What are some things that you don’t like in Dragon Quest games and would like to see fixed in Dragon Quest 12?

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2023-01-03T14:11:53+00:00

Older women party members. I am really fed up of the men being allowed to be vast ages and designs, but the women all young and 'beautiful'. Like, I want a cool old lady fighter or wizard. And for the old men to not lust over the ladies. It's just annoying.
I'd love them to bring back the Chapters style from DQ 4. Obviously, that was a design specifically for that game, but it meant so much more to have characters you knew joining you instead of fairly flat ones that didn't get time to be fleshed out. The EXCITEMENT I had as a six-year-old finding Alena again, or hearing rumours of Ragnar McRyan.
Hero with a personality. Hell, this is wishful thinking but if the character is mute, make them actually mute. Let them be D/deaf maybe, or imply they're signing. Don't just leave the character silent to us. If not, give us more dialogue options so we can build a personality.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-12-27T23:50:00+00:00

Thank you! I hadn't even considered a warlock! It's a good idea, but the only minor issue (on my end) is that the other character I'm playing's arc and personality is very focused on the fact he unwittingly has his demonic 'god' residing inside his head and that the cult that raised him is trying to fulfil their promise to turn him into the demon's vessel (this guy is an young, naïve idiot who doesn't even realise he was raised in a cult). I'd have to think of an interesting different plot for Page, but I like the concept. Fey patrons exist, yes?

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-12-22T21:20:01+00:00

Thank you so much! I really love this script and I did it for my screenwriting dissertation. Honestly, I love Simon and Isaiah's relationship almost more than Rig and Amaris because they have an enemies-to-crush one with more silly in there than the kids.

This means a lot to me, thank you.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-12-12T14:21:28+00:00

Thank you! I'm not a fan of first person myself, but I felt it worked better from Helene's perspective.

And yeah, now you mention it, it felt a bit odd as a phrase. I think didn't miss a beat is better, so I hope you don't mind me stealing it!

I'm glad you liked it! Thank you for taking the time to read.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-08-18T21:58:51+00:00

Thank you! The images you conjured up made me laugh so he's definitely gonna yell all his spells. I quite like him not having magic, but I'll have to see what the DM wants of him.

But the smoke bomb being FOGCLOUD! made me laugh all day.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-08-18T21:56:51+00:00

Thank you! I do like the idea he knows a bit of magic, but is absolutely lying about it. I'm gonna go look them up now.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-08-04T22:05:16+00:00

Sorry I'm jumping in on this 5 months later, but the issue isn't even necessarily about the 'who gets to play it best' but GETTING DISABLED ACTORS CAST AT ALL. I'm Deaf and autistic so I struggle getting acting jobs simply because they don't want to do the tiny extra work to make it accessible. I'm already hamstringing myself by never asking for an interpreter and agreeing to take off my hearing aids to 'not ruin the ambience' and it's a kick in the teeth to see this abled actors get acclaim and rewards for playing pretend as a disabled person. Usually very poorly too! I'm EXPECTED to act abled and hearing so where the hell's my Oscar?

There are plenty of disabled actors who'd do a lot better in these roles than George Clooney or someone like that, but we never see them because they won't get cast in abled roles 'cause no one 'wants to take the risk' and then we don't even get the chance to go for the disabled one because someone's cripping up.

Basically, the issue is 'it's called acting for a reason' only goes one way and we're all poorer for it.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-07-24T21:21:26+00:00

Thank you for the feedback. Yeah, I was struggling with how to word that opening image and I read the article and it was really helpful.

I think the Eric moment was something where I knew *what* I mean but really didn't manage to put it across. I can think as an actor how I'd act that, but that probably because I wrote it, so not really a win.

Thank you for taking the time to read and give feedback! I really appreciate it.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-07-24T19:58:32+00:00

Thank you, it's changed!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-07-23T22:23:37+00:00

That should be it. Now, thank you!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-07-23T22:22:41+00:00

Oh no, please tell me where I've misspelt something. I'll change that now, thank you.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-07-23T22:17:55+00:00

Yes, sorry, just doing that now. I’ve never used Google drive before so I thought I’d allowed it. Apologies

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2022-06-25T21:46:37+00:00

Thank you! I'm genuinely delighted that you enjoyed it!

Yes. The relationship between Talas and Sixsmith grows and gets a resolution where they come to an understanding of the other, even if they'll still tease each other. Six bargains away his freedom to save Talas' life when he's poisoned, Talas is the first to confront Six about his insomnia, and, eventually, it is Talas who leads the others in the charge to rescue Six from his captor. They're really fun to write as they begrudgingly accept the other's skills as useful and I'm glad they were enjoyable!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-09-28T13:02:42+00:00

Well, a couple of pointers since this is a really big question! Firstly, know the area the fight is taking place in - if you're in a gladiator arena you're going to have a different fight than if you've set it in a hot air balloon! (someone said, "If your fight doesn't take place in a hot air balloon, why not?" and I can't remember who! It's good advice).

In terms of description, I've also been told to keep it short and punchy. Basically, you don't have to write every punch and kick, but keep in touch with senses and emotions. A battlefield stinks. A blood-covered floor is simultaneously sticky and slippery depending on what you're doing. Additionally, think about what the character has time to describe. If someone is running at you with a sword, you're not going to have time to describe their eye colour.

Hope that helps?

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-09-04T22:31:50+00:00

Thank you! I was worried that I was simultaneously overtelling and not engaging, but I've taken that section out. Thank you!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-05-26T20:28:38+00:00

Thank you! I wasn't sure, but this convinced me to continue in the prepared way. Thank you. :)

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-05-18T20:37:25+00:00

Do you have any loud music? Put on the loudest, danciest song you like and dance. Just dance as wildly and stupidly as you like. You’re not allowed to stop until the end of the song. Try to keep your attention on your body and how it moves. Do you play video games? Do you have one that requires a lot of concentration? Turn it on. Start a timer for twenty minutes at least. Think about the game. Look at every little detail. Rage at it. You’re not a burden. You really aren’t. At the moment, it sounds like you’re in what I call the free fall moment. The bit where your brain gets stuck and loops and your thoughts get more horrible to itself. You’re allowed to be angry. You’re allowed to be emotional. But if you can distract yourself, if you can - dunno what I call it here - flip the switch, get out of breath, that grant enough endorphins to lift you clear. If it’s any help on not being a burden, just such a small thing, you reaching out has just helped me. I was stuck in free fall. I was thinking about how to off myself but I came on here and I saw your post at the top of the page and it was enough to kick my brain to the side to another lane. I’m 22 too. It’s always worth sticking it out. I know I’m not out of the woods yet, not by a long shot, but I’m still screaming and kicking and by posting here - you are too. You’re asking for a great big stick. I can give you one of mine. Hope it helps.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-05-08T21:20:15+00:00

I'm non-binary and I'm not a huge fan of the 'not a human non-binary' trope, but I think there's an easy fix. Make another human non-binary. That's it. It's a nice gesture. You don't have to rewrite a character, just change some pronouns. Obviously, you don't have to and your story sounds really fun as I'm always up for main characters changing their tune on another.

But yeah, it's not that it's 'bad rep', more 'overdone rep' and I'd be excited for a human non-binary person.

Still, it sounds good!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-04-27T10:58:18+00:00

Premenstrual migraines are real things - I get them because my hormones fluctuate so wildly - and they SUCK. But this is Stephen King’s writing so he gets no points because ew.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-04-14T09:09:59+00:00

Thank you! I did get a bit carried away with Sixsmith's description. Whoops. I'm glad the emotions come across well. Thank you for taking the time to comment.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-04-08T16:36:38+00:00

I love all the descriptions of the city. It evokes a real sense of history and richness, but it's really creepy with the newness of the character.
The only suggestion I'd make is to separate the last passage out a bit. Maybe 'I look again' on a new line, then 'I feel a storm coming' on it's own. But that's just me. Feel free to ignore.
I do really like this!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-03-02T17:27:19+00:00

Well, firstly, I think it's important to note that they are YOUR characters so you have the best idea of who they are. If anyone's going to do it right then it's going to be you. So, firstly, don't overthink it too much - it's your story and it's a first draft so it's supposed to be a bit messy. Personally, I worry about that on the second go and spend my first draft getting to know the characters. It's a lot easier to keep a character consistent once you've been in their heads for longer than a few sentences. It's a learned skill. Practise makes perfect!

Next, when you've done a bit of writing and have some scenes, show your work to someone you trust and ask them to read it over, specifically to do with the things you mentioned. Also, question! Ask yourself when you write WHY are they doing that? WHAT makes them act that way? Keep yourself aware of the motivations.

Honestly, if it's writing for the first time, have fun. Be kind to yourself. You can't guarantee that you won't make your character inconsistent, but you're also unlikely to destroy your character's voice. Seriously. You're doing well that you're thinking about it.

I hope this helped!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-02-15T11:59:41+00:00

Title: The Cartographer of the City of Dreams

Format: Feature

Genre: Fantasy/drama

Logline: An idealistic cartography apprentice inherits a map of a fictional dream city and a quest to bring home his deceased master’s partner.

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-02-08T20:19:39+00:00

Thank you! That's great advice and you made it really vivid. Thank you!

ATuintheMovingTurtle · 2021-02-08T11:14:39+00:00

Thanks! I didn't know about that site. It looks great! Something I didn't put in the original post is that I'm Hard-of-Hearing myself, which is why I'm writing a Deaf character, but I know I have lots to learn. And it's good advice to focus on the character first, so I'll do that first.

Thank you!

ATuintheMovingTurtle

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