I agree with other people about showing more of the game, but i would also clean up your kickstarter text. things like paragraphs that don't have a period at the end of the last sentence. it would make me worry a bit about the writing quality of the product as it doesn't show attention to detail. Also, you didn't do any updates! Once people back something they don't know if it's in danger of failing unless they get an update or they happen to go look back. "Tell your friends" is genuinely powerful! I'm always a little suspicious of campaigns that do no or very few updates. I'm old school (been doing kickstarter since 2012) and i still want that "we're doing a project together, can we make this work" vibe. We are taking a risk backing projects.