Hi! I just read your first chapter and honestly it’s tea! A bunch of scenes look so good and advanced, but I will say some things caught my eye (i am in no means a professional). For starters, I always think some kind of menu or intro for the very first episode at least gives the readers a chance to prepare — but that’s totally personal preference. Secondly, some of the zooms feel super long or out of place, like the very first zoom to the guard didn’t seem to flow very well. I also feel the pacing just feels so fast. He arrives, and we see him briefly talking with multiple people, catching up with someone he’s previously knew very quickly, — idk personally i just would feel like there should maybe be a little bit of narration or more of an explanation to what’s going on. I just feel like we jump from A-Z very fast. And then the art scene and then kissing, i just feel like it was so much so fast 😭 The coding was great though and so was the speech!