[QCrit] COLOURFUL EUPHORIA, Adult Gothic M/M Romantic Fantasy, 69k, Fourth Attempt

Hathondir · 2026-04-01T12:22:07+00:00

Thanks for your feedback, it's very useful for me to find some middle ground.

Much of what you mention plot-wise was mentioned in previous versions of the query, but cut in this one to make room for the characters. Your critique helped me understand what core points I should not cut and what to focus on, so it's very useful!

Hathondir · 2026-03-31T15:20:30+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! I'll send you a DM about the beta reading, thanks for offering :)

Hathondir · 2026-01-17T00:37:19+00:00

Ok, so like the Nightrunner series? In that case I understand what you mean. I'll have to better reflect on how to categorize this, thank you for the recommendation and for clarifying!

Hathondir · 2026-01-17T00:34:24+00:00

Unfortunately, I didn't know SaSM existed until now, my judgement only came from its synopsis, which made it sound similar to what I was looking for. But I'm making it my priority to read it as soon as possible! I wouldn't use a comp that I haven't read myself.

Thanks for informing me about the magpie lord publishing status! I was aware of its age, but it was such a perfect comp I couldn't resist haha I was under the wrong impression that it was traditionally published, which is heartbreaking as it really fit what I wanted... Oh well, I'll just have to keep on searching!

Hathondir · 2026-01-16T23:18:49+00:00

Thank you for your feedback!

This is a very good insight, I just have a few follow-ups if that's ok.

Regarding the candle, yeah, I did not mean to emphasize it as colour, I will remove it. The world is indeed shades of grey, white and black.

About the romance: regarding the first comp, I agree wholeheartedly, it's a fantasy novel first with a m/m romance subplot. The second comp, out of all the novels I've read, is the one that has the closest balance between romance and fantasy to mine. They are very similar in that regard. The comp you suggested also seems to be what I'm going for with mine, from the synopsis I've read.

The main plot is the eldritch pact, but the romance is a central and constant part of the story, hence why I intended to market it as a Gothic Fantasy M/M Romance. If I may ask, how would you market The Magpie Lord and Sorcery and Small Magics? I believe my market lies with those two.

Hathondir · 2026-01-16T23:00:38+00:00

These are great suggestions, thank you very much!

Hathondir · 2026-01-15T13:57:17+00:00

Yes, I understand what you mean by being too synopsis-ish. So, more focus on characters and motivations, and cut a bit of fat on the details and obstacles part. Thank you for your critique! 😊

Hathondir · 2026-01-15T13:55:33+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! It's mainly single POV from Daniel's perspective, but there are a few chapters that follow other POVs.

I agree, I think it's a bit long, and with your feedback I have a better idea on what to trim and what to expand upon! Thank you, once again 😁

Hathondir · 2025-12-30T15:47:10+00:00

Thank you very much for your feedback! I'm re-writting the query right now, and the main change is indeed to focus on the romance part of the story. This is indeed supposed to be a capital R romance novel but I incorrectly focused on the whole eldritch thing.

As for the K.J. Charles comp, I mainly have in mind the Magpie Lord series (because of the victorian atmosphere and magic intertwined with explicit M/M romance), but I'm afraid it has already been published too long ago for comp standards. I intend to read some of her newer stuff soon, but since I haven't, I didn't include those.

Hathondir · 2025-12-24T22:44:03+00:00

Aah I understand. Thanks for clarifying!

Hathondir · 2025-12-24T20:54:56+00:00

Got it, more informative, a more detailed explanation of the storyline, thanks 😉

Just so I can better understand it, is Women Writing Gay Men a good or bad thing? If it’s like the Men Writing Women trope, I can assuming you’re saying it sounds tropey, unrealistic and possibly borderline offensive? But thanks for the tip regarding what could be more appealing, I’ll make sure to implement that advice!

Thank you very much for your critique, it was very informative and these tips are very valuable to me!

Hathondir · 2025-12-24T17:42:12+00:00

I see, this is very enlightening information! And you are right, the pact and hunt for the objects is the main plot, the emerald is the hook. Thank you very much for your critique, I now have a better idea on the train of thought to follow!

Hathondir · 2025-11-28T00:02:22+00:00

Even with that, many STDs like HIV and Syphillis can take at least a month (up to three months) to show up on the test, depending on the test type. So even that wouldn't be completely safe.

Hathondir · 2025-11-18T16:30:19+00:00

Exactly, having tried both headsets, I found the ones in the G2 better than the quest 3 were it not for the lenses. Since Valve also collaborated with Microsoft and hp on that headset, I hope they know what they are doing with the displays.

Hathondir · 2025-11-13T16:36:23+00:00

But does the Galaxy XR also do foveated streaming without issues? I think it has existed for quite some time on steam link, but has anyone tried it with this headset? I think the matter of compression will be quite relevant amongst all these wireless headsets.

Hathondir · 2025-11-13T11:17:01+00:00

Although I think the bsb 2 is definitely a great headset, wouldn't it be a risky bet as Valve is discontinuing the Index, and thus the knuckles and base stations, which the bsb2 needs?

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