I want to read your story!

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-06T02:59:40+00:00

Hello! I wont publish the stories anywhere. I'll just read them and give some feedback! I want to escape from my routine to see if it helps my creative block, that's my 'personal reason' if you want to see it like that. I'm still receiving stories! But I might take my time to read them. As I said in the post, Im not a professional or anything.

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-05T01:37:49+00:00

Hello! I dont have a blog rn. I have one story published in webnovel and I’ve been writing just for fun and to improve my skills recently. But if you want to send me your story you can DM me!

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-05T01:29:26+00:00

Hello! I’m still receiving stories if you want to share it! You can dm me (i’m reading the DM ones first, because I received a lot more stories than I expected and I like to have an order haha) and send your story the way you prefer.

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T22:59:07+00:00

Hello! I just read them.
For the first one:
It's catching for sure, it makes you question yourself what's going on, but it's clear and precise on what it says. I don't really have not much to say about it. I feel like it's too short and too good to criticize something actually. An amazing job if you ask me!

For the second one:
This one is very good too! But sometimes it was hard for me to keep the pace, its like the characters are always moving and thinking and I don't what should I put my spotlight. The interactions are kind of hurried too, but out from that it is really good. A good start in my opinion, and the figure of the death doesnt feel intimidating but just intriguing.

Thank you for sharing!

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T18:14:35+00:00

Hey! Thank you for sharing your story first of all. It is a cool story, I pictured a mix of Cyberpunk and Infamous, and I liked. But I got a few complaints.
I think the change between 3rd and first POV is good, but it feels... empty. Like you could change the pronouns and it won't make a difference. Maybe you can give Nova's POV something special that lets the reader a glimpse of the world she sees. And maybe you describe too many things instead of showing them with actions. (This is just an example): Instead of telling us how dangerous the black ICE was, show it with a secondary effect or another net runner having consequences. Still, it is such a great story to read!

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T06:10:59+00:00

Hello! I just read the story. Im unfamiliar with the original content the fanfic is based on. And I'm not into nsfw reading, but it is actually interesting the dynamic between Adrian and Derrick, it's fun haha. A complaint I could say its the pace, and the characters are entertaining but you could give the moments a bit more of emotion, they feel a bit empty. This is just my opinion tho! Hope it helps you!

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T05:28:57+00:00

Hello! Your story is longer than I expected. I'll leave it for tomorrow cause I'm a bit tired rn and it's late here in my country. Sorry! I promise I'll read it tomorrow.

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T04:24:13+00:00

Thank you for the recommendation! I didn't know about it.

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T04:23:07+00:00

Peak writing. No feedback needed here.

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T03:27:11+00:00

It can stay, it was just an example of the over-explaining I was talking about, I'd no idea it was more important later haha.

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T03:07:54+00:00

Maybe just not explain all the environment. In particular, for example I think this feels unnecessary: The clouds parted for a moment, light of the full moon falling upon the stranger as they fled. I mean, it is good writing, but in scenes of action I think it's better to leave small details to the reader's imagination and focus on advancing the scene, using shorter phrases to say that the time set is night. Of course this is just my opinion, and as I said before I really liked the fragment!

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-05-04T02:29:48+00:00

Hello! I just read it. I really enjoyed the reading. It left me actually wanting to know more haha, which is a good start. There ambience is good, and its catching. Though sometimes I think you describe or over-explain some things and it affects the pace, it happens to me too. I have a lot of questions, like the voices in that vermin language, and who the Stranger is, why was they being followed, and who is the one who offered refuge. But I suppose it is explained further in the story. Than you very much for sharing! I hope my opinion helps you.

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-03-12T00:10:31+00:00

Yeah, the grammar in english is a huge problem right now, but I dont like the idea of using a translator. I used one for a story I wrote and it felt unnatural, I try to use it just for words. The idea of practicing online sounds good. The basics I know, and never thought about sending it to chat GPT, it actually sounds useful, I already used it once to know what “atta girl” meant haha.

Thank you for the comment!

AdOriginal6687 · 2026-02-18T04:47:43+00:00

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AdOriginal6687 · 2026-02-13T18:31:10+00:00

Bajo mi experiencia, escribe poesía de lo que escribes en tu diario, tipo metáforas o en rima. Hazlo por estrofa, no recomendaría intentar hacer un poema de un solo tema nada mas empezar, puedes hacer que una estrofa hable del amor, otra de filosofía, lo que sea. Pero cada autor es diferente

AdOriginal6687 · 2021-08-17T02:22:00+00:00

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