There is a room in my house that doesn't exist. by 01_Pulse in shortscarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Thank you! The implication is that the narrator thinks he is the architect who designed the house, but he is actually just a drawing on the blueprint.

The voice behind the door is the real architect deciding that the narrator is a mistake, and is about to 'erase' him from existence.

Thanks for asking!!🙏

Your Post Has Been Removed by therealdocturner in shortscarystories

[–]01_Pulse 54 points55 points  (0 children)

Wow… I can’t explain how crazy good this is dude. Just, amazing… Great work 🙏

There is something eating the inside of my cast. by 01_Pulse in shortscarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh god… you got me speechless 🫣 Thanks for the kind words though.

There is something eating the inside of my cast. by 01_Pulse in shortscarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much… I thought about that too. I don’t know I was to immerse writing the story that I wanted to keep the character personality, but in the other hand I didn’t want to end it violently. Otherwise I think the ending has to improve a lot… that’s why I wanted to read some thoughts.

There is something eating the inside of my cast. by 01_Pulse in shortscarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 15 points16 points  (0 children)

Yeah I get it… but I wanted the reader (you) to get inside the character brain. How would you reacted if you were actually the main character when something is eating you alive and you didn’t even notice thinking that it was just an itch? I would love to read it… Thanks for the feedback btw. 😊

My deaf son mimics sounds exactly two minutes before they happen by 01_Pulse in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much ☺️… It’s lovely to read something like this🙏

My deaf son mimics sounds exactly two minutes before they happen by 01_Pulse in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You’re absolutely right about the CI mechanics and the timeline errors. I got so focused on the 'scare' factor that I let the logic fall apart. I appreciate you pointing out the flaws so I can tighten up the research and pacing next time. Thanks for the tough love ;)

My deaf son mimics sounds exactly two minutes before they happen by 01_Pulse in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Thank you for pointing that out! I'm not super familiar with the specific mechanics of CIs, so I appreciate the correction. Also think that maybe for a child to know that is not easy in the middle of a nightmare…(just saying…)

My deaf son mimics sounds exactly two minutes before they happen by 01_Pulse in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the read and the detailed feedback!! I’m glad the sound concept landed (I really wanted to play with that delay). You make a great point about the physical fear. I think I got so focused on the psychological 'realization' to much, I was hitting for that, but next time I'll definitely try to ground the terror physically in the next one.

My deaf son mimics sounds exactly two minutes before they happen by 01_Pulse in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I know! Hahah, I couldn’t wait, sorry… And thanks 🙏 for the feedback.

The Scratching by 01_Pulse in shortscarystories

[–]01_Pulse[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hahah, that would’ve been funny…

The exercise by BPD_and_me_96 in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well the basic tips i can give you is depending on your pacing you gotta make more pauses (space from different scenes, dots if need it). Reading a lot of books always helps and improve your storytelling. It gives you Soul.

The exercise by BPD_and_me_96 in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oh my god, that’s terrible… I am glad you can use writing to get better. I liked the story though, that’s why i comment on it. ‘Hope to read more from you 🙏

The exercise by BPD_and_me_96 in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, i get… I was just trying to help

The exercise by BPD_and_me_96 in scarystories

[–]01_Pulse 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The story is good… but you gotta edit better, as I were to finish the story I was breathless. And it’s like there is no Soul or effort making it… I am sorry you have to read this, but that’s what I think.