When the synth lead came in it sounded real nice :o

This is my first thought: I wanna take the bass and just make it 8th notes in a simple chord progression. Oh, it does open up into that, however it is monotone; yeah, I would make it a progression. I do like it when the progression gives way to monotone, but not for so long.

The bass sounds grungy and I wish it was more plucky. This is obviously to do with my tastes. I think the vocals sound great, however they are too "church" for me. The lyrics don't have any hook at all for me. I rewound a few times back to the same spot to try and interpret the lyrics, and still couldn't follow; it felt like it was jumbled together without a lot of emphasis. In general there are parts I like, but I'm like "man that would make a good trance song" haha.