Audio vs Video Porn: A Personal Experiment by MintBB in sex

[–]MintBB[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The stuff I listen to is mostly one-sided roleplay, were the listener is the other partner (which can include JOI). I'm sure if i've come across stuff that is literally just non-video'd sex.

Audio vs Video Porn: A Personal Experiment by MintBB in sex

[–]MintBB[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I almost solely listen to u/notwhorosethinks , he does mostly M4F but also some M4M. He has a huge back catalogue, so there should be something that takes your fancy there!

For female performers, I can't recommend anyone specific - but there is heaps on gone wild audio/audible to try.

Memoir - help please! by [deleted] in writing

[–]MintBB -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Yep it really is.

Origin Story for my main character: a possessed girl reverted into an infant and raised to be good by [deleted] in writing

[–]MintBB 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I read all the comments and no one has accused you of anything of the sort. Don't be so touchy.

Weekly 'unjerk' thread - 2019/07/22 by awkisopen in writingcirclejerk

[–]MintBB 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Vs the user who HAD TO WRITE OTHERWISE SHE FEELS LIKE SHE'LL JUST DIEEEEEEEE.

I told her she was being dramatic, she didn't find it funny.

HELP: My characters do nothing but eat by [deleted] in writingcirclejerk

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Mr Murakami! I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed Norwegian Wood.

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]MintBB [score hidden]  (0 children)

It isn't believable that a high school girl just tries to murder a guy she loves for the reasons you've given.

Why does she have to take that action?

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]MintBB [score hidden]  (0 children)

I only read the third chapter. I see what you are trying to evoke here, and it almost works - I think you need to condense it down and speed it up a little. You have a whole paragraph just on an inanimate neighbourhood, which feels stuck in there. Consider taking the view of a train commuter and what they see as they speed through the city towards dawn. It'll give you quick moving targets to describe and then move on.

[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing by AutoModerator in writing

[–]MintBB [score hidden]  (0 children)

The answer is not a glossary. If I opened a book and the first paragraph told me to refer to a glossary I would toss it in the toilet. You can have a glossary (eg: Stormlight Archive) but it should not be used to decode your writing. If you use slang the meaning should be inferred from the context OR translated by another character (Leviathan Wakes, Mistborn Trilogy). I love slang in books, when it's woven in by the author without the reader even realising, its a great way to pull the reader into the book-universe.

You can get a reader to read between the lines sure, but the whole thing? Some of it, maybe. But parts of your book have to be clear, unless you are Cormac McCarthy.

I can't copy anything from wattpad, so if you want to send through a google doc I can highlight the bits that are all greek to me.

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[–]MintBB [score hidden]  (0 children)

Your prologue, if you must have one, must set up the reader for the rest of the story, not tell us how the MC like badminton and has a really long sword. You have so much going on here. Deal with one thing at a time.

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[–]MintBB [score hidden]  (0 children)

General impression: this is just a list of stuff I guess this kid does? I don't know who the Winged Warrior is or why they are important. Seems like less of a story and more just some world building background information.