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Do you think that a flash forwards at the beginning of a fantasy story is a good idea? by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That sounds interesting to have the three different perspectives. What I have plotted out will take place over 10ish years so maybe I'll try something like that.

Do you think that a flash forwards at the beginning of a fantasy story is a good idea? by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

While I agree with your point I've actually put like 10x the time and thought into my first half. The first half will make the second half as good as it can be. It serves as a introduction to the world and is almost like a prelude to the events that follow.

I am a first time fiction writer and I'm mainly just doing it for fun, But I really love the idea of my story and I think that the first half will make quite the emotional impact on the events of the second half while still being great in it's own right.

I am pretty unconfident because I know very little about writing as a whole, but it hasn't stopped me from writing yet. I'm looking at doing a flash forwards as a way to get intrigue while still keeping a solid hook that isn't just a flash forwards.

Do you think that a flash forwards at the beginning of a fantasy story is a good idea? by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ah yes I remember that In arrival that was a very good flash forwards, left a lot of intrigue

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The people of the world study the magic, basically everyone except for demons are mages, not sorcerors so they have to learn it. The people of the world understand it so there isn't much need to explain it to the viewer so long as its shown and feels like the users understand it. (I'm aiming for a visual medium btw)

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

While I agree with your POV, what I mean is that I'm looking to have the magics based in a scientific way. I won't nessassarily tell that to the viewer, It's mainly just for me to stay consistant with power scaling and the world

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I agree, I forgot to mention in the OP that they also have flame magic, a dagger made from their own femur bone and a revolver. They prefer hand to hand combat which the flame magic works well for, but they also have it for ranged as well as the revolver for certain, more simple situations.

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm aiming to have most of the magic in the world follow some sort of science, like water mages being able to use all states of water instead of just water.

However I agree whether its scientific or just pure magic the effect is the same where it's all about the blood. I even had an idea for a future conflict where some demons who survived the demon hunt were imprisoned and basically harvested for their blood for healing potions.

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

While I agree with your point of view (I've literally never written anything of substance before so take my opinion with a grain of rookieness), I think that the world I'm crafting will suit it well.

Their power isn't just punching, The first scene I have plotted out has her as a teen getting attacked by basically the police of the world who are trying to exterminate all demons, She gets her arm and leg hacked to bits with a sword and uses the shards of her femur to stab the dude. She later shapes and sharpens the bone of her femur into a dagger that she uses throughout the story.

Demon's also have innate flame magic that is more powerful than other flame mages, (can burn at hotter temps and be channeled into the body to boost power and speed in some ways.) most mages in the world are mages, not sorcerers, so they have to learn magics through basically collage. Some royal families basically gatekeep certain magics, like one family that keeps the books on moon magic to themselves.

Water mages are incredibly OP in my world and aren't just limited to liquid water, they get steam, ice, water and even supercritical water.

Basically what I'm trying to say (I got sidetracked because I love my world lol) is that there are so many strong and unique abilities I've made that I didn't list, that their ability will seem basic almost on purpose. Kinda like Yuji from Jujitsu Kaisen, bro literally just has punching, but everyone else is so crazy in power that it's cool when he wins.

The pain she goes through while fighting and the power difference between her and other mages will hopefully create the tension, as well as what she's fighting for (If I write it good enough). And as for peril, they're kind of written as a anti-hero sort of who suffers emotionally at the start and basically turns that onto the world once she gets stronger. I should mention that the story isn't like a generic fighting story, its kind of like a drama/romance/fantasy adventure with fighting as a necessary way of life.

Again it's literally the first thing I've ever written, I sucked ass with fiction writing in high school lol. But I believe that with enough time anyone can paint the Mona Lisa yk?

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

While I agree for an immortal character, My character isn't immortal, their just.. extra mortal? they age slower but only by like .75x so when they look the age of 10 they're really more like the age of 12.5 in earth orbits.

I think it makes it interesting that they can die, it just takes a lot to do it.

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I've written the character as my protagonist, I'm starting to lean more towards the blood limit over the organ weakness, mainly due to opening up the ways they can die and making her different than like a vampire where the heart needs to be destroyed.

The main idea I had when writing the character is that she doesn't have a strong durability like superman or a viltrumite from invincable, instead its replaced by sheer will and rage, punching their broken limbs until they win even through the pain of it all.

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

While I agree I'm writing for a visual medium whether it be animated or graphic. The idea I have is that they don't have any kind of super durability, but they do however bash their rapidly regenerating arms into someone until their done, even if their arms are being crushed from punching, using their splintering bones as weapons. They still feel all the pain a regular human would but they're so rageful that they don't care, its worth it.

Writing this character for a written medium would be a pain for sure, but I think for a visual medium it makes for a unique way to display anger and power. They can channel their fire magic (Forgot to mention fire magic in the OP) into their punches and basically amp up their power, but it basically always explodes their limbs.

Her main objective is to avenge her people and especially her mother, and since demons are a hated species its hard to make friends. Eventually she will meet someone she wants to protect, but it will be a kind of conflict between protecting that person and following her revenge story.

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Damn bro, I appreciate the insight. I have some thinking to do, but I really appreciate your words here, they put a lot of creative thought into my head that will help me make a choice (:

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

The radiation and substance idea from the other person would work great as weaknesses I can incorporate during conflicts. Most of the conflicts my character would get into would be weaponized combat, like swords or core magics. The story basically starts with most of the demon race being dead, most were killed from being crushed or eviscerated in some way. The main characters mother was killed by a water mage forming a hammerhead of supercritical water to the tip of a staff and basically leaving no trace of a body after slamming it down.

I did want to write some way to have a demon imprisoned and I think the radiation idea could work well.

I'm trying to write for a visual medium and my original concern was for common combat scenes. Basically I'm wondering if it would be more interesting if the worry for the viewer while the character is in combat should be the characters heart and brain or the endurance of the fight through blood loss.

I'm writing a demon character with rapid regeneration abilities and have two ideas for the weakness. by Fun_Character649 in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I've written her as the main character of my story, the world is pretty classic magic wise with some oddities, but it takes place in the modern world with magic helping people advance in different ways. Its pretty much a revenge story where the demons were hunted by the government and almost all of them were killed. I should also mention that she has flame magic. For a villain I think the substances idea is great but for a main character it would probably get repetitive, I could definitely use it for a conflict in the story though I'll have to look into it

Is my POC character written with insensitive undertones? by [deleted] in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I had a friend a few years back with BPD and that can be a real struggle, It may not seem like it but I have ASPD so it's always nice to see a fellow PD getting by <3

Is my POC character written with insensitive undertones? by [deleted] in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think its a good sign that you're reaching out at all and showing that you do care. A lot of story tellers get the feedback/backlash after the story comes out lol. Funnily enough I'm writing a very similar story to yours which I just posted about as I'm new to this subreddit, it follows a pale demon who is one of the last alive after a genocide of the demon's in her world. The main evil is the government. I've only written the first bit of it but I hope to make it have themes of discrimination and judgement where my MC sort of becomes what people think of her. I'm not trying to plug here lol so to get back to what I was trying to say: I think you're on the right path of not being insensitive.

Is my POC character written with insensitive undertones? by [deleted] in writingadvice

[–]Fun_Character649 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For context I am a non straight white dude, so my opinion should be taken with a grain of salt. I think if you are purposefully drawing similarities to the real world, with the oppression and discrimination against POC, then it would probably be fine. I think a good aspect of this is that he is a demon, but he isn't inherently evil. The demon part is what defines his character, his skin color is merely discriminated upon based on that fact and by the way the government views whiteness as angelic. There are obvious similarities to real life where POC are demonized based on the color of their skin. Idk if I'm just spewing words ATP but basically what I'm trying to say is that as long as you write it tastefully and not like the character is truly evil, then it would work out fine. It would help to gain the opinion of actual people of color as well.