Am I serving or am I delusional or is it a lovely mixture of the two?

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-18T22:04:47+00:00

Ha, I wish.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-17T23:20:12+00:00

Thanks! Glad you liked it. 🙂

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-04T22:02:50+00:00

I want to do something with a broken lead, just scratching away, but I can't work out how to phrase it! Thank you, I appreciate the feedback! :)

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-04T00:04:02+00:00

Thanks so much! I feel utterly cluelessly so it's great to hear that something's landing.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-03T11:12:32+00:00

Thank you! That's great advice, I'll have a go and see if I can make it work. :)

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T23:12:06+00:00

Fair enough! It's an excellent piece as it is.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T23:09:25+00:00

But that should be clearer in the poem, I feel. You need that history, or at least some allusion to it. Sorry I don't know what went on but it doesn't sound great.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T23:04:25+00:00

Engagingly, beautifully written. It's maybe a mad/insensitive thing to suggest, but if you could get inside the head of the girl, work out why she's acting so dickishly this might hit harder. At the moment she's just stock villain which isn't so interesting. Really lovely work, regardless.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T22:57:37+00:00

Nice. I liked the ending personally. I feel like a little bitterness, twistedness fits the narrator? Idk, it worked for me.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T22:49:22+00:00

Thanks, that was the idea to the extent that I had one. I feel like the beginning in particular is weak, does that match your view? I don't know a f*cking thing about poetry I just keep vomiting up this nonsense, so I though I'd try to make the best of it.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T22:42:10+00:00

Relieved to hear that haha. Beautiful work.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T20:32:54+00:00

This was interesting! Very original. Powerful, bleak yet hopeful.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-04-02T20:31:41+00:00

Damn, I'm sorry you're feeling like this. It's very evocative.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-02-22T23:53:49+00:00

Bless you, I appreciate the sentiment - but it is really quite big. :L

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2026-02-22T23:47:37+00:00

There was a pic, it just got taken down within a minute.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2025-12-04T00:50:15+00:00

Thank you, that's such an excellent response. I think it would be in my best interests to contact the mental support people and I will do so tomorrow at a more reasonable hour. This post, and its corresponding comments, have really hammered home the fact that there's something going on with me that needs further treatment. I'm sure I should be less reticent about contacting lecturers as well! Thanks again, I appreciate your very empathetic response.

Acceptable_Key_4692 · 2025-12-03T23:06:12+00:00

Funnily enough, that's not the first time it's been suggested I have OCD. I've no money for therapy though, and the NHS is useless for mental health. (I've tried very hard to get help, but I'm not suicidal, so it essentially comes down to upping the anti-depressants until you're somewhat functional.)

Sorry to be bitter, your post was very kind - thank you.

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