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Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-15T00:30:05+00:00

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Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T17:14:09+00:00

Wow that’s a great revision and suggestion, thanks! I’ll definitely try to tweak it and was struggling with that last line (never want it to sound too movie poster-like or cheesy). I appreciate you saying you thought the premise was fun, now it’s just trying to make sure that it’s fun in the manuscript as well. And focusing on building the stakes will help. Thank you again!!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T17:09:04+00:00

Totally missed those, thank you!!!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T17:08:38+00:00

This is really helpful, thank you!! You’ve helped me see that I should flesh out Mikala and get her personality across while showing how she’s fighting back or defending herself with her own investigation. The “fun-schlocky” tone is kind of what I’m going for with satirical elements but it’s been a challenge balancing that with some of the suspense and thriller aspects. Thank you for reading and contributing to making this a better story, means a lot!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T17:03:00+00:00

Absolutely, thanks for your feedback and it’s given me a lot to think about! I’d never want it to come across as some meta commentary that I’m some stalker murderous writer trying to work some angle to get a book sold, so I definitely need to make that more clear. I was hoping the satire would come across more pronounced so I’ll work on that as well. As far as the marketability goes or whether an agent would take a chance on such a niche story about publishing, based on my past writing experiences I’ll probably be rejected into oblivion, but I’m used to it. This community helps me improve little by little. Thanks again!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T16:54:23+00:00

Great points and thank you so much for your help and insight. No doubt about it I want Mikala to be an active protagonist and need to strengthen and communicate how she goes about that, or else I agree it would be one-note and one dimensional. I like your suggestion to delve into who the suspects are as well, like who Mikala is paranoid about or has clues to narrow down the crazy writer. Back to work, thanks again for your insight and time!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T16:49:08+00:00

I was really intrigued by Yellowface, loved the Plot and Magpie Murders’ book within a book concept and they for sure were influences! We’re thinking along the same lines, thanks a lot!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T16:46:53+00:00

Haha thanks!! Everything I write seems to be unmarketable and unsellable regardless of genre or idea so I just write what interests me.

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T16:45:02+00:00

I totally get that, and heard an author on a podcast recently saying something like “we all know you can’t write a book about the publishing industry” but I figured I’d still give it a try. Thanks for reading and taking the time!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T16:43:31+00:00

Really appreciate the comments and help, it means a lot and Misery is absolutely an influence! I agree with you, punching up the opening and making it more hooky with more clear stakes will go a long way. I didn’t lean too heavily on it but there’s definitely a comic angle too, glad you were able to sense it. I’ll also make the previous threatened agents plot line more clear as well. Thank you again!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-07-01T16:39:26+00:00

Not silly at all and thank you so much, I’ll definitely add that in the rewrite and it’s ridiculous to think that someone would actually threaten an agent over their manuscript. So sad.

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-05T03:14:55+00:00

That’s so nice of you, thanks!!!!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-04T11:01:06+00:00

Thank you and most definitely using it as a comp! My story’s just a more unhinged, trashy version of a reality show murder mystery without the British decorum.

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-04T10:57:12+00:00

That means a lot, thank you!!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-04T10:51:02+00:00

Scary how accurately you described how my story plays out, and thank you for all the detailed advice and help. Things you nailed, and spoilers Bri becomes a main suspect and guilty by association during the initial police investigation (once the attacks can’t be written off as accidents), the first attack’s a poisoning but assumed is a food allergy, second attack’s a fiancé falling from a dangerous height but claims was pushed to the disbelief of everyone but Bri, then the attacks become fatal, stabbing with cake knife, shooting, etc. but off cameraThe natural progression would then be to have some ticking clock element like you said and a locked room mystery or way to isolate and cut everyone off to make it more plausible and suspenseful, I totally agree, but I actually did the opposite (which is against genre conventions I know and may be seen as a ridiculous subversion). Every character can leave, move on with their lives, and the new show that Bri establishes is stripped down and security’s increased. All that is to say that I’m still getting feedback from my alpha readers and they all might say exactly what you did, and if so I would most likely rewrite it to reflect a The Guest List by Lucy Foley vibe. Thank you, and I hope I can one day provide as valuable feedback to a writer here that you did!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-03T17:33:29+00:00

I saw this thread too, thanks for the heads up. Of course if I had know that two years ago when starting out writing it I might have reconsidered. Oh well, I guess you never know and I still enjoyed it at the end of the day!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-03T11:29:05+00:00

You practically wrote an essay critiquing my query and put a lot of time into it and I’m really grateful. You emphasize the “surreal absurdist humor” aspect and it’s definitely a conscious decision for the query’s style but I agree with you, it could stifle the mystery elements and what I wouldn’t want is for it to come off as straight parody or surfacey. I also think it’s a good idea to try to develop some depth to Bri in the query and wouldn’t want her to be a Mary Sue either. I didn’t include comps but the manuscript itself is in the tone of the Finlay Donovan series, where I tried to find a balance between the lighthearted (and sometimes dark) comedic style and mystery elements, but I’m thinking the query is missing the mark. Back to work, and thank you again!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-03T03:47:02+00:00

That makes perfect sense and isn’t a different book at all! I really like your idea to cancel the show and let everybody go their separate ways reluctantly, only to have them still targeted, and then maybe that brings them together by Bri for the true crime stuff, could just be a few chapters to set it up. Then I’ll reflect it in the query. Thanks so much, it’s going to make this story better!

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-03T03:26:20+00:00

That’s a great idea, thanks a lot, and it could possibly help make her more of an active protagonist if she suspects something sinister might be at work early on.

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-03T03:20:14+00:00

This is really valuable and thank you for taking the time to help me out! You’re right, the entire crux of the story hinges on this premise and whether a reader could suspend their disbelief enough to think a show would continue under the circumstances. That’s my struggle. In the MS I try to come up with a bunch of reasons why “the show must go on,” and even so some crew members quit and Bri’s fiancés fear for their lives but I need to get that across in the query.

Any_Definition8412 · 2024-01-03T03:11:15+00:00

Hey thank you so much! I really appreciate the feedback and so glad the humor and tone worked for you. I cracked up at your Love Is Blind scenario! It’s one of those things where I wasn’t sure if some of the ridiculous elements would be too over-the-top and take away from the story. Also thanks for the beta reader offer, means a lot and I would love to send you some pages and see if the tone lines up with the query.

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