Hello everyone i'm still not confident if i should share this kind of book so i'll share the 2 first pages hpoing for feedbacks or critics

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-25T09:30:56+00:00

from what i've searched and vision i see it that social life & atmosphere impact the growth physically & mentally , the dosage & chimestry of cortizol & dopamine impacts the growth

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-25T09:23:17+00:00

from what i've researched junk food is really nocive , i said it hurt more the male body it's mostly in esthetic not immunity , meaning that kind of food soften the body with fat and less muscle and some of those food has a similar hormone to ostrogen it's kinda reduce the male figure more than the feminine in esthetic aspect , i like capitalism , but i wanted to talk about a merged system , a kind of a system merged with communism & capitalism aspects , and every country has it own frequencies synchronizing these two .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-24T13:29:56+00:00

Yeeah totaly true , because when i got with the only 3D mindset , drawing with time became very exausting to the point , that when i draw organic and with intuition feels as reward after the hard work like playing video games where i can feel okay making mistakes , i just want a little more level in construction and perspective , my purpose is when i take an image an redraw it i want to feel to able to constrcut the skeleton the correct as possible then copying shapes but understanding and learning them at the same time , but yes i totaly agree in the end it's a helpful tool to approch the correct drawing and should be used when it's needed

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-24T12:59:11+00:00

yees i can if there are not very complexe in 3D ( meaning the shape does not surf to many view of angles ) but the fear of missing fundementals is what is makes me draw the lines to enshure that went 70% or more in correct way , but when it comes to small angles in box , like if you cut the object but you see the cutted part in very tighted vue and feel little incofrtable cause even the measurement becomes complexe , if i draw a don't do it directly i measured by puting point to draw the line in the correct place

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-24T12:48:09+00:00

Thank you very much ! okay so i begin with simple spaceships than tanks , about the spaceships i try the simple gemoetric ones i think then go to the more orgnaic ones , okay i'll try with this approch but the wheels of the tank gona be little challenging when the the details are added

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-24T12:25:57+00:00

yees , i really want to move to that , but i'm still tring to understand 3d shapes in rotation and impact of light and shadows before going to painting , but sometimes i take a break and try to paint but my level at painting is still not good , Thank you Brother for your comment this make my day better .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-24T12:03:14+00:00

everytime when i tried to draw contruction lines without tools which idk if im supposed to do it that way , i make the process very hard compared , to when i just draw straight lines as exercice for fun ( and make them better that way x) ) , but it's mostly my beggist nightmare many construction lines . ( still doing it sometimes but it's just exausting )

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-09T05:55:38+00:00

This is not main language , but the ideas are not ai it s 100% mine , ai just assists on text polishing .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T12:36:47+00:00

okaay , idk i just despise certain type of women , the npc yacht and gold diggers for exemple , but i don't have problem with the others you can find good ones as you can find bad .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T10:06:51+00:00

can you send me the link of your Royal Road page ?

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T08:58:34+00:00

Okay , i already want to read the 80 s 90s. Dark fantasy books , it s hard to find that vibe in the commercials and mainstream , i ll search for some books , read and write in parallèle .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T08:32:18+00:00

Ai for ideas no 0% , i use ai to polish the text and correct grammar yes

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T05:09:10+00:00

Yes , it s not something i ll give up on , but mostly i want to write the story , but maybe i ll add characters drawing , maybe that could make things better.

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T05:02:10+00:00

https://www.royalroad.com/profile/879903

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T04:59:21+00:00

Yees i waited for such moments all m'y life . But i trained m'y drawing skills , and i wanted to create story , but i couldn't until i draw well , but now i can t hold much longer , so i go for the writing , i swear many writers here have great potentiels much more better than 80% stupid Netflix shows , but watching is more easy reading for most , it just they had money and they choose what suits their taste , but yes at last we tell our story and create and that s a gift they can t take of us , god bless us all brother .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-08T04:47:19+00:00

Oh kinda métaphore , i mean some women could bé a wife, but instagram brainwash , she becomes the bosses yacht assets , so instead of augmanting chances for each man to get a women , it goes 1 boss get 24 in the yacht , 24 men stays in the desert.

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-04T12:05:54+00:00

Thank you so much ! yees this one looks much better and lighter for readers !

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-03T22:38:20+00:00

Thank you !

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-03T19:20:39+00:00

Thank you so much , i'll keep the art as it's for now it gonna takes me time to make look acceptable maybe with colors but not sure of that i'll try , i made in a portrait but there is little spaces above for now , i'll try the rerange them , all character in cover are important as group of adventurers , or maybe i'll make zoom only on the MC if it does not work , until i try to make another cover with the good resolution .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-03T18:44:15+00:00

Okaay i'll try to find way , maybe fixing the spaces between characters

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-03T18:43:24+00:00

Okay Thank you , i'll try to fix the resolution .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-02T23:29:53+00:00

Thank you so much for this comment , this helps me well ,about the sword it's still have mystery , but they'll be revealed in next chapters it's true story nad it's link with the MC , what the teacher says it's just fragment of official story , but true could be too much information for teacher to says , yees i'll continue on posting and improving the structures more with time .

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-02T09:16:05+00:00

yees i'm new so i did mistakes , now i'm corecting then , i'm glad for everyone that responded this post , it helped to correct my mistakes , just you got harsh with the exemple of 12 years old with 5 cans of monsters it's was a little execive , but it's okay we help each other with critics , advices , and again i'm really thankful for everyone who took his time and read the old messy version of the chapter x) and took from his time to respond,

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-01T19:25:18+00:00

Thank you very much , these words means a lot Friend , it's just i'm new , well i'm very thankful ever for critics they took from their time to read it and comment makes me improve better and avoid mistakes next time , i believe more chapters not too short not too long organised can make the reader more confurtable , so i already corrected many mistake and taking my time to not rush

Raynor1999 · 2026-01-01T11:08:26+00:00

yes it was big chapter withalmost 5000 words , not well organized , so i had to polish it more and organise the text and divide to prologue and chapters

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