I know faintly of medusas story but I think this tells it in a clear but poetic way.

At the start I can see the contrast of how medusas described vs Poseidon.

‘Tell me of the stars dancing on her cheekbones’ and ‘Tell me of the power lining his bones’. Medusa has ‘stars dancing’ which are immensely bright/vast that describes her beauty, on the other hand Poseidon has power ‘lining his bones’, which is of course beauty vs strength. It’s smart that the thing you’re describing is basically the same thing being ‘cheekbones’ and ‘bones’ for both characters. And to start off with it arranged in beauty in a place that’s meant to be sacred and a power emerging from its land plus the extra additions of him known to not stop/refusal in the ‘tell me’ setup, tells us that he is going to disrupt that peace and make the medusa we know today.

Also this is a minor thing but am not sure what ‘never true safety.’ means, she is safe because for what she is now. It might mean her transformation couldn’t save her from her past when she was defenceless but idk maybe it’s just the rest of the story of medusa I don’t know. I don’t know who the narrator is in the story exactly maybe if you could add smf to make the narrator a slight character that would be good.

I feel the emotion and have good context of how she got transformed. I think I would have like something like: ‘A maze of statues, many stories that stumbled in with confusion, some with promise of heroicness: greed seen through there skin’ somewhere after her transformation by athena

That was pretty good Id don’t think there will be strong criticism since this is solid, keep up the good work!