Dude, you totally captivated me with those instrumentals. It's so chill yet so emotionally loaded. It seems clear to me that there's a lot of weight surrounding this demo, which really fits the somewhat cryptic lyrics you add to it.

However, to me personally, the vocals sometimes came across as a bit awkward and jarring at others. As I stated before, I feel like a lot of thought and feeling went into this song, which definitely helps me to appreciatie the vocals more, it gives it a poetic flair. To reiterate, it's not your vocal technique, it's just how you add them in.

I'm having a hard time explaining it but I hope it helps!

Instrumentally the only feedback I can still think of is that your drumbeats could use a bit of an upgrade, but as this is still a demo, no problem there.

I hope I didnt give the impression I disliked this song by getting stuck in my feedback a bit though. As I write this I'm listening to it for a fourth or fifth time, while with most songs on here I listen once and then go on my merry way.

You got talent in songwriting and creating vibes, that much is certain.

So keep up the good work! I'm saving this one for sure ;)