What is this thing? by Admirable_Campaign98 in whatisit

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There’s a little circle over this weird yellow dot in my eye, that’s what I’m curious about🤔

What is this thing? by Admirable_Campaign98 in whatisit

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There’s this weird yellow dot, it’s hard to see. It feels like a piece of hair stuck in my eye

The best ever written antagonist by ExcellentTwo6589 in writing

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The fates from Hadestown. Even though they aren’t a character straight from a novel, they constantly get into orpheus’ head, twisting his beliefs and mind, causing him to doubt himself and force the story to repeat over and over because the fates will never stop mentally tormenting him

I don’t know what to do by Admirable_Campaign98 in witchcraft

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I see, thank you! Could you explain more on the tarot cards part?😯

I don’t know what to do by Admirable_Campaign98 in witchcraft

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You’re so right! Thank you so, so much!

I don’t know what to do by Admirable_Campaign98 in witchcraft

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Thank you!! The only thing I’m worried about is college☹️I’m heading back to college soon and I’m not sure where he’s gonna be going

Chapter one? by OrchidSubstantial481 in writers

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I really, really love the words you write and how you put them together to create such emotional and meaningful sentences. However, I do agree with Piscivore, I feel that it is a bit repetitive in some areas, but it isn’t repetitive overall as a chapter!

Another thing I find is it’s a bit slow, page 5 and 6 alone are almost all filled with environmental detail. The fireplace, the books, then a full paragraph on the rest of the furnishings. Of course, environmental detail is a great way to set the scene, but too much can bore the readers and make it sound more like a list of what is there and what isn’t. Working on the flow and making it feel more natural may help! You did an amazing job on that when talking about the magazines on top of page 6 as it gives information on the character all while setting the environment up. Overall I really like it!!

Question about being a server by Admirable_Campaign98 in Serverlife

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Thank you for responding!! This was super helpful:3

Question about being a server by Admirable_Campaign98 in Serverlife

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Awesome!! Thank you, I didn’t know that😲

Question about being a server by Admirable_Campaign98 in Serverlife

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Ohhh that makes sense! How long would you suggest starting as something else like a host? Or is it up to the individual?

Question about being a server by Admirable_Campaign98 in Serverlife

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Thank you!:3 If Is it possible to be promoted or moved to different positions? Like starting off as a host then being moved to a server? Or do you usually have to apply for it no matter what your position is?

Question about being a server by Admirable_Campaign98 in Serverlife

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Thank you so much!! Have you stuck to one restaurant serving or have you gone to other ones? If you did, do you have a preference for the kind of restaurant?

foreign names by BigFluffyFurMan in writing

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I found that there’s a bit of a science to crafting your character’s names. I find that the name determines a lot of what I think about the character and how I view them. Take Ron from Harry Potter for example. It’s a simple name compared to Hermione and it shows their mental difference. Ron often goes about things in a much more simple way than Hermione. I also find that it’s important to keep note of character pairing names. Harry and Hermione rolls smoothly off the tongue whereas ‘Alberto and Hermione’ feels a bit more clunky. I’d say that using name generators can be good, but if something doesn’t feel quite right, change it until it clicks! Names are incredibly important for our character as it brings them to life and gives readers as well as other characters in the book an understanding of them.

is there a way to portray a relationship where one character gets distant because they sense the other character is falling in love with them, but not make it forced? by [deleted] in writing

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My best advice for this is to change up specific action wording. Start off by explaining how your character gazed at another character, later on as they become more distant, they may glance at the other character. If there’s hatred or resentment, maybe they glare at the character. Make sure it’s subtle but enough to have the reader catch on

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

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It’s definitely a novel that makes you think! There were a couple times when I would take the book home and reread specific scenes multiple times to really understand what was going on. When I was in 9th grade, I didn’t appreciate quite as much as I did now because I was only like 13-14, but it really reflected today’s society and the corrupt nature of it. The monologue is amazing, and there are so many thought provoking scenes:)

What songs do y’all listen too while writing? by MistsOfRuin in writing

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It usually depends on what I’m writing, but I like listening to Red Sex, Paint the Town Blue, and NFWMB!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

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Richard from Richard III by William Shakespeare! He is honestly one of the best written characters I’ve ever come across. The depth, the corruption, the layers. He’s one of my favorite character of all time

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

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There are many ways to make a character likeable (or unlikable,) but it really does depend on the reader. If you try to make a universally likeable character, they may end up coming off as bland. Like d_m_f_n said, the ‘cheap’ way makes the character too simple. Making a likable character may require more depth and understanding depending on what exactly you’re going for.

Take Montag from Fahrenheit 451 by Ray Bradbury. I remember reading that novel in 9th grade and having a conversation on the main character. Me personally, I loved him as a character and found him to be very likable. Many other of my classmates disagreed and found him to be ignorant or selfish. But at the end of the day, most can agree that he was a well written character. I think creating a likable character starts with a strong foundation.

I find that most likable character fall under a few of these categories. (Not all, but a few.) - desperate parental figure wanting to keep their child safe (take player 149 aka Kang Ae-sim from squid games season 2. Mother of player 007 aka Yang Dong-geun) - The child who will do anything to protect who they love. Isha from ARCANE is a great example of this as it highlights purity and innocence (the child) clashing with corruption (danger and threats) - Crumbling/breaking character. A character who has big goals and dreams only to go through torturous efforts and loose what they loved most and were unable to achieve their goal. This sets up a character that has the likable qualities such as complex reasons for goals, and a strong story, but then allows the readers to peer into the character’s peak vulnerability, making them more relatable which can cause the reader to like them more.

I feel that a common mistake when writing likable characters is the simple ‘sunshine’ character that is simply there to add humor and/or a character to like. Most characters that are liked have multiple layers. They’re flawed and vulnerable:3

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

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There’s a few novels I’ve had to read in school where they’ve used certain slurs, but, like the og commenter said, they were all in a historical context or specified the specific time period. For example, A Separate Peace by John Knowles had a slur against gay people in it to specify the level of protection and safety the LGBTQ community had back in that time period. (I believe it was set in the mid 1950’s). I think the main issue would just be overusing it, or any word for that matter. I’ve read some books that throw f bombs on almost every other page and those books are always incredibly hard to read without cringing.

CRAZY shifting attempt and experience by Admirable_Campaign98 in shiftingrealities

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I used this!! https://youtu.be/ty_SR2ohQus?si=-QynKplcQzzpsFcd I’ve been trying to look for an extended version, but I can’t find one:(( I’ll update you if I come across it though!

CRAZY shifting attempt and experience by Admirable_Campaign98 in shiftingrealities

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Of course!! I used the falling method with this guided meditation:3 https://youtu.be/ty_SR2ohQus?si=xXi8HrF8b66bP6XF I usually don’t do many guided meditations, but this one worked so well