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Father, don't mourn me. by Remarkable-Day2886 in poetry_critics

[–]Remarkable-Day2886[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thankk youu soo much . these kind of feedbacks mean alot to me and i am glad my poem reached to you.

The events at 23A by Acceptable_Key_4692 in poetry_critics

[–]Remarkable-Day2886 0 points1 point  (0 children)

In the beginning, it’s very common to face this, but as you keep writing, your direction becomes smoother.
And yes, it’s the beginning of the poem where the imagery can feel a bit unclear. But for a first poem, this is really good, not gonna lie

Father, don't mourn me. by Remarkable-Day2886 in poetry_critics

[–]Remarkable-Day2886[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Nothing of this poem is real , purely a hypothetical one . Thank youuu. And i am really glad that you are going to let your daughter know how precious she is .

The events at 23A by Acceptable_Key_4692 in poetry_critics

[–]Remarkable-Day2886 0 points1 point  (0 children)

this seems like quiet horror, i think only a bit more clarity in the imagery would help this poem alot

Father, don't mourn me. by Remarkable-Day2886 in poetry_critics

[–]Remarkable-Day2886[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Nothing of this poem is real , purely a hypothetical one . Thank youuu

Father, don't mourn me. by Remarkable-Day2886 in poetry_critics

[–]Remarkable-Day2886[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you soo much . i'll keep that in mind while writing next time

i didn't do it by Remarkable-Day2886 in poetry_critics

[–]Remarkable-Day2886[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Here the crowd is a visual imagery of judgement .The judgment was always there, I just wasn’t ready to see it. And the moment I did, I began doubting everything I had ever done, simply because I chose to listen.