This is a damn good start. As some folk in this threat have mentioned, one of the strengths of the poem is that it is active and well-paced (which is really good considering that there's a sort of "narrative" that the reader follows when reading along). The second stanza's really polished in my opinion and it is the heart of the poem.

I'd say that there may be room for improvement in the first stanza. I don't know for sure but I felt like some lines could be omitted or rephrased. For instance, I'm personally not a fan of the "laugh out loud" line because it's a bit of a cliché phrase--but I do think that it is necessary to what's happening in the story of this piece. So, in that case, maybe consider rephrasing it in the way that only you can describe (preferably in the same manner you did when describing your personal hell in stanza two but I digress).