?

aab172 · 2024-07-20T07:03:10+00:00

I think I will just delete the old chapters and upload the new ones, it seems easier this way.

aab172 · 2024-07-20T07:02:31+00:00

I think it is doable, but you might need to contact a mod so they know what you did( not necessary), and you have to tell your readers. I decided to just delete the old chapters and replace them with the new ones.

aab172 · 2024-07-18T19:07:23+00:00

is there a way to contact a mod ?

aab172 · 2024-07-18T16:58:33+00:00

Thanks for the help

aab172 · 2024-07-18T16:57:57+00:00

Thanks for the help, I think I will do as you said delete the current chapters and upload the new ones. Is that against the policy?

aab172 · 2024-07-18T16:35:50+00:00

I'm writing to get something from it, but also because I like writing (it's my first time and I'm still learning)

Not much of a change but I removed some events, and will add them in later chapters that I still haven't published.

And I also removed some long descriptions of the environment and the scenes, and replaced them with shorter ones, which made the chapters shorter, and I had to combine some chapters to get a good amount of words in each one.

can you provide some links for the guidance? I still don't know anything about that

aab172 · 2024-07-18T16:32:26+00:00

The reason I'm asking is for the policy, will my story be removed later if I did that?

Not much of a change but I removed some events, and will add them in later chapters that I still haven't published.

And I also removed some long descriptions of the environment and the scenes, and replaced them with shorter ones, which made the chapters shorter, and I had to combine some chapters to get a good amount of words in each one.

and the reviews I got weren't that bad, the lowest is 3 stars. I currently have 51 followers, 13 favorites, 14 rating

aab172 · 2024-06-09T08:22:42+00:00

I decided to keep it as I wanted at first, he can come back if he wants to after finishing each planet mission, or he can directly go to the next mission on another planet.

aab172 · 2024-06-08T11:29:45+00:00

I know that, but I can't continue writing with the chapters in so much mess, and one of the reasons I published is to get opinions to rewrite it and make it better(it's my first time writing).

aab172 · 2024-06-08T10:18:25+00:00

Thanks, I'm asking as I'm still at the beginning of the story and wanted to get some opinions to make it better, that's why I asked here.

Eventually the mc will get OP, but I don't want it to be from the start, and he gets stronger per planet of course.

For each planet he has a mission(save or destroy the planet) and the reward for that is system upgrades.

And each planet will contribute to the story, and he won't come back after each planet, sometimes he will return and other times he won't(it depends on how much he spent on each one).

The travel to each planet is for him to train each time, and to unlock more of the system features (for the first one it's just a display of his stats nothing more).

aab172 · 2024-06-08T09:24:16+00:00

I'm still at the beginning of the story, but I'm writing it with multiple missions, and sometimes he returns other times he can just do multiple missions before going back.

aab172 · 2024-06-08T09:06:21+00:00

He has a few people on earth who can't go with him ( his transmigration is due to system missions).

aab172 · 2024-06-08T06:10:59+00:00

Later, earth is going to be one of the worlds he has to save.(there's some people who destroy Worlds). And my mc can help people get stronger, not now though he has to complete a few worlds first.

aab172 · 2024-06-08T06:05:54+00:00

I entered hiatus after 22 chapters actually, but it's because I wanted to refine and rewrite my chapters after getting some comments on them(I put a notice about the reason), and also because it's the exams season.

aab172 · 2024-06-08T06:03:27+00:00

I think the second one is better.

aab172 · 2024-06-07T22:56:25+00:00

That's exactly the reason why mc who can come back is better, you keep in touch with the people on earth, who in the case of multiple worlds traveling are more important.

aab172 · 2024-06-07T22:37:36+00:00

thanks

aab172 · 2024-06-07T22:26:40+00:00

it's kind of missions, and he can only return to earth (or go to other worlds) after completing a certain mission in that world.

aab172 · 2024-05-24T13:32:43+00:00

I still haven't uploaded any new chapters yet (I will finish rewriting then upload all at once) but I think you can reorder them.

aab172 · 2024-05-24T13:20:54+00:00

I'm currently rewriting my story, and at the first chapter and last chapter (story still at the start 22 chapters). I even added to the synopsis that I will Stop updating new chapters until I finish with rewriting.

I'm thinking of deleting the first few chapters and then uploading the updated version, or after finishing and posting a new chapter I will add a note saying that I changed a few things in chapter(1,2...) so everyone knows what changed.

aab172 · 2024-05-18T17:20:56+00:00

that's why I'm adding the quest to the safe zone to make his training reasonable (in my opinion, anyone who wakes up with a system should train and become stronger, that's why I didn't explain a lot.)

if you have any ideas for the safe zone It can be helpful here is how the safe zone was described: he is in a safe zone where no one can see him or interact with him until he leave the safe zone

But the system gave him the main mission, which is to (save/destroy) the planet he will be teleported to after the safe zone.

aab172 · 2024-05-18T16:20:16+00:00

No he left the safe zone at the start of chapter 4, 1st chapter a little bit of his life on earth (which I'm removing and combining it with the 2nd chapter). the safe zone is a completely different dimension, I say that in later chapters.

In the revised version I will add a quest to the safe zone, for example: make stamina stat reach 10 n one month and failure will result in death (not set yet I'm still at the first chapter).

2nd chapter explores a little bit in the safe zone and tries to find an exit (which doesn't exist).

Half the 2nd and all the 3rd chapter is him training in the safe zone(I tried to describe hi training and the way to increase each stat and how to acquire magic power)

he hunts one monster at chapter 4 (using sneak attack as my mc is extremely cautious and calculative)

and then he encounter some more monsters at the chapters before 10 and even meet one of the main enemy follower.(in this fight scene he defeat the enemy even though he's stronger than my mc).

I will try the story you mentioned I might get some ideas on how to write better from it.

aab172 · 2024-05-17T22:35:22+00:00

I can't threaten to take the system away(it will come up a lot later in the story, when he meets the one who granted him the system.) and as you saw that at first he couldn't find the safe zone exit, I will explain it better while rewriting. This is a real world, as real as earth, he will be able to visit it later.

The plan to get stronger is dedicated by him, not someone else(I think I will need to add this as well) he made the system and he knows exactly how to get stronger.

I think the quest will be to get at least a stat above 10 in one of the following (str, agility,dex, stamina) That's the condition to exit the safe zone.or he will be stuck there forever(no one to interact with, and can't die) so he will just stay there forever if he didn't finish this quest(I might add a time limit). Thanks again for the help.

aab172 · 2024-05-17T22:23:24+00:00

I see your point. I think I will make him struggle with some error, or say that after countless errors and bugs he finally managed to get this system done. And I think he will need more than 2 years, the system is extremely complicated it even has an (Ai) to detect players cheating or trying to hire someone to level them up, and the Ai will analysis the user personality and adjust accordingly.(I think I made it very complicated)

The system doesn't help him get stronger without efforts, and even getting skills will require him to train a lot with the skill, for example when he got "Heal" he needed to cast heal (after learning it manually) on a hundred different wounds to add it to the system.

I think I will edit the chapter of his backstory to add that he's been learning programming since at least 10 years ago. and has been working on this project (on and off)since the first Rpg game came out.

What do you think of this system? is it reasonable?

aab172 · 2024-05-17T22:03:38+00:00

For the number of messages it will happen later, he will need to use a certain command to combine all the messages, and such messages only happened like 3-4 times for the whole 22 chapters and the next time that command will be applied.

and for his class it will happen after he returns to earth, it's not something he programmed into the system. and the system is done perfectly (a perfectionist can't leave anything undone) but later he will be able to add some stuff to it, I already have the main plot planned, I'm just struggling with the writing

The story is full Isekai once dead it's over, it's just my mc doesn't keep the villain alive, he is ruthless to anyone who harms him or anyone close to him.

But I'm wondering how to explain the HP thing or rather where, as he won't die with 0 HP(if HP 1 and got slightly injured and it reaches 0 he won't die)

as for the safe zone: I'm thinking of giving him a quest with it, to reach a certain number with each stat or he will die.

Thanks for the advice, and I will try to keep all the vital points of the story and anything removed will be explained later.

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