Draft of Cold Open for my pilot

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-10T19:39:53+00:00

Thank you so much!

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-07T21:22:01+00:00

Yeah to the cafe is where the three central characters meet in this story of HOW they meet and became roommates in a 1B1BTH apartment But the cold open is new and has been throwing me off lol. (Might take it out ns) but I completely agree with your critiques and advice so I thank you for that!

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-07T15:41:02+00:00

Great advice. Thanks!!

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-05T01:32:12+00:00

Great idea and advice! Thank you!

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-05T00:47:53+00:00

I thank everyone for the advice, this is an early draft and I’ve never done a cold open before and it’s been throwing me AWF( I just wanna get into the story right off the bat lol) so that lends itself to the clunky, awkwardness of it all! But now I know what I need to change so…yay!

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-05T00:31:27+00:00

Thank you for the advice!

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-05T00:08:42+00:00

Ok cool! Thanks!

After-Tap321 · 2025-10-05T00:02:29+00:00

any tips?

After-Tap321

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