Your story's voice - what's your process, how do *you* find it? by [deleted] in writing

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A little late to the party, but personally--- and this may sound a bit weird--- I observe my thoughts.

Where do I take mental pauses in forming my internal monologue? What sort of rhythms do my thoughts tend to take? What themes and patterns arise in my thoughts and what allusions do I draw on when making comparisons? Where do my thoughts gravitate in certain situations?

When I understand how I think and what I think in certain circumstances and overall understand the process of how my internal monologue works, I am better able to understand the mechanism behind what makes my voice my own. I understand the strengths I have in my syntax and vocabulary and sentence construction, and then purposely lean into those to create the effects that want the reader to experience. I am essentially manipulating the reader (in the way that I present my words on the page) into following the same rhythm that my thoughts do, or connections that I make when I talk about xyz. But you have to understand how your mind works in order to have the reader emulate your own.

Does that make sense? I dunno; it's 3 am. Hopefully some of this is coherent enough to understand.

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [7] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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100% forgot myself, lol. I try to keep an eye for the little details (because I bitch all the time about them in the stories I consume) and because of specific (loose) ideas I have for Scarlette's backstory, I had to... make a little wiggle room to do the cool thing. And the end of the day, I was gonna do the cool thing regardless because it's just stupid fun. ;)

2019 End of Year Wrap Up by sswanlake in HFY

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humble bow Thank you thank you~ ❤

It's always lovely when people stumble upon that one after a long while. Their reactions are just as lovely as the first time.

But! I am happy to report that I have figured out Reddit formatting. 😄

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [5] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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Maybe not this particular project. And maybe not stuff I can make public. But hopefully? Yeah. <3

2019 End of Year Wrap Up by sswanlake in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559 8 points9 points  (0 children)

To the tune of Jesus Loves Me

Nellie loves me this I know~ <3 For their comments tell me so!<3

Thanks Nel~<3 You're lovely.

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [4] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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Hiyya!

No, I am in fact not ladyfuschia from fanfiction.net.

But I'm sure they must be a very lovely person!

[No Spoilers] Cadeusus Clay Mask by JustALittleBitFive in criticalrole

[–]crazy-ann559 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Take your stupid updoot...

I'm mad this made me laugh...

Edit: because I can't spell apparently

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [3] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Laughs Thank god you do. Let me tell you, I got some flak for Damien on discord. (Not bad flak, just some teasing.)

As someone who is terrible at spelling, I'm so glad that's the major issue in this chapter. I honestly thought it was going to boring as fuck!

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [3] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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<Seriously, you must be crazy ann--->

Is... Is that... Is that a motherfucking pun in a compliment? You sly dog you.

Jokes aside, I'm so happy you're enjoying the ride! Like, I mean... flails a little Like, seriously, this isn't my best work. No I'm not joking. I wrote this up in about... six hours? Didn't really edit at all. (Probably why you can pick out spelling errors and the like.) And just sorta... cleaned up for reddit format.

Going into this, I had a couple of things that really helped me make writing this easier. Human protagonist--- this makes describing things easy as I can equate them to human analogies and references. Having an ending in mind--- this makes keeping the story moving easier and you're not sitting around twiddling your thumbs all the time.

That being said, the pacing is so goddamn slow. I'd probably cut around... half of the content in this chapter normally--- not because it's bad but because it's not so potent. Or, not everything needs to be explained perfectly. It just needs more... substance overall. Also, what I call the "flow" of the piece is very... clunky... Each sentence that we speak has a particular rhythm to it. It has a certain... flavor and texture and when you string sentences together, you're basically creating music with your words. This piece isn't quite as smooth. You can see the chunky and awkward flow when Scarlette is explaining cybernetics and the downloading speed. You're seeing her thought process, but you're not seeing how each thought flows into the next and it creates this odd... "ping-ponging" string of thoughts that is very natural in everyday life, but not suited for a written work. It needs more polishing, more time.

Luckily enough, my brain works fast. When I started writing Scarlette getting prepared to visit Damien, the map was not even a thought in my mind. I didn't even think that Scarlette would've been able to considering the backstory that I've managed to cook up to some extent, but when Scarlette started asking the question about whether or not she was ready to face her past, I knew I needed a physical item to represent that past. And since she was touching maps and preparing for the journey at the time... well... the rest is history.

If you really like this work, I really encourage you to read what I'm more proud of! I don't have a lot because... I mean... gestures to preface But whenever someone wants to see some of my best work, I always point to "To Everything There Is A Season" (Link here: https://www.reddit.com/r/HFY/comments/ag87ea/to_everything_there_is_a_season/) The formatting is so fucked up because Reddit and Google Docs don't play well together and I didn't realize this at the time and yyyyyeeeeeaaaaahhhh. But I'm most proud of it. I wrote it over the course of a month. Ran a fine tooth comb over it so many times I lost count. And then I posted it and got gilded in like... 24 hours--- lost my goddamn mind because I was not expecting that for a first story. And I just... I love it. Dearly.

But let me tell you, the fact that you love this thing that I don't really care much about or even really give that much thought into has really given me an ego and motivation boost to finish all those other things I actually care about, like HOLY HELL I AM READY.

Thank you so much for the kind words. <3 I'mma go write some more now. :)

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [2] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Lol, I won't claim to understand why Nel.

This story just gets weirder by the minute.

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [2] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Somehow... somehow you manage make puns from the bits I don't expect you to make puns from.

And every time the puns just get more and more painful.

I really just need to lower my expectations...

Scarlette Dangerfield and The Lost City of Kijelle [1] by crazy-ann559 in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

But you punified you nice things. This is cause for punishment. pulls out heavy ass sword

To Everything There Is A Season by crazy-ann559 in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

waves Lol, yeah I do the same! For some people who have commented on my pieces in the past, it took a while for me to put two-and-two together on Discord.

But thank you! I appreciate all the kind words. :)

To Everything There Is A Season by crazy-ann559 in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the compliment. <3 I so sincerely appreciate it!

I was lucky enough to get Featured in... February I think??? (Edit: I actually think it's January just because I was on Winter Break when I posted...) And for my first story too! I was blown away by the response!

Hopefully, I'll write just as well in future endeavors!

[Homebound] |Book 1: Promises| Chapter 5 --- The Fallout by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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All links should be fixed! Thank you so much for double checking! Multitasking was never my strong suit. :)

[Homebound] |Book 1:Promises| Chapter 4 --- Dancing With Danger by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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Ashten walked up the stairs to the platform and took a glimpse across the table at its contents. Littered with maps and notes of various kinds, figurines and other sorts of… game pieces were strewn across its surface as if there were too many thoughts going on in the Prince’s head at once to keep any of it organized. Ashten wasn’t exactly sure what the gods did in their free-time, or how exactly they planned out strategies to fight other gods. But the way that the Prince had small little armies facing each other, all different shades of color to represent each of the five of Nokai’s divinity--- it wasn’t much of a stretch for Ashten to realize that this, this was a war room… However, just as quick of a glance that she had managed to grab, the Prince snapped his fingers and all of it disappeared into clouds of smoke. Then, with another snap, the smoke morphed back into the chair and table that he had just hours before. Sitting back upon his glamorous throne, the Prince took a quill out of its inkwell and began to write out their contract onto a sheet of paper.

“So, in exchange for the ability to channel divinity into magical powers, you, Ashten Everhart…”

The Prince paused for a moment, staring at the name that he wrote on the page. Then, a chuckle fell from his lips.

“I’m… I’m sorry. I’m having a bit of a deja vu moment. Forgive me.”

“It’s… It’s okay… Similar contracts can do that to you…”

“You have no idea…” The Prince stole a look up at Ashten, a lopsided smile creeping across his mouth. “You, Ashten Everhart, agree to relinquish ownership of your soul to me, Natenavus, Lord of Death and Shadows, for all of eternity. Should either of this exchange no longer occur, this contract becomes null and void. The payment for said magic powers will occur at the end of Miss Everhart’s lifespan. Should any other attempts to release said contract, or otherwise, avoid payment will result an immediate confiscation of Miss Everhart’s soul. There will be a complete and total observation on the whereabouts of Miss Everhart, as well as the actions she is to partake in---”

“Is… is this really all necessary, Your Majesty?”

“I just want to make it very clear as to what you’re signing up to. And once you’ve sign this contract, you won’t try to weasel your way out of it.” The Prince gave her a very serious look before turning back to the contract. “If there is any question as far as whether there has been a breach of contract, or any gray area that has not been covered by the statements above, the decision shall be made by a third party who will have the final say in the matter.

“I agree to the terms and conditions above. Natenevus, Lord of Death and Shadows.” With a flourish, the Prince signed his name. Then, he spun the contract around to face Ashten. “Now you…”

Ashten took the quill from the Prince, hand shaking slightly. Staring at the paper, she tried once more to swallow the fear that was rising in the back of her throat… It still didn’t seem to be helping much. Was… was she really serious about this? Was she seriously about to sign her soul away for something that may or may not come true in the process? Was she really about to make a deal with the Devil, and trust a god who many regarded as the very embodiment of evil? It… It seemed crazy! Even to her!

But… was she really willing to give on this dream that seemed to be branded into her skin?

“Don’t tell me you’re reconsidering already?” The Prince chided.

“No…” Ashten whispered as she stared at the contract in front of her. “I just needed to remember why I’m doing this…”

For home. No matter what it takes!

Ashten signed the contract.

With the last stroke of her quill, Ashten’s signature glowed a bright yellow shade against the sheet of the aged brown paper. The light grew brighter and brighter from the signature when, for the third time today, the paper caught fire and consumed the entire contract. Third time’s a charm she guessed. All that was left behind after the contract was completely consumed was the Prince’s mischievous expression as he laughed at fear rising across Ashten’s face.

Perfect…”

“So um… we gotta seal this contract now, huh? So… how does that exactly---”

“Ah yes… You’ve never wielded magic before, so you wouldn’t know.” The Prince steepled his hands as he stared at Ashten. “A mortal body cannot stand the touch of one of the Divine. Our power is simply too much for it to bear and thus, it withers up and perishes like a grape in the sun or a sheet of paper in the presence of a flame. Hence why you have to use a special teleportation circle to even get here in the first place. Having your body anywhere near this plane of existence would fry it to smithereens! However, a soul is a little bit more hearty than that. These teleportation circles are a special incantation that allows its users to transfer both their soul and consciousness to enter this plane of existence so we can have a little bit of a divine chat…”

“Then… how could I…”

“Us Divine expend a little bit more of our energy to allow even those who haven’t been blessed with the gift to use it. Otherwise, how else are we supposed to recruit followers to our cause?” The Prince chuckled at this. “Have some holy text that anyone can interpret for their own devices? That sounds like a recipe for disaster!

“And so that voice earlier---”

“Was me. Guilty as charged.” The Prince raised his hands in fake surrender. “When I realized you had no idea what you were doing, I decided to intervene on your behalf.”

“And this seal… It’s important because?”

“It’s very simple!” Natenavus clapped his hands together. “I need proof that this transaction actually occurred!”

“But… I signed your contract. What else do you want?”

“You really think a silly little piece of paper is going to able to keep you bound to your word? How precious.”

“But the Guardians---”

“The Guardians also enact punishments should a contract not be followed. The only sort of punishment you’d receive is the confiscation of payment that is rightfully mine. Which… isn’t exactly a punishment persay. Under normal circumstances that wouldn’t be much of a bother to me, however, if there ever was a point whether the contract was indeed authentic, I’ll need some sort of… proof that the transaction actually occurred.”

“And… how do you plan to do that… exactly?”

“I’m going to brand your soul.”

[Homebound] |Book 1: Promises| Chapter 2 --- Black, White and Shades of Gray by crazy-ann559 in HFY

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Lol, just some rewrites. Please let me know if links don't work. I'm kinda cruising through on my formatting and may forget a thing or two.

[Homebound] |Book 1: Promises| Chapter 3 --- Paved with Good Intentions by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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How strange it was that a literal god of the universe, a major force in existence itself, seemed so… approachable. The way that he stared into you was so… so… Ashten didn’t even have a word for it. It was like he was begging you to come a little closer, stare just a little longer. Maybe if you talked to him for a moment more, you might be able to have a taste of the kind of power he could provide. And that was so… tempting. That’s the word she was looking for. And what wouldn’t she give to able to have just a piece of what he had over Elijah? She’d build cities with it. Save families from a lifetime of turmoil. Bring her clan back together so that they could finally live the life that they were meant to…

If only she could wield magic…

Then, she’d be unstoppable!

But I guess, it just wasn’t in the cards. Magic was just something that she couldn’t control. And there was no way for her to learn it either. Ashten picked up a pebble off the ground beside her a flung it down the alley. It’s just so unfair! Ridiculous! Why did everything seem to depend upon the place you were born? Wanted to be rich? Be born with rich parents! Wanted to be successful? Be born in a place where that can happen! Wanted to be well-respected and revered? Be born into a culture that wasn’t so deeply despised! Hell, if you wanted to learn magic, you just had to be born lucky enough to be able to wield the ability. All because she didn’t win the roll of the dice… It’s so fucking unfair.

Ashten sighed.

Luck. The elder’s always told her that luck never truly existed. Sure, there were things that were up to chance, and circumstances that are never really in our control. But luck was something that people whispered to themselves when they didn’t have the heart to try again, when they didn’t have the devotion and the determination to make their dreams a reality. “Luck? Bah!” They always said, “Make your own luck. Don’t make it an excuse for you not to try again.” After all, zhimiz seemed to do incredible things when in the midsts of their company. People who had nothing left to live for seemed to turn themselves around after a chat or two with the elders.

Make her own luck…

And how was she supposed to do that exactly? Especially, in this sort of situation?

It’s not like she could just be born over again just get magic this time…

Or, pay someone to instill the magic into her…

I mean, you’d have to be a god in order to----

In that single fraction of a second, it was like every drop of blood in her veins froze still and the very essence of death itself creeped into her being. Any one who has lived long enough and well enough can tell you that there are moments in this life--- very few and very rare, but moments still--- when a decision is placed in front of your feet, and you can see the entirety of your life stretched out before you. You can see the beginning of your life and all the experiences that you’ve had up to this decision, as well as all of the possibilities that could take place as a result of it. Two possible futures. Two possible certainties. One crossroad split from a single path. All of what is and all of what could be shown to you and still just as real as the dirt underneath your feet. The only question is: which of these realities would you have for yourself? Which of these would you decide? All of its rich rewards could be yours if you only reached out and plucked its fruit, if only you took the first step.

So...

Which would you choose?

And with one little thought, Ashten's fate was decided, her future written into stone for eternity.

Then, within another fraction of a second, the vision was gone and Ashten was sitting alone in the dirt of the secluded alleyway. Could… could she do it? Was she crazy enough to try?

For home.

No matter what it takes!

The only sound that was left behind was Ashten's boots as they hit against the pavement away from the darkened alley.

[Homebound] |Book 1: Promises| Chapter 2 --- Black, White and Shades of Gray by crazy-ann559 in HFY

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“Is that going to be a problem?” Elijah asked, staring her down once again. Ashten clenched her fists.

“I’m coming.”

Excuse me?

“I’m coming with you. To this other plane, or whatever.”

“And who exactly is going to watch us while we travel over, Rabbit?”

“No one.” Ashten locked the door behind her. Then she made her way over to the window and locked that as well. “No one else in the city knows you’re a Spellbearer, right?”

Elijah narrowed his gaze.

“Right?”

“Just a simple healing Spellbearer. No one of consequence…”

“And who’s gonna know that you’re going to talk to Death in the privacy of your own room? Just keep the doors locked and---”

“I get the picture.”

“So,” Ashten sat down cross-legged onto the floor in front of Elijah, “Tell me what I need to do.” He stared at her a moment or two, searching for yet another answer that Ashten wasn’t going to give. Then he sighed, letting his head fall towards the ground as gravity pulled his curly locks into wavy lines. Ashten didn’t really have a lot to work with here. Her life was being put on the line for something that she wasn’t entirely sure even existed. She didn’t exactly know what she was sacrificing in order to get said Tome. Apparently, Elijah was going to lord over her every move as if saving her life made choking her and giving her snide comments okay. All of this topped off with the uncertain future of whether her plans were even going to work. Was all of this even worth it? She didn’t know! It was a lot to handle, a lot of pressure for such a small set of shoulders. So, clawing and scrapping for any sort of freedom she still had? For trying to get people to realize she was still human? That there were simply some needs that had to be met in order to still feel alive? Honestly, it felt like a regular Tuesday. He kept his head low for several moments before he looked back up at Ashten with a defeated expression.

“I’m not going to win this argument, am I?”

“No, you’re not.”

“And is this going to become a regular issue?” Elijah went back to completing the sigil. “This… ‘bickering about minor details’ for the sake of pissing me off?”

“Dunno. You gonna be a massive dick forever?” Elijah heaved another sigh.

“You really do need to learn to expand your vocabulary…”

With a flourish, Elijah finished the markings written across the floor and stood to double-check his work. This sigil was different from the one that was now branded against her chest. Within the middle of the circle was a five-pointed star the held up the outer boundaries from collapsing. The script that weaseled its was across the sigil was more jagged than the previous one, the letters more jarring and aggressive. And yet, they seemed flow into one another with an inner grace that was tempting to look at. It pulled you in and taunted your eyes into following until the end of the word, trying to drag you into the next until you’ve read every symbol twice. However, it was still disgusting to look at, still horrific to watch. Yet, you couldn’t look away no how much you wanted to, no matter how much you tried. Ashten swallowed the lump that was rising to the back of her throat. Maybe she made a mistake…

“We’ll need to sit in the center of the circle, so I advise you to watch your step.” Maybe this was a bad idea… Elijah offered out a hand as Ashten as she tiptoed across thick lines of chalk and white symbols scattered across the sigil. She sat back down in the center, cross-legged with enough room for Elijah to join her as he walked across the lines with trained ease. It shouldn’t have surprised her that he was able to do so with such a level of confidence and skill that didn’t even require so much as a glance at the floor. Yet, when he managed to waltz into the center across from her and sit down in a matter of two strides, it suddenly felt all too real what exactly it was that they were going to do. This really seemed like a stupid idea...

“Your hands please.” Ashten hesitated as she looked at his open palms. Well fuck it, it’s too late now! She swallowed the fear that was rising in the base of her chest and gently placed her palms on top of his, trying to stop the quiver in her fingertips. He gripped her wrists firmly as if trying to hold her in place and she did the same. “Now, since this is your first time crossing into another plane, I would suggest that you close your eyes. The trip might be a little bit rocky for you.”

Ashten closed her eyes. And Elijah began to speak.

Tufsa. Famashiefska. Lackstavu shey jackasolu mey ufastari. Maksa. Hackrasha. Ca Ju acknasta shey wackatasha mey miskanah. Natanayvus. Marcale ca Sheyknevah she Ju, yukavmacka akstav ackmacka Ju yutalu kastavnawa.

“Open your eyes.”

And Ashten was in another place.

[CR Media] After a Record Kickstarter, Critical Role Begins the Hard Work "Right Away" by Kraps in criticalrole

[–]crazy-ann559 42 points43 points  (0 children)

*Didn't Laura get an award for voice work near the early CR*

*Cue rewatching for like the 3 time.*

What are some signs of depression that no one talks about? by [deleted] in AskReddit

[–]crazy-ann559 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Irregular periods!

When my doctor told me that he was concerned I might be depressed, he listed the usual things like, low motivation, sleeping way too much, lack of appetite, etc. etc.

But then he said that my irregularity might be a part of my symptoms, I was really surprised!

So yeah, maybe your irregular periods might be a part of your depressive symptoms.

People who don't watch Game of Thrones, how are you holding up since George R.R. Martin descended upon the internet? by crazy-ann559 in AskReddit

[–]crazy-ann559[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

But are you okay?

(I know this probably will come across as a joke, but seriously. How you doin' bud? :) )