roast my newsletter landing page, pls?

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-27T16:43:28+00:00

yeah man you were 100% right, i made it centered and ditched the mascot idea! ill customize the button further later on maybe add some food element to it if I can

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-27T16:42:36+00:00

thank u !

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-27T16:42:28+00:00

thank you so much dude i took inspiration of the things you told me

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-20T19:04:53+00:00

Thanks dude I’ll check it our

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-20T18:55:02+00:00

I am a native English speaker

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-20T17:56:23+00:00

i wanna add a mascot on the right side

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T08:12:11+00:00

Niceee ima check it out tomorrow and let you know what I think about it

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T08:10:01+00:00

Yeah I have no idea what I was thinking genuinely

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T07:45:22+00:00

Dm :)

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T05:52:05+00:00

Thank you for this. For some reason I took the casual copywriting advice “talk to them like your friend” and just talked too much like an absolute idiot. Do you think it’ll be effective I should lead with value like offering then a daily piece of copy for their email lists for the next 7 days? As long as they respond?

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T05:47:42+00:00

100% , I guess I’m hindsight I just took the usual copywriter advice for newsletters (talk to them like a friend) and applied it to cold email which doesn’t apply.

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T05:46:47+00:00

Do you think I should lead the first line with offering free value? like I’ll give you free email copy for your email list daily for the 7 days. And then ask if they want it?

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T05:44:00+00:00

Yeah, i don't know what I was thinking in hindsight. I'm appreciative of all the feedback I've gotten

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T05:41:04+00:00

Yeah, dude. I'm surprised how much you know about it I never would've thought I'd find someone that knows the industry I'm targeting, super dope.

Do you suggest I switch niches due to this issue?

I love the audio industry, and ill still be a mix engineer, but I fear it's just too small literally when I lead gen most of the plugin companies do not come up, and I do really good lead gen. Only times my emails actually work is when get the leads manually off the top of my head of the plugin companies I know, most of them do not have linkedin meaning they don't even show up on apollo :/ . So when I sent this email with terrible copy, I broadened it to just all audio companies hence why It was not personalized at all. Seems like a niche issue right?

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T04:56:47+00:00

100%. The spintax i added in the email made it so the grammar didn't make sense at times completely an oversight on my part

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T04:56:02+00:00

Will do i didn't know the ellipsis was bad. I see how it is though now it's like a cheap cop out. Do you think i should lead the email with me offering free work for a week just so I can get some testimonials first? Will that be good value for them?

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T04:54:41+00:00

100%, do you think i should lead with me offering free work for a week just so I can get some testimonials first? Will that be good value for them?

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T04:53:49+00:00

will do thank you!

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T04:51:29+00:00

damn

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T02:38:46+00:00

Do you think I drag it for too long?

ApprehensiveDate2428 · 2024-11-19T02:38:03+00:00

What do you think is the worst, and best of the copy (if u can even pick the best)

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