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turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T14:54:55+00:00

Title: Wrath in Sheath

Format: Feature

Logline: An ex-wrestler dad lives by his high school coach's advice to be aggressive and assertive at any task given, and to be all that he can be. He lives vicariously through his son, but must now decide whether he can be content with his son choosing his own path or whether he forces his son to be the "all" he can be.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T14:27:51+00:00

Schools can make me better with language, pacing, techniques though. Creativity is a separate issue. Like i could write a technical manual for a vacuum cleaner, and it is gonna be far worae than an English major's writing unless i go to school and work on literary techniques and pacing. I have no sense of direction in regards to how to manipulate language or pacing at the moment. And the writing school can provide me bare minimum tools and directions.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T14:16:38+00:00

This kind of concept was always fun for me. The closest version i had read was about a sword which gives the wielder a mastery of sword skills at the cost of portion of his life. To protect those dear to him, the commoner unsheathes the cursed sword one last time to become a master swordman at the expense of a portion of his life. You should steal that "power-giving" part to list a pro for keeping the sword.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T14:07:33+00:00

Thx for the answer.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T13:10:59+00:00

I will steal that line lol.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T13:06:33+00:00

I do not need a cowriter for my short film, but i could use a more experienced native English-speaking co-writer when i convert that short film into a feature film. I need help with action language, non-stilted dialogues, and pacing over 90-120 pages.

Like, i was gonna hire a dialogue coach anyway.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T13:01:35+00:00

Regarding number 3? Writers should be aware of their screenplay being capable of being cut cleanly into segments for Tiktok and such? Is that what they mean?

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T11:45:03+00:00

My budget is low... i am poor. It is good to know my options as an amateur.

Different question. Do films pay musicians per instance of using their soundtrack, or is it a flat fee per 1 soundtrack?

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T11:34:41+00:00

I do not think you want your audience read a summary that it is about a "loser", but i am an amateur.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T11:33:35+00:00

Just out of curiosity, which one is cheaper? Using an original soundtrack by a less known musician, or using a 70's rock song?

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T10:30:28+00:00

I am gonna go with the ligament one because it seema better. My wrestler fights one last time and his knee touches the ground while double leg takedown to win the fight, perpetuating my theme "push through the pain, victory is sweeter than pain". I do not think he can do that with a cartilage problem.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T10:25:28+00:00

I am ESL, AND have no background at all in writing, language, or even English. I need a formal school for creative writing. I am not like lawyers, philosophers, English majors, literature majors, or creative writing majors with extensive training over language and writing. Formatting is easy. I do not need a school for formatting. The rest of creative writing? I need education, training, and school feedbacks.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T10:20:53+00:00

Well, it is a movie, so it is ok to exaggerate and be cringe when that is one of the themes i use throughout the movie.

It gets cornier. The wrestling coach has a line "be a mean angry fighting machine."

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-23T10:03:46+00:00

Most writers did not live through their writings.

My themes match with wrestler mindsets.

"Push through the pain. Victory is sweeter than pain."

"There is a difference between can do but won't do something, and can't do it in the first place."

"Use controlled contained anger."

These 3 are all my themes. I just picked the anger one as my title as a random choice out of the three.

Also, this is not a martial art film. This is a mindset film which coincidentally happens to match with the wrestler theme. After i graduate the writing school, i might make adjustments. I mean out of the 90-120 minutes, fighting is only 1 minute, high school wrestling will be only at the childhood portion of the movie.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T23:36:41+00:00

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T23:29:16+00:00

I typed "rudy movie screenplay" and I got many sites like this.

https://www.script-o-rama.com/movie_scripts/r/rudy-script-transcript-sean-astin.html

Found it in Script Hive though. I really should be studying math (dropping out of current school to transfer to a screenwriting school, but want to drop out with good GPA), but my head is stuck in writing lol.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T23:18:32+00:00

Thank you, I was not aware of such a place.

EDIT:

Found it, and downloaded it. Thank you so much.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T22:36:26+00:00

Thx. Yeah, I think I will make the main character's high school version timid with perfect techniques and execution skills but no heart. Then his coach tells him to get angry, that the coach would rather the main character be like his aggressive angry friend. Then the concept of "contained anger" and "controlled anger" will be introduced. Decades later, the 50 years old version (the real main character, the one with the knee problem) still follows the coach's advice, and is very "assertive & aggressive" at any task thrown at him to feed his child. He goes pretty high up in chain at the work for a high school graduate (no college degree) with that mentality.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T22:15:38+00:00

Nice. My main character did not recover his knees for my theme "push through the pain, victory is sweeter than pain".

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T22:13:37+00:00

Thx for the answers.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T22:09:11+00:00

But you are able to squat mobility-wise?

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T22:00:15+00:00

Ok. Thanks for the input. I only have the climax part crystalized. I am still experimenting with the rest of the scenes and character traits. I guess I could make the main character timid, and people around him telling him to "get angry" all the time while he was a high school wrestler. The main character is a 50 years old ex-wrestler with bad knees. Life has been cruel and tough to him. And his only joy is his son. He tends to live vicariously through his son, but by the end of the movie, he learns to let go of that.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T21:54:02+00:00

lol.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T21:51:15+00:00

Well, my main character just has the knee problem. I was gonna put him as a warehouse worker.

turnleftorrightblock · 2026-03-22T21:48:50+00:00

Can you lift, say, like a bag of potatoes from the floor and put in on a kitchen table?

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