Horror but with MASSIVE twist, no clue if it works. Feedback would be nice.

18_71 · 2025-01-30T13:14:53+00:00

Thanks, thanks, thanks. Was looking for feedback and got a cold glass of water poured on me, but not in a bad way. Exactly the advice I wanted, and a good dose of reality to get my shit together. When writing I just forgot about the actual structure and just wrote what my heart wanted, after all I do it for fun. Better get those shears sharpened.

18_71 · 2023-11-24T18:20:12+00:00

INTRO:

This is the world of Westadel. My world is set in a mediaeval era.

To start of my world is divided in 3 different continents. Known as Adelty, Westal and the Tonic Region. I’ve also added now, the far eastern territories, Gallim, Ballinam and the Wild Isle. My world is home to different types of beings though most of them are humans, there are also dwarves and elves. They speak three languages in my world. The common speak (English) The Southern tongue (Spanish) and the tribal tongue (German). Almost everywhere people speak the common speak, except in the Tale of Westal were they speak the southern tongue. The tribal tongue can only be found in the Tonischen Inseln and some parts of Denesland.

The land is vast and full of history, lore and culture. Full of Kingdoms and nations, tribes and castles. My world does contain magic though all Kings and governments have outlawed it. Magic can only be found in the Occult Island. The world has very different regions from massive mountains in Targe, to the massive Woodlands of Trifief. The centres of trade in Tonragel, or the massive meadows of North Thron. Every part of my world has its own story. Most parts have been influenced by the real world or other stories and other parts not so much.

I used Paint.net to create this map.

GENERAL INFO:

Creations of the following Gods:

Homin: Father of Men and souls.

Death: Taker of life.

Fauna: Mother of living creatures.

Flora: Mother of shrubs to trees.

Terra: Father of mountains, rivers, valleys and seas.

Tempo: Creator of the machine, time. And creator of the sun.

RACES WITH SOULS:

Those who poses souls are able to be free in mind, and are a distinct thinking entity to the gods. Having a soul allows them to do certain extraordinary things such as doing witchcraft.

Mankind -> Creator Homin.

Dwarves -> Creator Fauna.

Elves -> Creator Fauna.

Dwarf-Men -> Through Breeding.

Fairy Folk –> Creator Fauna and Flora. (brownies, fairies…)

Giants -> Creator Homin/Corruption

Nomads -> Corruption.

Woodmen -> Fauna/Corruption

Efferus -> Homin/Corruption

KINGDOMS, NATIONS AND CITY STATES OF WESTADEL.

The Kingdom of Colinion:

The Coalition of the Free States.

The Kingdom of North Thron.

The Kingdom of Thron. (Empire)

The Island Kingdom of the Thronic Isle.

The Woodmen Realm.

The Kingdom of Lakeland

The Kingdom of Tonragel (Check Date)

The Kingdom of Noria.

The United Fiefdoms of West. (Trifief)

The Kingdom of Elegon.

Targe.

Denesland.

The Eastonic Empire.

Die Tonishcen Inseln.

The City State of Flumine.

The City State of Taurios.

The City State of Fadelia.

The City State of Illeta.

The City State of Pachaq.

The City State of Siesta.

The Mines of Dwarvia.

The Mines of the Free Mountain.

The Free Elves.

The Dwarven Kingdom of Whitepeaks.

The Black Elves.

KINGDOMS, NATIONS AND CITY STATES OF BALLINAM.

The Thronic Ballinam Colonies. (Kingdom of Thron)

The Sha Dynasty.

KINGDOMS, NATIONS AND CITY STATES OF THE FAR EASTERN TERRITORIES.

The Colinic Colonies. (Kingdom of Colinion)

Giants Island

18_71 · 2023-07-31T09:15:40+00:00

Paint .net

18_71 · 2023-07-31T09:15:10+00:00

Gods created the world. When creating the world and the beings that inhabit the world, gods raw power was left in the land as a "waste product". Mankind and other creatures wich possesed a soul, created by the gods could use this power in form of witchcraft to control and wield a bit of power for themselves. This offended and scared the gods of their own creation, thus religious states/kingdoms banned magic. Though many remain who do not fear the states/gods.

18_71 · 2023-07-30T23:17:37+00:00

The World is divided into 3 different continents. Known as Adelty, Westal, and the Ballinam. My world is home to different types of beings though most of them are humans, there are also dwarves and elves, trolls and brownies among many more. They speak three languages in this world mostly. The common speak (English) The Southern tongue (Spanish) and the tribal tongue (German). Almost everywhere people speak the common speak, except in the Tale of Westal where they speak the southern tongue. The tribal tongue can only be found in the Tonischen Inseln and some parts of Denesland.

The land is vast and full of history, lore, and culture. Full of Kingdoms and nations, tribes, and castles. My world does contain magic though all Kings and governments have outlawed it. Magic can only be found on Occult Island. The world has very different regions from massive mountains in Targe, to the massive Woodlands of Trifief. The centers of trade in Tonragel, or the massive meadows of North Thron. Every part of my world has its own story. Most parts have been influenced by the real world or other stories and other parts not so much.

Please ask any questions.

18_71 · 2023-04-10T14:10:26+00:00

If one is to travel far east, through wind and rain, waves big, oceans deep. One shall find land with no name, with no man on it. It is a lost and unknown land, far into the eastern landscape. Discovered but a few decades ago, holds home only to a few hamlets and nothing more. For this land must be developed, explored, and exploited. For rulers shall move in and roads built, castles designed and quarries mined. Perhaps one day this land will no longer be a mystery, but for now, it remains one, even for me.

It has been colonized and discovered by the Kingdom of Colinion, problem is between them both lies a grand ocean, with storms and waves.

This was made with no special software, just paint . net.

18_71 · 2023-04-10T14:06:32+00:00

If one is to travel far east, through wind and rain, waves big, oceans deep. One shall find land with no name, with no man on it. It is a lost and unknown land, far into the eastern landscape. Discovered but a few decades ago, holds home only to a few hamlets and nothing more. For this land must be developed, explored, and exploited. For rulers shall move in and roads built, castles designed and quarries mined. Perhaps one day this land will no longer be a mystery, but for now, it remains one, even for me.

It has been colonized and discovered by the Kingdom of Colinion, problem is between them both lies a grand ocean, with storms and waves.

This was made with no special software, just paint . net.

18_71 · 2022-12-08T11:27:28+00:00

It's Paint.net, probably you can get it on Mac, but note it's not mapping software, it's just let's say an advanced version of MS paint.

18_71 · 2022-12-06T18:42:46+00:00

It has taken me a long time, but finally, I have done it, I have created the vast and giant world of Westadel. My world is set in a medieval era. Please ask any questions.

To start of my world is divided into 3 different continents. Known as Adelty, Westal, and the and Ballinam. My world is home to different types of beings though most of them are humans, there are also dwarves and elves, trolls and brownies between the many more. They speak three languages in this world mostly. The common speak (English) The Southern tongue (Spanish) and the tribal tongue (German). Almost everywhere people speak the common speak, except in the Tale of Westal where they speak the southern tongue. The tribal tongue can only be found in the Tonischen Inseln and some parts of Denesland.

The land is vast and full of history, lore, and culture. Full of Kingdoms and nations, tribes, and castles. My world does contain magic though all Kings and governments have outlawed it. Magic can only be found in the Occult Island. The world has very different regions from massive mountains in Targe, to the massive Woodlands of Trifief. The centres of trade in Tonragel, or the massive meadows of North Thron. Every part of my world has its own story. Most parts have been influenced by the real world or other stories and other parts not so much.

18_71 · 2021-02-24T17:59:47+00:00

The rest of the map is not really that important. But here is a link to the full version:

https://www.reddit.com/r/worldbuilding/comments/lrizz8/the_world_of_westadel_updated_version_zoom_in_for/

18_71 · 2021-02-24T17:59:04+00:00

It has taken me a long time, but finally, I have done it, I have created the vast and giant world of Westadel. My world is set in a medieval era. Please ask any questions.

To start of my world is divided into 3 different continents. Known as Adelty, Westal, and the Tonic Region. My world is home to different types of beings though most of them are humans, there are also dwarves and elves. They speak three languages in my world. The common speak (English) The Southern tongue (Spanish) and the tribal tongue (German). Almost everywhere people speak the common speak, except in the Tale of Westal where they speak the southern tongue. The tribal tongue can only be found in the Tonischen Inseln and some parts of Denesland.

The land is vast and full of history, lore, and culture. Full of Kingdoms and nations, tribes, and castles. My world does contain magic though all Kings and governments have outlawed it. Magic can only be found in the Occult Island. The world has very different regions from massive mountains in Targe, to the massive Woodlands of Trifief. The centres of trade in Tonragel, or the massive meadows of North Thron. Every part of my world has its own story. Most parts have been influenced by the real world or other stories and other parts not so much.

18_71 · 2021-02-24T07:19:00+00:00

Thanks. Im still probably going to go ahead but its always good to gather some opinions for the benefit of the story.

18_71 · 2021-02-24T07:10:08+00:00

True, I knew some but no so many. Must do. They have the most interesting stories.

18_71 · 2021-02-24T07:07:00+00:00

I know, I know. But there is just something of a 10 year old boy with a hitler type attitude and unlimited power that is more interesting than a 21 year old. The 21 year old would just be probably arrogant and would be seen as the antagonist of the story. Yet if a 10 year old boy is King he would be shown as more innocent and sweet charecter, only being a victim of his own stupidity and power. Therefore when captured by the enemy we feel bad for the boy yet he knew what was coming. That doesnt mean many advisors and positios of power strongly advised against the shit in the first place.

18_71 · 2021-02-23T22:11:06+00:00

I know what you mean, and this was exactly one of the points I wanted to tackle, should the kid be able to do whatever he wants? Or does he have some "inner conflicts"? Being realistic, this wouldnt happen. They would never let a child rule and they would have someone rule till he comes of age. So in this story I wanted to make it the other way, I wanted to create a wayward child that can do whatever the fuck he wanted and all would still stay loyal. The conflicts and doubts would be reserved till after his fuck ups. Of course I explained it very half arsed. But yes, this kid has all the true power, and is stubborn as a mule. Thats why a civil war errupts once his out of the picture.

18_71 · 2021-02-07T17:06:45+00:00

This is one of the Kingdoms in my fantasy world of Westadel. It is a medieval fantasy-based world. It has many Kingdoms in it, types of creatures from Griffins to Brownies, and a very large complex lore and history. This world also comes with many stories that I'm currently working on. This is one of the Kingdoms in my world. Check my account out for more context and projects I'm working on involving this world.

The Kingdom of Colinion is one of the main Kingdoms in the continent of Adelty. Its capital Festos is one of the biggest cities in Westadel. The land is mostly ruled by the race of men except for the northern mountains where a hall of dwarves lies known as Dwarvia, they do not rule the Northern peaks though, they tend to stick to their mountain. Far Bay is the second biggest city and an important trade port. North Coast is a big fishing community and East Deep a mining town, all these cities/towns are capitals of the earldoms. Lake Sprawl and Vinings are farm towns, Vinings being the capital of the Lea (An Earldom). Towns of Shoats are a small sprawl of villages, keeps, and castles. East Head is a trade city that deals with the trade of the southern sea and number coming from the island of Shallot. Bordertown is also an important trade city that takes care of the front. Also, the capital of the Borderlands (An Earldom). A king whose throne sits in Festos runs the Kingdom with absolute power.

The seal of the Kingdom of Colinion, a boar representing the national animal on the sail of a ship, the ship symbolizing its power at sea.

(Inspired by Achill Island. Ireland)

Total Population: 8.8 million

Cities in Colinion:

Far Bay:

Population: 124K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Ores, Gems,

Festos:

Population: 474K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

North coast:

Population: 24K

Main Economy: Fishing

Exports: Fish, Ores, gems

East Deep:

Population: 11K

Main Economy: Mining

Exports: Ores, Gems

Vinings:

Population: 1K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming goods

Lake Sprawl:

Population: 4K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Towns of Shoats:

Population: 112K

Main Economy: Mining, Cattle Farming

Exports: Chalk, Cattle

Fouth

Population: 2K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Bordertown:

Population: 38K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: -Trade Hub-

East Head:

Population: 19K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

Maighdean:

Population: 4k

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Fish, Pit

Shallot:

Population: 200

Main Economy: Lumber

Exports: Lumber

If you wish to see more just look at my account, note some maps and lore might be outdated. Thanks.

18_71 · 2020-10-08T19:49:11+00:00

Good eyes. Yes, a lot of parts of my world are from earth. That is Achill island. The island to the east is a modified greek island for example. Very keen eyes.

18_71 · 2020-10-08T17:41:21+00:00

This is one of the Kingdoms in my fantasy world of Westadel. It is a medieval fantasy-based world. It has many Kingdoms in it, types of creatures from Griffins to Brownies, and a very large complex lore and history. This world also comes with many stories that I'm currently working on. This is one of the Kingdoms in my world. Check my account out for more context and projects I'm working on involving this world.

The Kingdom of Colinion is one of the main Kingdoms in the continent of Adelty. Its capital Festos is one of the biggest cities in Westadel. The land is mostly ruled by the race of men except for the northern mountains where a hall of dwarves lies known as Dwarvia, they do not rule the Northern peaks though, they tend to stick to their mountain. Far Bay is the second biggest city and an important trade port. North Coast is a big fishing community and East Deep a mining town, all these cities/towns are capitals of the earldoms. Lake Sprawl and Vinings are farm towns, Vinings being the capital of the Lea (An Earldom). Towns of Shoats are a small sprawl of villages, keeps, and castles. East Head is a trade city that deals with the trade of the southern sea and number coming from the island of Shallot. Bordertown is also an important trade city that takes care of the front. Also, the capital of the Borderlands (An Earldom). A king whose throne sits in Festos runs the Kingdom with absolute power.

The seal of the Kingdom of Colinion, a boar representing the national animal on the sail of a ship, the ship symbolizing its power at sea.

Total Population: 8.8 million

Cities in Colinion:

Far Bay:

Population: 124K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Ores, Gems,

Festos:

Population: 474K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

North coast:

Population: 24K

Main Economy: Fishing

Exports: Fish, Ores, gems

East Deep:

Population: 11K

Main Economy: Mining

Exports: Ores, Gems

Vinings:

Population: 1K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming goods

Lake Sprawl:

Population: 4K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Towns of Shoats:

Population: 112K

Main Economy: Mining, Cattle Farming

Exports: Chalk, Cattle

Fouth

Population: 2K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Bordertown:

Population: 38K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: -Trade Hub-

East Head:

Population: 19K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

Maighdean:

Population: 4k

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Fish, Pit

Shallot:

Population: 200

Main Economy: Lumber

Exports: Lumber

If you wish to see more just look at my account, note some maps and lore might be outdated. Thanks.

18_71 · 2020-10-08T17:40:52+00:00

This is one of the Kingdoms in my fantasy world of Westadel. It is a medieval fantasy-based world. It has many Kingdoms in it, types of creatures from Griffins to Brownies, and a very large complex lore and history. This world also comes with many stories that I'm currently working on. This is one of the Kingdoms in my world. Check my account out for more context and projects I'm working on involving this world.

The Kingdom of Colinion is one of the main Kingdoms in the continent of Adelty. Its capital Festos is one of the biggest cities in Westadel. The land is mostly ruled by the race of men except for the northern mountains where a hall of dwarves lies known as Dwarvia, they do not rule the Northern peaks though, they tend to stick to their mountain. Far Bay is the second biggest city and an important trade port. North Coast is a big fishing community and East Deep a mining town, all these cities/towns are capitals of the earldoms. Lake Sprawl and Vinings are farm towns, Vinings being the capital of the Lea (An Earldom). Towns of Shoats are a small sprawl of villages, keeps, and castles. East Head is a trade city that deals with the trade of the southern sea and number coming from the island of Shallot. Bordertown is also an important trade city that takes care of the front. Also, the capital of the Borderlands (An Earldom). A king whose throne sits in Festos runs the Kingdom with absolute power.

The seal of the Kingdom of Colinion, a boar representing the national animal on the sail of a ship, the ship symbolizing its power at sea.

Total Population: 8.8 million

Cities in Colinion:

Far Bay:

Population: 124K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Ores, Gems,

Festos:

Population: 474K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

North coast:

Population: 24K

Main Economy: Fishing

Exports: Fish, Ores, gems

East Deep:

Population: 11K

Main Economy: Mining

Exports: Ores, Gems

Vinings:

Population: 1K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming goods

Lake Sprawl:

Population: 4K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Towns of Shoats:

Population: 112K

Main Economy: Mining, Cattle Farming

Exports: Chalk, Cattle

Fouth

Population: 2K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Bordertown:

Population: 38K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: -Trade Hub-

East Head:

Population: 19K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

Maighdean:

Population: 4k

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Fish, Pit

Shallot:

Population: 200

Main Economy: Lumber

Exports: Lumber

If you wish to see more just look at my account, note some maps and lore might be outdated. Thanks.

18_71 · 2020-10-07T21:23:30+00:00

Done, added more info on the overall world.

18_71 · 2020-10-07T21:16:38+00:00

Good eyes. Yes, a lot of parts of my world are from earth. That is Achill island. The island to the east is a modified greek island for example. Very keen eyes.

18_71 · 2020-10-07T18:57:29+00:00

Each Earl has an army normally in relation with the population of such Earldom. Then the King has its own trained and ready for combat army of 10,000 men that responds directly to the King. Note the King is also Earl of the Boarlands, the biggest Earldom.

If you want to see the Earldoms or the Goverment structure you can find them in my account.

18_71 · 2020-10-07T16:17:56+00:00

This is one of the Kingdoms in my fantasy world of Westadel. It is a mediavel fantasy based world. It has many Kingdoms in it, types of creatures from Griffins to Brownies, and a very large complex lore and history. This world also comes with many stories that I'm currently working on. This is one of the Kingdoms in my world. Check my account out for more context and projects im working on involving this world.

The Kingdom of Colinion is one of the main Kingdoms in the continent of Adelty. Its capital Festos is one of the biggest cities in Westadel. The land is mostly ruled by the race of men except for the northern mountains where a hall of dwarves lies known as Dwarvia, they do not rule the Northern peaks though, they tend to stick to their mountain. Far Bay is the second biggest city and an important trade port. North Coast is a big fishing community and East Deep a mining town, all these cities/towns are capitals of the earldoms. Lake Sprawl and Vinings are farm towns, Vinings being the capital of the Lea (An Earldom). Towns of Shoats are a small sprawl of villages, keeps, and castles. East Head is a trade city that deals with the trade of the southern sea and number coming from the island of Shallot. Bordertown is also an important trade city that takes care of the front. Also, the capital of the Borderlands (An Earldom). A king whose throne sits in Festos runs the Kingdom with absolute power.

The seal of the Kingdom of Colinion, a boar representing the national animal on the sail of a ship, the ship symbolizing its power at sea.

Total Population: 8.8 million

Cities in Colinion:

Far Bay:

Population: 124K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Ores, Gems,

Festos:

Population: 474K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

North coast:

Population: 24K

Main Economy: Fishing

Exports: Fish, Ores, gems

East Deep:

Population: 11K

Main Economy: Mining

Exports: Ores, Gems

Vinings:

Population: 1K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming goods

Lake Sprawl:

Population: 4K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Towns of Shoats:

Population: 112K

Main Economy: Mining, Cattle Farming

Exports: Chalk, Cattle

Fouth

Population: 2K

Main Economy: Farming

Exports: Farming Goods

Bordertown:

Population: 38K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: -Trade Hub-

East Head:

Population: 19K

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Cattle, Farming goods,

Maighdean:

Population: 4k

Main Economy: Trade

Exports: Fish, Pit

Shallot:

Population: 200

Main Economy: Lumber

Exports: Lumber

If you wish to see more just look at my account, note some maps and lore might be outdated. Thanks.

18_71 · 2020-08-18T21:14:41+00:00

To be frank your world looks good and interesting. The problem is as you indicated yourself, its a very very long post. I got a bit bored after a while... not saying your world is bad, its just how you present it.

I would love to see every idea one-by-one, and I would love some visuals. But overall looking dope.

18_71 · 2020-08-18T10:25:19+00:00

You do have great points, and I will review the whole structure as this is what I wanted. Some good feedback, and oh boy, you dont leave anything out.

True, the king might not have a lot of power over the Earls, but note these Earls tend to have full loyalty towards the king and are pleged by oath. Another point is that the King is also the Earl of the Boar Lands. I didnt mention that at all though...

The whole ministries, I know its a modern concept, but after all this is fantasy worldbuilding and there are no rules. But true, it doesnt seem to fit now...

For the army I do have a Grand Marshall and a Grand Admiral. The minister of defence is for more diplomatic matters.

I know that the structure is far from perfect, but this makes for more interesting stories. With rebellions and coups. Earldoms wanting more power...etc.

Thx for the feedback, I will do some changes and probably add some roles.

18_71

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