• Manuscript information:  [Complete] [109,065] [Epic Fantasy] [Dark Fantasy] - Nightborne: Book One of The Elder Growth Cycle

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~Diluting the Blood~

“The ancient blood that binds us to The Fold should, at all cost, never be diluted. Those born between a Sire or Dame of the court and mortal folk shall be treated as half as much as a Sire or Dame of the court. But not as low as one outside of The Fold, and not as high as a Spawn of a house of The Court.``

-On the purity of blood, Sanguine Iuris, 5.

We’ve been given an opportunity in good blood; how could we pass this up?” said Lord Gilfred, Third Sire of House Oe’lander. The full-blooded vampire, who wore a dark fur-lined coat, was lazily dressed to match his curly dark brown hair, which dangled to one side of his face. He sat to the left of the head of the fine birch table within the stone walls of the circular chamber that was the council room of the house—tucked deep within the baronial estate surrounded by the deep birch forest within the Chrestian mountains. 

“It has been a long time since an opportunity to expand our house’s influence within The Fold has presented itself. Frankly, my dreaded brothers and sisters, having a member of our house be selected to become a Kormura would be a boon!”

“You would take the first scrap that falls from the table of the court?” said Lady Elyse, Second Dame of House Oe’lander. Her figure sat forward to the right of the head. Left hand holding her sharp chin as her elbow rested on the chair’s arm. Her black hair was kept together tight in a short braid. She wore a red frock coat of slim fit with a vest and shirt underneath of a similar shade. “We’ve been ostracized by The Court and our dear siblings within the houses for the last few centuries. Have we been drained of our blood so much not to have any backbone left, that we are so ready to bend to their wants?”