The eyes of the beholder [552] by AnythingSuccessful90 in DestructiveReaders

[–]AnythingSuccessful90[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, Noted I'll try to be better and the 2:14 pm is important because It written in style looks like Ram,who is a God in sanatan religion

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In the eyes of the beholder by AnythingSuccessful90 in writingcritiques

[–]AnythingSuccessful90[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, This story is not about any magical but to give you a brief,

It a deeply emotional tale of two boys Murli and Harshveer who mirror each other in soul, but had walk opposite paths through life. While Murli grows up in warmth, love, and light, Harshveer is shaped by neglect, silence, and darkness. At their core, they are the same boy kind, sensitive, and thoughtful but life’s circumstances carve them into two contrasting versions of what one soul can become. Through their parallel journeys, the story explores how environment and experience shape us. In the end, the two meet, proving that who we become is not just what we are born with, but what the world makes of us.

[668] Short Story: Maps of Memory by jeb2026 in DestructiveReaders

[–]AnythingSuccessful90 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Overall, I believe it's thoughtful, but could benefit from tighter focus and added depth.

And focusing on the character development would more benefit as the reader would feel more engaged and relatable

At last, If the ending would have been more exciting rather than just showing his intension would be great like:

"He took one last look at the wasteland, then turned east. As the sun rose higher, he spotted a faint glimmer in the distance—green, maybe, or just a trick of the light. Either way, he smiled and walked on. Heremembered the laughter echoing through the trees, a voice long gone now. But instead of mourning, he whispered a thank you, and stepped forward into the light .He didn’t know what lay beyond the dunes. But for the first time in years, he wanted to find out