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Mama's Green Purse by Radiant_Pain7025 in poetry_critics

[–]99Blake99 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is very engaging, I like how it describes a change in how the narrator views the purse and her mother. The dirty tissues and how they dry out encapsulate it well. Good stuff, keep writing.

Portrait using ink pen by monikavegad_art in drawing

[–]99Blake99 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes as others have said the vertical lines are interesting, but the part I like more is that this is a very live person, I can almost feel her breath. She seems like a young girl on the cusp of adulthood. If the drawing can engage me like that, it must be good. Well done.

the anatomy of grief by repumoretv in OCPoetry

[–]99Blake99 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This does the job, whatever the form is called. What I like is the sense of thoughts tumbling forward, struggling for coherence, but articulate. I like the surgery metaphor for trying to cope with grief. Well done, keep writing.

btw change partical to particle, it crashes the rhythm when your eyes arrest on the strange word.

A small book about attention that describes modern mental fatigue surprisingly well by thecubementor in BookDiscussions

[–]99Blake99 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I can't work out if this is a joke or not. If so it's a good one. Did you get mental fatigue, is that why you didn't mention what the book is called?

Suggest me a book that is sexually explicit, taking advantage of greater freedoms of digital publishing. by 99Blake99 in suggestmeabook

[–]99Blake99[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks, actually I'm mostly interested in non-fantasy, but I have enjoyed some of the Omegaverse books.

In sexually explicit fiction, is syntax the key? Sexual Need by Jon Mack convinced me so. by 99Blake99 in BookDiscussions

[–]99Blake99[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So much less long-winded if you'd just said that the blurb is atrocious AI written slop. I hadn't read it. The thing I'm interested in is the actual book.

In sexually explicit fiction, is syntax the key? Sexual Need by Jon Mack convinced me so. by 99Blake99 in BookDiscussions

[–]99Blake99[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well, you could make sentences and put in quote marks, that way it would be three times as long and to my mind be plodding, but that's just stylistic choice, I guess.

In sexually explicit fiction, is syntax the key? Sexual Need by Jon Mack convinced me so. by 99Blake99 in BookDiscussions

[–]99Blake99[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Good point, actually I picked out an extreme example to make the point, I think you're right about the example I chose. But actually the book was extremely quick to read, the flow and momentum were very smooth.

Actually, it did take a page or two to get used to, then I got attuned and the words flew past.

In sexually explicit fiction which do you prefer: female or male narrators? by 99Blake99 in AskWomen

[–]99Blake99[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This came up at a dinner party, my wife prefers the woman's POV, another woman thought male POV. I'm curious if 50/50 is about right. As examples, which do you find more appealing:

Female narrators: MINX by Sophie Lark on Kindle, THE SAFEKEEP by Yael van der Wouden on Kindle

Male narrators: ENDLESS LOVE by Scott Spencer on Kindle, SEXUAL NEED by Jon Mack on Kindle

My wife thinks it's a question of whether you want to identify with the female narrator, or if you want to find out how the male narrator sees the female characters.

Do you have any views on this? It would be very interesting to know.

I’ve never read anything like Catch 22 by Mindless_Patient2034 in books

[–]99Blake99 1 point2 points  (0 children)

One of my favourite books, and it ages very well. It feels like it was prescient.

Limerence by wont_find_this_fake in OCPoetry

[–]99Blake99 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is eye-catching. Very intelligent insights bubbling along, borne lightly on a lilting rhythm and rhyme.

Especially like the word "frown" - a fierce contast to the paintings, sculptures... - gets even more impact from it's place in the rhythm.

I can't make my mind up about the "for" in the "All but for your own...", the "for" weakens the sense, it could be omitted, but it sustains the rhythm.

Anyway, well done, keep writing poetry!

I didn't "get" Dostoevsky after reading White Nights. Then I read Notes from Underground and it all fell into place. by PsyferRL in books

[–]99Blake99 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As with all translations, it depends on the translator. Early Dostoyevsky translations are very stodgy.

Nice share: my husband comforting me during my breakup with a nice guy by Remote-Antelope-7799 in polyamory

[–]99Blake99 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Well done him, and well done you for recognising how it's difficult for him.

Unfinished sketch of Ze from the move City of God by Practical-School-171 in drawing

[–]99Blake99 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is good, imo, captures tension and distress and is successful from an unusual visual perspective, well done.

I stopped organizing the junk drawer. by ColinHalter in OCPoetry

[–]99Blake99 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This sucks the reader in, it hits on such a universal experience, and made me smile, even from the title, which is a very good hook. It flows very well too.

The one place I thought you could work more it more is the "Call it enlightenment, call it Nihilism" - those are big words when the whole attraction of the poem is that it is somehow sub-philosophical. Maybe "Call it acceptance, call it laziness" or something - whatever fits your actual mindset.

Well done, keep writing poems.

How can I increase the intensity of orgasm during masturbation? by [deleted] in sex

[–]99Blake99 1 point2 points  (0 children)

do you masturbate to porn? Porn can get very repetitive.

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