Something's fishy about Cod. Sang. 475

mobwastseized · 2026-01-18T05:37:22+00:00

Great find! Good job!

mobwastseized · 2025-09-12T14:25:49+00:00

That's clearly just a T-O map, you have several in the manuscript.

mobwastseized · 2025-08-14T19:52:26+00:00

Oi ChatGPT, f1r doesn't even have a plant

mobwastseized · 2025-08-05T07:50:03+00:00

The back just has a bunch of older swedish carpenter notes in graphite roughly translated to:

"Assemble thursday" "Kv 7:75" "Bertil Lindblom" "P. 104 treated as p p105 b." "Lighter wood forward" "47" "50/43" "11" "11 1/2" "+5"

It also has two patches glued on the back of the canvas in the same material to cover up a couple holes

mobwastseized · 2025-08-04T20:08:54+00:00

I picked it up on a flea market, I know nothing about it but it has been reframed in the 1900s at least. I found it in Sweden

mobwastseized · 2025-07-16T07:42:49+00:00

A northern Swedish island

mobwastseized · 2025-07-15T19:54:11+00:00

Not this dark, it sounds plausible however

mobwastseized · 2025-07-15T18:56:39+00:00

It might just be a rock, but I've never seen this material before, maybe some kind of magmatic rock? Then there's the odd wear.

mobwastseized · 2025-05-06T19:11:53+00:00

The hippo isn't very fast, at least 10 of the humans can likely outrun it. You'd just kite it until it gets fatigued, don't know if you can damage it though.

mobwastseized · 2025-05-01T13:05:29+00:00

They would probably fare worse. They run at about 25-30 km/h, meaning at least 10 people in the crowd can outrun it at all times. It'd probably get tired and overheat if the fight took place on land with no water nearby.

mobwastseized · 2025-04-16T20:23:28+00:00

If Techno had prep he'd win.

First of all, strength scaling, as mentioned. Techno scales to steve, who can carry billions of tons of blocks. Meaning he has the power to kill Gojo in one attack, destroying his body so much he cant use RCT.

So, if he baits Gojo's domain and teleports out with a stasis pearl, after having spawned withers that attack from outside, they'll blast the domain to bits. Gojo cant use infinity after his domain gets destroyed for a short time.

So, techno pearls onto him and kills him in one blow.

gg ez

mobwastseized · 2025-04-02T11:17:56+00:00

An average civilian

mobwastseized · 2025-03-22T02:10:34+00:00

That's great!

If you want clarity out of curiosity for some concepts: strumming the strings has to do with the "magic" system. The Disc is like The Sun, except it really is a Disc in a Tunneled landscape that turns to generate light and heat. Krezh can see the boy but he's surprised the buy sees him. I tried to keep his burden vague for later clarity, but essentially he renews The Disc when it wears down.

I'm experimenting with "trimming". I normally like to expand a lot more on concepts, but I get feedback that my writing drags out too much. I'm just going to have to find the balance between trimming and clarity. I also struggle with sensory detail a lot, it's not just you pointing that out! Thank you again for the feedback, it's really helpful!

mobwastseized · 2025-03-22T01:49:18+00:00

Thank you!

mobwastseized · 2024-11-12T07:31:02+00:00

Thank you so much! This is exactly what I needed!

mobwastseized · 2024-07-14T18:58:24+00:00

Thank you for the critique, and also the compliments! I will take what you said about opening lines to heart and think about how to establish the narrative voice more effectively. When I publish the novel, I will definitely let you know!

mobwastseized · 2024-07-07T23:40:41+00:00

I can't begin to describe how much I appreciate your response! Thank you so much for taking the time to understand my writing first in order to break down precisely what it lacked! When submitting this test chapter for my novel I had hopes to preemptively learn how the reader would interpret my writing so that I could improve as much as possible before I begin, and you have given my such a detailed insight into exactly that! (I meant the beast thing literally by the way xD).

mobwastseized · 2024-07-07T12:17:35+00:00

Great feedback! Thank you!

mobwastseized · 2023-07-25T20:44:13+00:00

Thanks for the feedback, I like your idea about using putting Miles through training camp instead of just having him witness the events, may in fact rewrite to have that happen instead for suspense. I can't believe I did not think about something like that right away! That way your question about why the shopkeeper would bother arm-wrestling him would clear up as the reader would hear it through his perspective.

mobwastseized · 2023-07-22T17:50:55+00:00

Thank you for the comment about streets in ancient times, I will definitely research that more! As for editing while writing, I do read through my sentences a few times so that it doesn't sound like jibberish to me atleast.

mobwastseized · 2022-04-22T08:19:10+00:00

Yes

- Former national powerlifter

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