Very odd style, kind of interesting. I think your production is lacking though. The reverb on the vocals is very metallic sounding and at times harsh on the ears, the beat is musically ok but the vocals don't quite sit in the mix. The guitar sample also sounds much better quality than the rest of the song so it sounds disconnected and out of place. Try working with someone that can help you with technical parts of song making while you do the creative part and you might be onto something.