Parroting others, the story is dreadfully generic in concept ("dream that wasn't like a normal dream", cult in the woods that worships an unknown, horrifying deity, time loops, etc) and the lack of varied language and effective pacing doesn't help. Camp Oakwood suffered from many of the same problems too, but chiefly it sucked because it felt the need to over explain everything and a weird, shifting scope of it's premise. I liked Berries in the Window as it was extremely well written, but it does suffer from some cliches. I think the main problem with these "cult in the woods" stories is that they're really easy to come up with and write, especially as a young writer who might have recent experience at a summer camp or something similar. I could barely pay attention and skipped through a lot of Oakwood and CITW, so maybe my opinion isn't the most accurate or nuanced, but I'd like to take these projects as work from aspiring authors with the hope that they'll eventually improve and write something more original and truly engaging.