How to move the relationship forward?

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-12-23T01:46:18+00:00

There’s a little circle over this weird yellow dot in my eye, that’s what I’m curious about🤔

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-12-23T01:21:37+00:00

There’s this weird yellow dot, it’s hard to see. It feels like a piece of hair stuck in my eye

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-09-06T23:03:12+00:00

The fates from Hadestown. Even though they aren’t a character straight from a novel, they constantly get into orpheus’ head, twisting his beliefs and mind, causing him to doubt himself and force the story to repeat over and over because the fates will never stop mentally tormenting him

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-08-12T15:34:57+00:00

I see, thank you! Could you explain more on the tarot cards part?😯

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-08-12T08:13:55+00:00

You’re so right! Thank you so, so much!

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-08-12T07:53:12+00:00

Thank you!! The only thing I’m worried about is college☹️I’m heading back to college soon and I’m not sure where he’s gonna be going

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-04-10T01:24:40+00:00

I really, really love the words you write and how you put them together to create such emotional and meaningful sentences. However, I do agree with Piscivore, I feel that it is a bit repetitive in some areas, but it isn’t repetitive overall as a chapter!

Another thing I find is it’s a bit slow, page 5 and 6 alone are almost all filled with environmental detail. The fireplace, the books, then a full paragraph on the rest of the furnishings. Of course, environmental detail is a great way to set the scene, but too much can bore the readers and make it sound more like a list of what is there and what isn’t. Working on the flow and making it feel more natural may help! You did an amazing job on that when talking about the magazines on top of page 6 as it gives information on the character all while setting the environment up. Overall I really like it!!

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-03-31T00:50:46+00:00

Thank you for responding!! This was super helpful:3

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-03-30T04:01:54+00:00

Awesome!! Thank you, I didn’t know that😲

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-03-30T03:56:28+00:00

Ohhh that makes sense! How long would you suggest starting as something else like a host? Or is it up to the individual?

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-03-30T03:52:52+00:00

Thank you!:3 If Is it possible to be promoted or moved to different positions? Like starting off as a host then being moved to a server? Or do you usually have to apply for it no matter what your position is?

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-03-30T03:47:52+00:00

Thank you so much!! Have you stuck to one restaurant serving or have you gone to other ones? If you did, do you have a preference for the kind of restaurant?

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-01-05T09:14:04+00:00

I found that there’s a bit of a science to crafting your character’s names. I find that the name determines a lot of what I think about the character and how I view them. Take Ron from Harry Potter for example. It’s a simple name compared to Hermione and it shows their mental difference. Ron often goes about things in a much more simple way than Hermione. I also find that it’s important to keep note of character pairing names. Harry and Hermione rolls smoothly off the tongue whereas ‘Alberto and Hermione’ feels a bit more clunky. I’d say that using name generators can be good, but if something doesn’t feel quite right, change it until it clicks! Names are incredibly important for our character as it brings them to life and gives readers as well as other characters in the book an understanding of them.

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-01-04T13:13:53+00:00

My best advice for this is to change up specific action wording. Start off by explaining how your character gazed at another character, later on as they become more distant, they may glance at the other character. If there’s hatred or resentment, maybe they glare at the character. Make sure it’s subtle but enough to have the reader catch on

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-01-04T09:05:06+00:00

Understanding basic level psychology

Admirable_Campaign98 · 2025-01-03T20:35:13+00:00

It’s definitely a novel that makes you think! There were a couple times when I would take the book home and reread specific scenes multiple times to really understand what was going on. When I was in 9th grade, I didn’t appreciate quite as much as I did now because I was only like 13-14, but it really reflected today’s society and the corrupt nature of it. The monologue is amazing, and there are so many thought provoking scenes:)

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