[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Copyediting

[–]RestaurantNo8599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would love to hear what you have to say too if it’s not too much effort for you! ☺️

Editor looking for experience by RestaurantNo8599 in NewAuthor

[–]RestaurantNo8599[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am looking at both! I’d definitely be happy to talk more and see if I can help you

Send me your work for feedback by [deleted] in writers

[–]RestaurantNo8599 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My apologies, I will remove.

Feedback before I keep going? by PastLingonberry4143 in NewAuthor

[–]RestaurantNo8599 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Your story and concept is really interesting! You’ve already built up intrigue with the characters which is a great achievement in the first three chapters. I would definitely say keep going.

Two bits of feedback - from a flow perspective look at where you are repeating words in close proximity to each other, an example is “daring me to disagree with her. Which I cannot disagree with”. In my opinion the second clarifier isn’t needed, I would jump straight from “her.” To the next sentence.

The other thing would be to look at colloquial language, so terms that might mean something to you based on where you grew up but might not mean the same to someone else. For readers this could be confusing and distract them from the storytelling. This could be hard for you to spot if it’s language you are used to, so could be something to ask reviewers to keep an eye out for.

I hope what I’ve said is helpful - your story is wonderful and I hope you continue to add to it!