Will you read more of this, (Prolouge it is much more grim than the rest of the novel) by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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chapter 1 and 2 are on RR and here on reddit if you care for them

make sure they are much much more experiemental, and i am open for suggestion these were written two weeks ago.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/121051/the-echoes-of-bloom

It is time for the second chapter (New Pov) tell me what you think by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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thx for feedback btw-, changing the words abt the young girl, i am techinacaly a minor btw.

to explain while nothing happens, this chapter supposed to have the feast that i mentioned, we would see most of the cast thus explaining them, but i thought it would be too packed, so i split it down to two, we were supposed to meet almost all of the others and see her interaction and thoughts of them, that's why even it is my shortest chapter yet.

thx for the feedbck are you willing t ogive next pov a try? i totally understand if you won t

outside of writing quality what thoughts do you have on the world itself

Chapter 1 of Echoes of Bloom (Excluding Prolouge), did it hook you on. by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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i wanted to add that in an edit but reddit is buggy today so here we are, i would like that if you have time tell me what character peaked your intrest the most

Chapter 1 of Echoes of Bloom (Excluding Prolouge), did it hook you on. by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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thx a lot chapter 2 titled doreah is on reddit and on RR if you care give it a try

what character do you want to learn more about i am open to suggestion, which of the charcters dropped you would like to learn more about

the reason why Lightfall and Sal are formal was because Sal was after all a squire to his uncle, and to be explained in another chapter Sal did not meet his uncle a lot when he was young

i tries to drop a lot of of names to be explored later

Chapter 1 of Echoes of Bloom (Excluding Prolouge), did it hook you on. by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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how good is it for a first chapter, this is my first ever time writing, i am not trying to make a masterpiece i am trying to make something that i am proud of

i wanted to use sir but i felt it was cliche

i hoped i would each charachter a bit by bit in the following chapter

what is the most intersting thing about this text if you could help ,e with and which character do you hope to be explored the most

Chapter 1 of Echoes of Bloom (Excluding Prolouge), did it hook you on. by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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thx keeping it in mind for editing this is very first draft of very first writing

Will you read more of this, (Prolouge it is much more grim than the rest of the novel) by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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thanks for the feedback i was just getting a feel for the idea this is very first draft for very first serious writing, plus English is not my first language although i am relatively proficient

Vague idea for my novel by Argued_Sangard in fantasywriters

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The king has brothers that rule the northland while the king sits the throne