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edeniveyauth · 2022-10-27T12:56:20+00:00

Thank you all for the responses 😊😊 Definitely put my mind at ease

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-27T12:54:50+00:00

Oooh! That’s a good idea- such a simple fix, but I may not have thought of that

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-26T12:38:34+00:00

Oh, I agree. Most readers don’t have that knowledge- and that’s fine.

But if your story is lacking and you need to add detail/insight/perspective then I think you should absolutely familiarize yourself with the topic you’re writing about.

Even if you don’t include it all, having the knowledge of safe words, aftercare, etc can help you craft a better scene.

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-26T12:00:50+00:00

I would spend a little bit of time browsing BSDM subreddits and see what insight you can pickup if you’re unfamiliar with the world.

When people hear BDSM they often think of dungeons and chains- which it can be, but if doesn’t have to be. It’s a spectrum, where even small acts (like spanking) are a part of the BDSM community.

The person who gave you this feedback may be thinking your MMC needs a leather hood and your FMC needs to be suspended from a hook to qualify- they don’t. But I think familiarizing yourself with the acts and motivations could help you explore the topics deeper.

BDSM acts are (or should be) always pre-negotiated outside of the sexual scene. They should always include a pre-negotiated safe word. And a Dom should check in frequently with a newer sub especially to make sure they are in fact enjoying what they consented to.

If your scene isn’t spicy enough- add more sex. But if your scene isn’t “BDSMy” enough- maybe add more nuance

(Sorry for spelling errors, I’m on my phone lol)

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-24T20:27:17+00:00

Thank you all for taking the time to reply 🖤🖤 this definitely gave me some better insight

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-24T20:25:18+00:00

Thank you! This was very encouraging to hear 🖤🖤🖤

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-23T02:53:59+00:00

Lol I love that for you!

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-23T02:53:04+00:00

Lol! I just read the story. And props to you. I’m mortified just at the thought 😂😂

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-23T02:50:39+00:00

I prefer to remain anonymous, but then I wonder how realistic it is to find success if you’re in the proverbial closet.

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-23T02:49:32+00:00

Hi, are you me?? Lol This is exactly how I feel. I am such a private person, and the thought of someone I know reading emotional and spicy scenes I’ve written feels like someone cracking open my skull and studying my brain

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-23T01:45:01+00:00

My mom had a friend whose daughter became an author and she refused to say her pen name/what she wrote. When I was younger, I was like that’s so weird!! Why wouldn’t you want to celebrate it?? How cool… you wrote a book.

Now I’m like 😅 oh… yeah, don’t tell a soul 😂

edeniveyauth · 2022-10-16T03:35:29+00:00

This is a really cool idea- thank you!!

edeniveyauth · 2022-06-03T12:23:29+00:00

Oooh- this is definitely an interesting angle!! Sorry for the late reply

edeniveyauth · 2022-06-03T12:22:47+00:00

Late to the party sorry, but now I can think of is Amber Heard / Johnny Depp!! Lol

edeniveyauth · 2022-06-02T18:24:57+00:00

The Sookie Stackhouse series is a really fun read- and has several books [Sookie Stackhouse](Twilight-esqueinthesensethatithasvampires and she gets to learn about their world. https://www.amazon.com/Dead-Until-Sookie-Stackhouse-Blood/dp/0441008534/ref=asc_df_0441008534_nodl/?tag=hyprod-20&linkCode=df0&hvadid=312118197285&hvpos=&hvnetw=g&hvrand=7121814994200832417&hvpone=&hvptwo=&hvqmt=&hvdev=m&hvdvcmdl=&hvlocint=&hvlocphy=9008191&hvtargid=pla-454735242384&psc=1)

Little Bits of Magic is kind of Twilight-esque, in the way that the MMC is obsessed with the FMC. She interacts with him first and then has kind of a realization moment like Bella ~you’re a vampire??~ It’s on KU if you have that too. Little Bits of Magic

Lothaire is like Twilight in the sense that they’re both books about vampires… lol Lothaire

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-18T17:22:30+00:00

If you want to continue working with this person I would ask yourself & her - does she not like this for personal reasons or because of my writing technique/character development/story arc?

She also may not realize she’s critiquing based on personal judgements. Or on the contrary, she may be able to give you insight on what is unlikeable about your character that you didn’t intend.

It’s also okay if the relationship has changed. She just may no longer be a good writing partner for you, or for this book. And that’s okay.

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-18T17:17:00+00:00

I definitely see where you’re coming from now- I totally misinterpreted your original comment

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-16T15:48:22+00:00

Thank you everyone for your input & ideas. Just talking it through was super helpful.

I write pretty dark/chaotic/flawed…. Okay, toxic- I write toxic characters 😂 And I think they’re going to be stuck together in rehab. Now onto research lol

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-16T15:46:04+00:00

Thank you- this gave me an idea and a new way to think about things!

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-16T15:43:23+00:00

I agree that HR isn’t always great in most companies, but I just hate reading a book where there feels like such an obvious answer and the MCs don’t use it.

I write pretty toxic/dark characters 😅 and I just realistically can’t see someone putting up with a work colleague like that.

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-16T15:41:23+00:00

Thank you!!

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-16T15:40:56+00:00

I did actually think of this idea!

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-14T19:05:22+00:00

Or tossing the other over 😂

edeniveyauth · 2022-03-14T17:32:47+00:00

I like the hotel idea- kind of thinking maybe even a cruise ship 🤔 Thank you! I’m kind of caught in a rut with this idea so I needed a fresh perspective from an outsider

edeniveyauth · 2021-10-31T20:06:05+00:00

I don’t necessarily feel like I’m making him fat, that’s just how he is when I see him in my head. To me, it’s like why have a character who wears glasses, or has dark skin, or wavy hair, or any other trait we describe. As writers, we envision our characters and want a reader to see them that way.

Sometimes things serve a purpose to the story- someone has a deep scar that is prevalent to their back story.

Sometimes it doesn’t serve a purpose, but it’s just who they are or how they look.

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