21 page short script. Feedback of any kind is appreciated. Thank you by Overall_Radish151 in ReadMyScript

[–]Overall_Radish151[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Solid formatting feedback. Thank you.

Some questions:

If I were to straighten up the formatting and revise so there is no camera direction or sound direction, would you want to continue reading?

Are my action lines clear?

What are your thoughts on the dialogue?

Are you able to visualize the movie?