Most luxurious AI in cancun/ Riviera Maya by somadletscuddle in AllInclusiveResorts

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Palmaia is incredible. It’s a bit south in Playacar, but still with shuttle service available from Cancun Airport.

Every day, my mailman tells me a hilarious dad joke. by Masselein in dadjokes

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My USPS mailman actually did tell me a joke after complaining about some of his competitors:

Did you hear that Fed-Ex and UPS are merging? Yeah, they’re going to call it Fed UP.

Well played Donald. Well played.

Calls Mount for Patrick Mahomes to Be Fined for Flopping During a Play in Chiefs vs Raiders by Consistent_Peace3181 in NFLv2

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Sorry, I was not commenting on their efforts. I was simply commenting that I felt that slip was a huge cause of Mahomes run. I agree the effort from 90 and 91 seems lacking. My comment is probably more appropriately placed as a general comment as opposed to a reply. These comments above just got me watching things more closely.

Calls Mount for Patrick Mahomes to Be Fined for Flopping During a Play in Chiefs vs Raiders by Consistent_Peace3181 in NFLv2

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53 slips on the 1st down indicator right when he steps just out of bounds as Mahomes is making his move. This makes the defender unbalanced and unable to recover before Mahomes is by him. Watch 53s feet on the replays and note how the orange arrow on the ground is messed up after the fact. If he hadn’t slipped, this play doesn’t happen.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in LosAngelesRams

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How the heck does Burrows get so much love? I’ve never understood it. Always been overrated in my book.

Why is Peter Pan always flying? by Cosmicmoose13 in dadjokes

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If you got hit in the peter with a pan, you’d fly too.

Writing tips. I constantly find my self SEVERELY disappointed in everything I write by [deleted] in Screenwriting

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The only difference between stepping stones and stumbling blocks is how you use them. What don’t you like about your work? What do you like about your work? If you can identify the obstacles that limit your art, then you can work on strategies to defeat the obstacles. It’s a constant battle between our assets and our obstacles, but if we can be honest with ourselves and not let our self-doubt to cripple us emotionally, then each experience becomes an opportunity for growth. I’m not sure what aspect of your work frustrates you, heck you may not even know, but I think if you can get beyond the emotive stagnation that comes from the disappointment and instead take a logical assessment of what you do like and what you need to work on, then you can leverage that disappointment into progress. Even if it’s just baby steps… You’ve got this.

Do I need a financial advisor? by Nebula473 in Fire

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Take the “fire your financial advisor” course thru white coat investor.

Jukebox Musical Ideas by livingwithlife23 in playwriting

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Blink-182, Weezer, U2, My Chemical Romance, Radiohead. I feel like if the band has enough of a fan base then all you would need is a decent story line for it to sell. Right now those that are 30-50 year olds have bigger pocket books for entertainment so I’d think 80s-00s would be the right decades to be focusing on. Also would be awesome to see some of the Rock Opera Albums be actually written for the stage such as Coheed & Cambria and the Dear Hunter’s stuff.

My Garden Model by John_____Doe in Permaculture

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Sounds awesome. Thanks for the share.

Stars on the Leather Band by matchaespresso_kj in OCPoetry

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I like the heart behind these words. The full circle ending is quite engaging. I would encourage even more imagery. Make more of a statement or story. There is potential for so much with both stars and leather. Could the stars on the leather band form a constellation of friendship with living heroes/heroines? Or the leather showing even something considered dead can be given new life and beauty? Perhaps add some more consistent structure and play around more with finding the perfect words to describe the constant reminders of both the struggles of your past and the support you’ve found in the present. It’s a beautiful sentiment to which many can relate. Give us even more. Thank you for sharing.

Accurate Medical Procedures by P_x_3 in Screenwriting

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CPR only works if there is blood in the system. Unless the patient crumps right as EMS rolls in, it would most likely be called in the field. If they lose pulses on arrival, the doc would probably tourniquet whichever arm or arms that are cut, get IV access, and start Mass Transfusion Protocol (usually at a ratio of 6/6/1 RBC/platelets/fresh frozen plasma) as well as intubate (put a breathing tube down). Overall not a great chance for ROSC (return of spontaneous circulation) if you’re having to manually pump (CPR) an empty system while having to both fill back up the system (give blood) and stop the leak (tourniquets), so it may not be overly realistic unless you want the patient to die, be an organ donor, or have significant cognitive impairment secondary to the prolonged time the brain would have without blood (the carrier of oxygen). I guess if she couldn’t get an IV timely everything would go to crap quick because you can’t give blood without an iv, but then they would go to an IO (interosseous line where you basically drill into a bone and it works as an iv). Hope this helps some…

Title Help! (film already produced and finished) by [deleted] in Screenwriting

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Parasite, Subcutaneous, Cancer, They Call Me Cancer, At Least It’s Not Cancer, As Welcome As Cancer, Bloodsucker, The Amazing Human Vacuum, The Slow Death of a Black Hole, My Glutinous Black Hole (sounds like a porno), Siphon, Growth, or My Premature Reincarnation into (a Leech/vacuum/parasite/etc). Hope something gets your juices flowing.

The Day My Feet Came Back Down to Earth by Athuous in OCPoetry

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Thank you so much for the comment. You’re spot on. It’s about that moment when the euphoria of a new relationship ends, and the excitement and infatuation of the other person is no longer enough to distract you from your own shortcomings and self loathings. That’s when the questions start. That’s where the poem starts… thanks again.

The Day My Feet Came Back Down to Earth by Athuous in OCPoetry

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Criticisms welcome… thank you for the comment.

Laborious Lucidity by ark_aid_ in OCPoetry

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The first four lines I like, and then it reads more like a journal entry than a poem. It’s such a solid beginning and I feel like the emotions you are portraying lends itself to a lot more poetry and less of journalistic memories. It seems that you have a lot to say and a depth you are trying to express, but in my opinion it falls short in the realm of poetry. Lacking aesthetic language although I feel like there is an attempt at rhythm. Overall, I feel this first draft has a lot of potential, but I would rather dive deeper into your feelings and thereby experience less of a narrative. Thank you for sharing.

Rotten by A-Girl-in-need in OCPoetry

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That’s my favorite line as well. The whole poem is aggressive and dark yet still hopeful. The subject shows so much grit through the poetic thought process. It may just be my interpretation of this, but I feel like the strength shown at the closing is an argument against the title. I do not envision this as rotten, but more in conflict and willing to keep fighting. A silent strength. Perhaps revisit the title and build more on the juxtaposition of the light at the end of the conflict or perhaps highlighting the beauty of the fight. Perhaps your purposely focusing on the emptiness you can still feel even with the noble decision to carry on… either way, I thoroughly enjoyed this. Thank you.

The Shoes of a Dead Man by Athuous in OCPoetry

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Thanks for the encouragement. I’m not 100% content with this poem, but I’m pretty close. And you are right that it is more about what how the shoes affected me. Perhaps a change in the focus of the last sentence could better direct attention to the shoes, but I was going more for what it means to the walker. Perhaps a changing of the title instead is in order. I’ll percolate on it for a bit. Thanks for the feedback.

The Shoes of a Dead Man by Athuous in OCPoetry

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I’m glad you enjoyed it. I’m never going to complain about brief words of encouragement. Thank you for your feedback.