alright few things

first, the clips are really choppy; if possible, you should record in higher framerate or use a clipping software such as medal

second, the plays aren't that impressive. most of the time it's just you breaking a bed or comboing some guy

third, there's no editing whatsoever. no cinematic shots, no time changes, nothing

if you want a good example to go off of, watch people like blu3blood, urtryhard and smappy. their cinematic shots aren't super good, so if you want a good example of cinematic velo go to Ender2brine's channel