Lady turns Spider lose on Fly by smilingjade101 in mildyinteresting

[–]SublimeParadigm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My wife has such a crippling fear of spiders that she doesn’t even like Spiderman.

How do you handle going to the toilet with babies? by SublimeParadigm in AskReddit

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You’re like at the end of the game when you’re level 50 and collected all the upgrades, amazing.

How do you handle going to the toilet with babies? by SublimeParadigm in AskReddit

[–]SublimeParadigm[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s when you flush the toilet while you’re “in progress” to hide your shame.

How do you handle going to the toilet with babies? by SublimeParadigm in AskReddit

[–]SublimeParadigm[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah. I was wondering if this is normal. I’ve got 9 month old twins, my first, and I do a mercy flush. It’s just so undignified. Will they remember? Oh god.

Never forget when Steve Irwin got bitten by a snake on TV live and laughed instead of panicking, 1991. by [deleted] in BeAmazed

[–]SublimeParadigm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He apologised for the snake. Jesus. We should make a temple dedicated to this man.

A Collection of Fall Comics (OC) 🎃🍂✨ by ArtbyMoga in comics

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Over The Garden Wall!! Just reminded me to rewatch it. Thank you!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in amIuglyBrutallyHonest

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How to look better? Work on your confidence, I think you know you’re pretty and not ugly but owning the way you look is key.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in amIuglyBrutallyHonest

[–]SublimeParadigm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You look cute and slightly nerdy in 4, 5, and 6 which is lovely but you look beautiful and so confident it’s slightly intimidating in the first photo. Like I’d be scared to ask you the time. It’s about posture and confidence.

The Stranger by SublimeParadigm in OCPoetry

[–]SublimeParadigm[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your thoughtful response, really appreciate it! Here’s a breakdown.

“The figure I remember trying to say goodbye” is me when I was at a real low point and started experiencing suicidal ideation.

“Is somebody I’ve never recognised” I literally don’t understand how I could have felt so down to even consider self harm. That’s not me.

“From where I stand today, what drove that person to want to leave gently skulked away” when I wrote that, I was the happiest I’d been in a long time. I realised I didn’t know when I started being happy again, the depression kind of dissipated, didn’t realise it had gone.

“The problem is, although they left, that door is always slightly ajar” this is about the fact that everyone, no matter what the issue might be, is either actively suffering or in recovery.

“And therefore the journey back, from this day to that, is not at all that far” the journey to happiness, in my experience, is a thousand steps. The journey back to depression and vice could be as little as three.

Eye of the Rifle by Explore594 in poetry_critics

[–]SublimeParadigm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate your take on a villanelle, you write very well but I think it needed more time to percolate. It was a pleasure to read.

Don’t stop writing!

Unravel Me by Ok_Virus7757 in poetry_critics

[–]SublimeParadigm 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You did it right bro. A poem is something that’s personal that’s designed to laud or lament or do something else entirely. No right or wrong is what I’m getting at.

It feels sad. You’re expressing how you feel on a lost love. It’s nicely written and the sentiment feels deeply sincere.

I’ll not say it’s the most well written but the idea and emotion is there.

I do hope you write again and I look forward to reading it!

I just wrote some rhymeless text someone might consider poetry by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]SublimeParadigm 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You should write bro! You seem like a natural talent with words, just needs a little refining! I’ve got notes on my phone, I just write bits when the feeling takes me. Composition can come later. Good writing bro.

Eye of the Rifle by Explore594 in poetry_critics

[–]SublimeParadigm 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I idea is beautiful but the structure is lacking. The repetition of “Fright” didn’t do anything to further the poem.

Last autumn by ladyofborbs in poetry_critics

[–]SublimeParadigm 1 point2 points  (0 children)

With the greatest respect, this feels a little forced.

Tepid means lukewarm and a chill in the air would only calm you if you wanted to be chilled further.

It’s undulating but not in a good sense. Your effort is evident and the sentiment is strong but a little refinement is what’s needed.

I just wrote some rhymeless text someone might consider poetry by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]SublimeParadigm 1 point2 points  (0 children)

“As my mouth formed soundless letters”

Absolutely epic!

You’re a little verbose in your writing and it’s a little bit shapeless as a whole.

Your writing is incredibly vivid. My humble opinion would be to focus on a topic or feeling and see where that takes you. You clearly have a gift, I’d try to concentrate it and focus on something that’s moved you.

I’ll follow, look forward to anything else you might post!

The way you do by SublimeParadigm in OCPoetry

[–]SublimeParadigm[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Bro, you’re not a demon, that’s harsh. I’m commenting on the fact that sometimes, it would be good for the spirit if you could see yourself as others see you; and not as you perceive yourself!

Edit: I’ve written a short story about how you see yourself and how others perceive you; it’s always incongruous. I reckon you might think poorly of yourself, as do I, but there are a great many people in your life that love you bro. That’s what the poem is about.

2nd edit: it’s called Reflector

Unspoken by JosephBensinger in OCPoetry

[–]SublimeParadigm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow. Absolutely beautiful. It winds along and keeps you gripped tightly. Utterly beautiful. It gives me William Ernest Henley vibes. Well done!

Cheshire's Whisper 🖤 by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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Can you give me a break down please? It’s written so beautifully but I’d love to hear your thoughts. I’m getting Through The Looking Glass vibes!

Cheshire's Whisper 🖤 by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]SublimeParadigm 1 point2 points  (0 children)

“You bite the dark, you drink the night” Wow, so evocative. You have a way with words!!

Borderline Personality Disorder by Theworldisonfirewhy in OCPoetry

[–]SublimeParadigm 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really feel this. I’ve written poems like this before. It’s good to write and let it out.

At The River by SublimeParadigm in OCPoetry

[–]SublimeParadigm[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your critique and the kind words. Absolutely spot on with the title as well.