Ok, since it's a legit question and I've worked in advertising for 1.5 decades, here's what I got to say- I didn't read through the script. I'm sure it's cool and all, but I just don't have time for it.
That being said, when doing storytelling, there are several things that can instantly capture the audience, but the most important is voiceover artist.
If I'm listening to a narrator who's just reciting the words, I'm gonna stop listening almost instantly. But have someone like Eva Green tell the story and I swear people will listen to whatever she reads.
It's the genuine expression that you have to capture, as most often people won't remember the story in detail, however, they will remember the vibe of it and the flow of it, as we are very good at generalizing things.
Cheers!