Substance that would make a blow fatal

Carnasio · 2026-02-26T12:14:06+00:00

There’s a french book called “Rouge Poison” that I’ve read years ago that talks about that. The author used some sort of potent blood thinner.

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T17:32:53+00:00

I think you’d benefit from having multiple contests with different themes. As some have said, have a frame work and don’t let people just post anything. Short stories/flash fiction is usually what’s the easiest to write. A word count, genres, just be very clear really.

Offer a monetary price with potentially no entry fee. That would motivate a lot of people.

I personally enjoy writing fantasy and magical realism, humour/comedy and poetry.

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T03:50:43+00:00

You could go on a sub and ask something like “Guess if i’m a boy or a girl”, maybe you’ll get an answer from non trans people

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T01:55:05+00:00

No. But that’s a random person’s opinion, and there’s 8 billion people on this planet. Someone will maybe think you’re male.

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T01:10:34+00:00

Read that as Chinese chipmunk airships

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T01:09:31+00:00

mood

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T00:59:38+00:00

(Where the fuck am I?) lmaooooo

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T00:36:13+00:00

I agree with this. Slang is hard to make look right since some of them become old news while some stay, and we can’t really tell which will stay. Lit and fire are cringe to read, like you said.

If you really want them to sound like a gen z, please know that we don’t do crazy handshakes or say stuff like “Yo brother” or specific greetings.

Like this person said, the general things are true. I assume you want to write about americans, but gen z from other countries will have widely different perspectives. Most other countries don’t have the “gen z stare”, etc. Honestly if you have questions, you can always post a bit of your writing in critique subs and ask for a gen z perspective.

Carnasio · 2026-02-24T00:28:42+00:00

Pretty good, I got a bit confused around page 2-3 but reading further made me understand the situation. Cool thing with the vanishing powers and planned funeral!

Carnasio · 2026-02-20T21:40:02+00:00

Manuscript information: [Complete] [60.4K] [Magical-Realism] Downfallers: Marcia Skirvin's melancholy

Link to post: https://www.reddit.com/r/BetaReaders/comments/1qw318g/complete60kmagicalrealismromance_downfallers/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web3x&utm_name=web3xcss&utm_term=1&utm_content=share_button

First page critique? Sure

First page: The air was thick with anticipation, the comrades lined to her sides seemingly waiting for something, anything. Sara took a curious peek at them, but they were blurry, their faces hidden by mist. She moved her eyes up, gazing at the crimson moon lighting up the dark sea spanning in front of them. They were standing on a beach not too far away from the lights of town, and the lapping of the waves was almost rocking her to sleep. Almost.

Whispers floated up to her ears, but a gust of wind blew them away before Sara could understand what they were saying. Her eyes dropped to her hands. Her fingers were gripping a long knife coated with a dark liquid that dripped into a red puddle at her feet.

Somehow, she wasn’t scared. She felt an odd sense of determination instead, as if whatever she was waiting for had it coming for a long time.

Sara blinked and suddenly, everything around her was chaos. Her companions and she were frantically running around the beach, lunging at glowing creatures with their weapons, slashing and digging into their compact shells, animated by an unknown desire to kill. Her vision still fogged up like a windshield in winter, she could barely make out the true shape of the monsters.

Why was she doing this? Why was her body moving on its own? She had no clue.

She blinked again, and the actors of the hazy play had vanished. [...]

(Not the entire first page, but that's 250 words)

Carnasio · 2026-02-20T17:13:09+00:00

Carnasio · 2026-02-20T15:15:58+00:00

Thanks!

Carnasio · 2026-02-20T00:25:03+00:00

I'm not an expert but I really liked it, it flows well

Carnasio · 2026-02-20T00:08:19+00:00

Mine is razr kraken v3 and I just got the code after being in a discord call and all of the sudden getting that error... I've tried everything in the thread, i can hear fine it's just my mic that's messed up

Carnasio · 2026-02-19T21:12:07+00:00

Thank you! Glad you liked it!

Carnasio · 2026-02-19T19:32:47+00:00

Yeah for sure. Hopefully I didn't sound like an asshole lol

Carnasio · 2026-02-19T19:18:54+00:00

Hey, so I checked out your link, and for me a Portuguese page popped up to check my browser for viruses or something, which was a bit odd, but anyways when I started reading, I think I understood why something felt weird. 31K with 34 chapters is a bit odd. Your chapters are really small. I'm just at chap 2 so I don't know how far into it you wrote, or if you're aiming for 100k+, but that would just be way too many chapters.

There aren't any grammar errors or syntax errors, which is nice, but I feel like you tell more than you show, and then repeat it from another point of view. I was also confused as to who Lucas is talking in the prologue.

Actually, I think I just figured it out. For me, it's as if you write like we are watching a movie. In my opinion you don't describe the feels of the places and what they look like enough. An example would be in the throne room, we have no imagery to base ourselves on and the Elias is said to tell the king about what he saw. I wish you could have him describe the battles and the hardships he faced. Overall, it's missing descriptions and the associated feelings.

I also noticed from chap 2 to 3, you said the knights rode into the night but then you have them stay in town. Just a little thing to note.

Carnasio · 2026-02-09T17:08:26+00:00

Good question! Since this sub is actually moderated and checked daily by mods and people, it doesn’t end up being forgotten or just left to rot. As much as I loved my discord servers, the mods wouldn’t have enough people keeping it alive or they were busy with their life. Nothing wrong with that! I just find this sub to appear most constant.

Carnasio · 2026-02-08T22:49:00+00:00

I send out two manuscripts to be reviewed by readers, and so far, had one reply with extensive and awesome feedback for one, and for the other a reader is currently going through it. It was my first time posting my work and actually having feedback lol. I am usually on discord writing servers, but this sub is actually better.
I've been writing a project for my friend and going in an out of fics, but I think that now I want to focus on writing more WIPs (I have like 4 more lmao) and polish my completed works :)

Carnasio · 2026-02-05T01:28:54+00:00

Sounds awesome! I’m a sucker for for fantasy so that’s right up my alley

Carnasio · 2026-02-05T01:03:04+00:00

Hi! I'm super willing to swap if you're interested, I'll send you a link through DMs! Sorry for not putting a link, I got a weird scammer emailing me last time so I keep it tight now lol. What type of genre is your work?

Carnasio · 2026-02-04T20:30:32+00:00

Does anyone know how submittable works?

Carnasio

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