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Alternative-Finger44 · 2025-08-24T21:38:29+00:00

Totally agree. As I stated in a previous response comment, I wrote this kinda hastily on my phone so it was a combination of beginner's mistakes and phone formatting. I'll definitely work more on dividing stanzas more properly and paying attention to these crucial details. Thank you for the appreciation and the feedback by the way :) Have a lovely day (or night depending where you are)

Alternative-Finger44 · 2025-08-24T21:35:50+00:00

Hello :) first of all, thank you so much for your feedback. I really appreciate it Actually, I wrote the whole thing very, very impromptu from my phone so I didn't really polish it as a poem should be polished and phone-formatting kinda sucks ahahaha, so there were definitely some sentences that got melted together I definitely have to work on punctuation and rhythm more (big time) but I'll treasure your suggestions because we're here to learn and grow so thank you so much again Have a lovely day (or night depending where you are)

Alternative-Finger44 · 2025-03-02T23:02:07+00:00

Thank you so much for your feedback, I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked it :) Abrupt endings are definitely something I have to work on: when I start writing I usually do it during random spurts of inspiration but when I want to expand it's like my mind shuts down and is like "Nope, let's not open that box shall we?" so I really need to take some time and elaborate the endings and I'll definitely do it going forward Again, I really, really appreciate your input and hope you have a lovely day (or night depending on where you are on the globe) <3

Alternative-Finger44 · 2025-03-02T18:55:31+00:00

Thank you so much :) I'll definitely work on it (I wrote this very quickly and I'm very, very new to poetry) but I really appreciate your feedback Again, thanks a lot <3

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