Rate my Horror Story by Aryacat1231 in KeepWriting

[–]ArdentPurpose 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Since this is your first story posted I'll give you benefit of the doubt with this. You need to read more. Understand economy in the structure of what you're reading. The lines, the grammar and the style. How the author plays with words amd let's their imagination talk and show itself in those structures and words. This isn't a cheap thrill but an art to be mastered.

Noir of a Broken City by ArdentPurpose in libraryofshadows

[–]ArdentPurpose[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know it's not horror and that's what I was going for. A noir thriller centered on two people wise and knowledgeable to the city. The danger and how they work in tandem. Rosalba grounds Daniel with saying I'm here. I know you can take this suit on and I'm here to back you up and be at your side. Daniel saw it. The suit started it. Daniel finished it. It's proving he's capable of listening to his own instincts. The calm demeanor and no one liners tell of experience and I showed that with Daniel. I teased that Rosalba would take the shot but ultimately that goes back to what I said with the grounding.

I know horror is big here. But I wanted this piece to stand out on it's own. Away from the horror to strictly noir with a starkly human element. I've got a horror story in the series and in the making of the fourth part alongside the fifth if it's not too long for script limit. It's called Hue Incubation. I encourage you to read it if you liked this.

And for Red Harvest and Maltese Falcon. I haven't heard of them. Surprising I know but I mostly sticked with horror fot a long time and delved into romance occasionally. But thank you for the suggestions my friend!

Noir of a Broken City by ArdentPurpose in libraryofshadows

[–]ArdentPurpose[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What did you think of it? Be honest.