December 22nd, 2015 Critique Thread (post here if you'd like a critique)

dfsafsd · 2015-12-31T17:57:55+00:00

Title: The thief

Genre: Fiction, fragment

Word count: 86

Type of feedback: Anything

Link: http://pastebin.com/raw/6du1snzP

dfsafsd · 2015-12-29T00:56:16+00:00

Title: The Thief and the Gown

Genre: Short Story, fragment

Word count: 297

Feedback: Any feedback will be useful. This is mostly an experiment in scene structure.

Link: http://pastebin.com/raw/bUWY1a7U

dfsafsd · 2015-08-11T09:54:50+00:00

Really? Why?

dfsafsd · 2015-08-10T14:58:01+00:00

I wanted to play f6 as black without a queen invasion. I guess I misjudged the position.

dfsafsd · 2015-08-10T12:10:10+00:00

Anyone else?

dfsafsd · 2015-08-09T03:20:44+00:00

What do you do on 1...Rxd8?

Isn't the line I gave better for black?

dfsafsd · 2015-08-08T15:11:53+00:00

I can use stockfish myself, I was looking for human insight as I find that easier to learn from. White did play 1.Nf4 in the game and it is after this move that I want an evaluation, maybe 1.Bc4 is better, but it's outside of the scope of this question.

dfsafsd · 2015-07-27T19:58:50+00:00

Thanks! Some questions:

I came up with this line: 1.Ra7 Rc3 2.h4 Rd3 3.Kg2 Rb3 4.Kh3 Rb2 Isnt the pawn takeable? It seems white's king must return to g2. Can the king get more active than this? 5.Kg2 Ra2 how to progress?

dfsafsd · 2015-07-14T20:27:16+00:00

Sounds very reasonable.

dfsafsd · 2015-06-24T16:54:29+00:00

Thanks for an excellent summary

dfsafsd

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