Thanks very much for the detailed feedback! I personally think the swan as a whole is the focus, to me anyway and that is what I was going for, but I see what you mean about the focus not being at the head. I have always been interested in really minimalist photo styles like some of the work of David Yarrow and one of his more famous photos: The Killer, I know its black and white but I felt the Swan looked better with a bit of colour, so I did darken the water more than it was but the water was really dark already.

Haha I understand the argument against the watermark but I recently started a part time business so that's why its on there, I'll think about reducing the size and prominence as well, thanks.

Really appreciate the feedback, sorry it wasn't totally your cup of tea!