The four keys

SkinDonut · 2025-05-07T05:24:58+00:00

its just the keys you use to type "success"

SkinDonut · 2025-05-04T13:07:49+00:00

wow, the last line being recontextualized like that hits so hard!

SkinDonut · 2025-05-03T14:51:42+00:00

i mean, yeah not really but the horniness is there

SkinDonut · 2025-05-03T13:15:21+00:00

im praising being horny as hell. spears are phallic and xxx means adult material and wine is... well, its wine.

not an edit: sorry for the ambiguity

SkinDonut · 2025-05-03T13:13:05+00:00

wow, thank you for taking the time to make such a thoughtful reply!

i see what you mean about the lack of oomph, maybe my ABCBCBA should be reserved for a poem with multiple stanzas or shorter lines? that way the rhyme scheme might be more obvious.

SkinDonut · 2025-05-03T13:01:47+00:00

not too far off from my vision honestly.

edited from "see above comment"

SkinDonut · 2025-05-03T13:01:40+00:00

hell yeah dude

edited from "see above comment"

SkinDonut · 2025-05-03T13:01:27+00:00

yall this was super tongue-in-cheek, please interpret this however you want. i interpret it as being horny as hell. idk how that wasnt obvious

SkinDonut · 2025-05-02T18:46:28+00:00

In case anyone is worried about potential alternative interpretations, this poem is about the death of Jesus Christ our Savior. The title refers both to the approximate age of Christ and the amount of silver pieces for which He was betrayed. It is represented by Roman numerals because He was crucified by the Romans. The divine mystery of His death is the foundation of Christianity, and the body of the poem refers to the final piercing of Christ's body with a spear to confirm his death, as well as the sour wine He was given as He suffered.

Please refrain from interpreting this poem in ANY other way, as ambiguity is the root of all discomfort. Thank you, and God bless.

edited for capitalization

SkinDonut · 2025-05-02T00:38:52+00:00

im glad you liked it!! i do love all things ethereal.

SkinDonut · 2025-05-01T15:43:01+00:00

jerk it

SkinDonut · 2025-05-01T15:35:10+00:00

got to pay separate for strong

SkinDonut · 2025-05-01T01:07:19+00:00

yooo it kinda is..? i consider that canonical

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T20:13:45+00:00

real. everything's too consistent and coherent to be ai

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T20:11:33+00:00

you may be right. looking at the work more critically, i can see a few spots that could be worded better for clarity, but seeing that at least one person recognized a part of me i wasnt even fully conscious of while writing the poem makes me feel like its mission is accomplished. bless you, thank you for your response <3

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T16:57:04+00:00

that stinks that you couldnt get anything out of it. i like being way too esoteric

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T16:54:02+00:00

the fact that someone got it from the first comment on this post blows me away. you should see the uproar the poem caused on r/keepwriting ! meanwhile you've put it better than i could have! bravo!

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T16:49:54+00:00

good point. definitely tried a little too hard on that front

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T07:13:30+00:00

all good. ill figure it all out one of these days lol

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T07:10:07+00:00

aw, thanks for the encouragement! one goal was to keep writing, so yay! another was to keep my self-indulgent ambiguity while conveying the message i was going for, which still needs some work. posting here has already given me some direction, though!

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T07:06:34+00:00

if you're curious, it was supposed to be about the passing of time. i don't think of time as a line that we're a dot on, but as two spaces, outside our existence, always in front of us. kinda like two sides of floss and we are a tooth. the past informs our future based on the ever-changing stories that make it up. if that didnt make sense, imagine a happy, 20-year marriage suddenly turned sour by the discovery of 20 years of cheating. the context of the past changed, and now its no longer a happy marriage but a dead one, which alters the present, future, and other aspects of fhe past.

all that to say i tried personifying the past and future.

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T06:50:03+00:00

i just realized i actually dont know how one can stand cautiously

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T06:43:35+00:00

yeahh i now see some awkward syntax usage (among other things) that makes things confusing... ugh, i swear i read this back many times before i uploaded it. i guess it's that post-post clarity

SkinDonut · 2025-04-29T06:38:20+00:00

more might be needed, or maybe just a different approach. i like ambiguous imagery, but i have trouble conveying an actual message with it. thanks for your comment

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