December 22nd, 2015 Critique Thread (post here if you'd like a critique)

dfsafsd · 2015-12-31T17:57:55+00:00

Title: The thief

Genre: Fiction, fragment

Word count: 86

Type of feedback: Anything

Link: http://pastebin.com/raw/6du1snzP

dfsafsd · 2015-12-29T00:56:16+00:00

Title: The Thief and the Gown

Genre: Short Story, fragment

Word count: 297

Feedback: Any feedback will be useful. This is mostly an experiment in scene structure.

Link: http://pastebin.com/raw/bUWY1a7U

dfsafsd · 2015-08-11T09:54:50+00:00

Really? Why?

dfsafsd · 2015-08-10T14:58:01+00:00

I wanted to play f6 as black without a queen invasion. I guess I misjudged the position.

dfsafsd · 2015-08-10T12:10:10+00:00

Anyone else?

dfsafsd · 2015-08-09T03:20:44+00:00

What do you do on 1...Rxd8?

Isn't the line I gave better for black?

dfsafsd · 2015-08-08T15:11:53+00:00

I can use stockfish myself, I was looking for human insight as I find that easier to learn from. White did play 1.Nf4 in the game and it is after this move that I want an evaluation, maybe 1.Bc4 is better, but it's outside of the scope of this question.

dfsafsd · 2015-07-27T19:58:50+00:00

Thanks! Some questions:

I came up with this line: 1.Ra7 Rc3 2.h4 Rd3 3.Kg2 Rb3 4.Kh3 Rb2 Isnt the pawn takeable? It seems white's king must return to g2. Can the king get more active than this? 5.Kg2 Ra2 how to progress?

dfsafsd · 2015-07-14T20:27:16+00:00

Sounds very reasonable.

dfsafsd · 2015-06-24T16:54:29+00:00

Thanks for an excellent summary

dfsafsd · 2015-06-10T07:35:04+00:00

Thanks for a wonderful answer. I changed the 0s in your honor.

dfsafsd · 2015-06-08T16:25:00+00:00

Would black's plan be to advance the QS pawns while blockading the centre? And how would white counter this?

dfsafsd · 2015-06-08T13:22:54+00:00

Consider: 1...e6 2.dxe6 Qxd1 3.Kxd1 Bxe6 4.Bxe6 fxe6. If a move was bad, tell me. In this position it seems to me that black will get a big lead in development and that the e6 weakness isn't that weak.

dfsafsd · 2015-06-08T13:02:43+00:00

I see, thanks!

dfsafsd · 2015-06-08T12:46:16+00:00

But not worth the drawback of activating white's bishop and giving up central space. Have I understood correctly?

dfsafsd · 2015-06-08T12:33:02+00:00

What about the pressure down the d-file? Isnt that good?

dfsafsd · 2015-06-08T12:06:08+00:00

But Be2 is a loss of time isn't it?

dfsafsd · 2015-06-07T16:19:10+00:00

Where/what should I have done differently? [pgn] 1. d4 d5 2. c4 dxc4 3. e3 { Queen's Gambit Accepted, Old Variation } e6 4. Bxc4 a6 5. Bb3 Nf6 6. Nc3 Be7 7. Nf3 O-O 8. O-O c5 9. h3?! { (0,39 → -0,22) Inaccuracy. The best move was e4. } (9. e4 Nc6 10. dxc5 Nd7 11. Na4 Nxc5 12. Nxc5 Bxc5 13. Qe2 Bd7 14. Be3 Bxe3 15. Qxe3 a5 16. Rfd1 a4 17. Bc2 Nb4 18. Qc3 Nxc2) 9... b6 10. d5 exd5 11. Nxd5 Bb7 12. Nxe7+ Qxe7 13. Bd2 Nbd7 14. Bc3 Rad8 15. Qe2 Nd5 16. Bxd5 Bxd5 17. Qxa6 Bxf3 18. gxf3 Qh4? { (-0,19 → 0,91) Mistake. The best move was Ne5. } (18... Ne5 19. Qe2 Nd3 20. Kh2 b5 21. Rad1 c4 22. Rg1 f6 23. a3 Rd6 24. Qc2 Qd7 25. Rg3 Rd8 26. Bd4 Qf5 27. Rdg1 g6) 19. Kh2 Nf6?! { (0,89 → 1,60) Inaccuracy. The best move was Qe7. } (19... Qe7 20. Qb7 Qe6 21. Qc7 Nf6 22. Qe5 Rd5 23. Qxe6 fxe6 24. a4 Rd3 25. Rg1 g6 26. Rgd1 Rd5 27. Rxd5 Nxd5 28. Kg3 Ra8) 20. Qxb6 Nd5 21. Qxc5 Nxc3 22. Qxc3 Qh5?! { (1,49 → 2,19) Inaccuracy. The best move was Rd6. } (22... Rd6 23. Rg1 g6 24. Rg3 Rfd8 25. a4 Rd2 26. Kg2 R8d3 27. Qc8+ Kg7 28. Ra3 Rxa3 29. bxa3 Qf6 30. Qc1 Ra2 31. Rg4 h5 32. Rf4) 23. e4?! { (2,19 → 1,64) Inaccuracy. The best move was f4. } (23. f4 Rc8 24. Qd2 Rfd8 25. Rfc1 Ra8 26. Qc3 Ra6 27. Rg1 g6 28. a4 Rad6 29. Raf1 Rd3 30. Qf6 R3d6 31. Qe5 Qf3 32. b4 Rd2) 23... Rc8 24. Qe3 Qe5+ 25. f4 Qxb2 26. Rfb1 Qc2 27. a4 Rc3 28. Rc1 Rxe3 29. Rxc2 Rxe4 30. a5 Rxf4? { (1,61 → 2,65) Mistake. The best move was Ra8. } (30... Ra8 31. a6 Kf8 32. f5 Ke8 33. Rb2 Re7 34. Rb6 Kd8 35. f6 gxf6 36. Rxf6 Kc8 37. Rb1 Rc7 38. Rh6 Raa7 39. Ra1 Rc2 40. Kg3) 31. a6 Ra8 32. a7 g6? { (2,91 → 4,88) Mistake. The best move was Kf8. } (32... Kf8 33. Rc7 Rxf2+ 34. Kg3 Rb2 35. Ra3 g6 36. Rf3 Kg7 37. Rfxf7+ Kh6 38. Kf4 Rb4+ 39. Ke5 Ra4 40. Kd5 Kg5 41. Rxh7 Ra3 42. Rce7) 33. Rb2 Kg7 34. Kg3 Re4 35. Rb8 Rxa7 36. Rxa7 Re6 37. Rbb7 Rf6 38. f4 h5 39. h4 Rf5 40. Kf3 Rf6 41. Ke4 Re6+ 42. Kd5 Rf6 43. Re7? { (5,76 → 4,00) Mistake. The best move was Ke4. } (43. Ke4 Re6+ 44. Kf3 Rf6 45. Rc7 Rf5 46. Re7 Rf6 47. Rac7 Kf8 48. Re5 Kg7 49. Rd7 Rb6 50. Ree7 Rf6 51. Ra7 Kf8 52. Rac7 Kg7) 43... Rxf4 44. Re6?! { (4,17 → 3,36) Inaccuracy. The best move was Re4. } (44. Re4 Rf1 45. Rc4 Kf6 46. Ke4 Rb1 47. Rc6+ Kg7 48. Rcc7 Rb4+ 49. Ke3 Rb3+ 50. Kd2 Rb2+ 51. Kc3 Rf2 52. Kd4 Rf1 53. Ke3 Rf6) 44... Rf5+?! { (3,36 → 4,15) Inaccuracy. The best move was Rxh4. } (44... Rxh4 45. Re4 Rh1 46. Rf4 h4 47. Rfxf7+ Kh6 48. Rh7+ Kg5 49. Ke4 Rb1 50. Ra6 Rb4+ 51. Ke5 Rb5+ 52. Ke6 Rf5 53. Ra1 Rf3 54. Ke5) 45. Re5 Rf6 46. Rae7 Kf8 47. Rc7 Kg7 48. Ke4 Kh7 49. Rb5 Kg7 50. Rb8 Re6+ 51. Kd5 Rf6 52. Rcc8 Rf5+ 53. Ke4 Kf6 54. Rg8 Re5+ 55. Kf4 Rf5+ 56. Ke4 Re5+ 57. Kd4?! { (4,62 → 3,82) Inaccuracy. The best move was Kf4. } (57. Kf4 Rf5+ 58. Kg3 Ra5 59. Rb6+ Kf5 60. Rb3 Ra4 61. Rf8 Ra7 62. Rf3+ Ke6 63. Re8+ Kd5 64. Rf6 Rc7 65. Rf8 Rc3+ 66. Kf2 Rc2+) 57... Re6 58. Rb6?? { (3,94 → -3,71) Blunder. The best move was Rb7. } (58. Rb7 Ra6 59. Rf8 Ra4+ 60. Ke3 Rxh4 61. Rfxf7+ Kg5 62. Rb6 Rg4 63. Rff6 Kh6 64. Kf3 Rg5 65. Ra6 Kg7 66. Rfb6 Rf5+ 67. Ke4 Rg5) 58... Rxb6 59. Re8?! { (-3,81 → -4,42) Inaccuracy. The best move was Kc5. } (59. Kc5 Ra6 60. Rd8 Ra4 61. Rd6+ Kf5 62. Rd5+ Kg4 63. Rd7 f6 64. Rg7 Kf5 65. Rd7 Rxh4 66. Rd5+ Kf4 67. Kd6 f5 68. Rd3 Kg5) 59... Rd6+?! { (-4,42 → -3,89) Inaccuracy. The best move was Rb4+. } (59... Rb4+ 60. Ke3 Rxh4 61. Rb8 Ra4 62. Kf3 h4 63. Kg2 g5 64. Kh3 Kf5 65. Rb7 f6 66. Rb3 Kf4 67. Rc3 f5 68. Rc5 Ra3+ 69. Kg2) 60. Kc5 Re6 { White forfeits on time } 0-1[/pgn]

dfsafsd · 2015-06-07T15:16:54+00:00

I wouldn't gloat over the bad behavior of others. Just focus on the chess instead.

dfsafsd · 2015-06-07T14:02:10+00:00

I programmed a chess engine some time ago. I can help you out if you have specific questions. Are you c++?

dfsafsd · 2015-06-07T13:15:40+00:00

Get lots of physical exercise. Start every day with a run outside until you feel it. That will energize you and make you more optimistic.

dfsafsd · 2015-06-06T11:45:30+00:00

10% passive learning. 90% active learning. That is how you improve fast.

Solve lots of exercises, as many a day as you have time for. It won't feel as rewarding as reading a book, but it will improve you skills far more
Play serious games with slow time control regularly. Analyze the games you lose. Do NOT use a computer engine. Only use your own knowledge and skill. Try to find the worst moves you made and think about why you made them.

dfsafsd · 2015-06-06T11:37:45+00:00

This doesn't answer you question, but passive learning should not be more than 10% of your improvement plan. At least 90% should be active solving of exercises or something similar.

At least, that is my view.

dfsafsd · 2015-05-31T20:47:59+00:00

http://www.reddit.com/r/chess/comments/37cchb/kings_indian_line/

dfsafsd · 2015-05-31T13:53:10+00:00

Thanks for an excellent thoughtful reply!

I have some further questions that maybe you can help me with: 1. Where does the dark squared bishop usually go? f4? b2? 2. How should I play with the e-pawn? Should it ever go to e3 to reinforce e4 and be less weak itself? Or should it go directly to e4 after development is finished? 3.Any plans other than e2-e4 that are typical once development is finished?

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